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Review of chapter "Epilogue" from BinarySobriquet
Review:
Great story, but all the incest and prepubescent sex was deeply, deeply disturbing. Serious, WTF?
Comments from author:
They were using the essence of an evil god for power. Things are bound to get a bit crazy.
Review By [BinarySobriquet] • Date [20 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from AlexanderCorvin
Review:
I have to say, this was a very interesting story. A few parts I might not like (but they are minor).

One major question I have, and I've noticed it in a few of your other stories (save one I'm about to mention by name) is the 'passage of time'. There's no clear indication exactly how much time has elapsed. The only one you 'show' this in is Exiled Xander and its sequel Mystic Dawns Army (I don't mean in the story, but like a date or something...)

Just curious, thanks and keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Buffy was a bit muddy as for time, sometimes we had holidays... but typically there wasn't that many dates... we had dates things aired... which didn't always line up.. sometimes we had months... it was a bit wishy-washy. A lot of my stuff will be the same way, some I've made an effort to narrow it down and some I haven't... :)
Review By [AlexanderCorvin] • Date [27 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Genuka
Review:
*shakes head* Truly insane but amazingly well balanced. It was fun!
Comments from author:
I tried to keep things semi logical for the tossed together world. It was a fun story to write for the most part.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [21 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from removedauthor
Review:
Awesome ending to an even more awesome story. I look forward to the next story you write or if you restart one of your old stories you haven't finished yet.
Comments from author:
I'm not sure. I'm playing with a Harry Potter story that might go somewhere... but I'm not sure where. I don't think it will end up here. I'll probably try to work on some old stuff eventually. So we'll see.
Review By [removedauthor] • Date [20 Oct 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Pitbull
Review:
Great job completing the story! I did get a bit lost with all the worlds in the story LOL.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I didn't do a very good job of giving each world a name. That's one of the problems with something like that.
Review By [Pitbull] • Date [17 Oct 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Era
Review:
This just got more weird and harder to follow the further in you got - then it ended.

To me it feels like it derailed around the time where you started including all the mirror worlds etc. Would have been more interesting to see the original group with their original powers/powerups dealing with the WoT world they initially got to.

Still, thanks for writing and sharing.
Comments from author:
I'm sorry that it was getting hard to follow. I think that was my issue with it. I should have figured out a naming scheme... or I should have left the other worlds alone... except if I had left them alone it would have been stupid of them. Recruiting in the mirror worlds made sense. As for the over powered nature of things... I had a plot idea for invading demons lords... and preparing for that sort of broke the main thread. It didn't work out as well as I would have liked.

Still thanks for enjoying this writing experience.
Review By [Era] • Date [17 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Wonderful ending to a great story!

Thanks,

Tom.
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [17 Oct 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Sdarian
Review:
This was pretty fun.

It would be neat to see a version of this where they didn't have this many advantages and had to work to clean just the one world of the Dark leftovers, instead of the overpowered everything this story had. Maybe something to work on later.

Good luck!
Comments from author:
The story for the most part met the goals I set when I started, playing with the mirror worlds, cheating like bandits with various ter'angreal... that sort of thing. As for writing a less over powered version, I might touch on that at some point but it's not likely.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Sdarian] • Date [17 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from lordamnesia
Review:
Super well done! I loved it, thanks for the story!
Comments from author:
Thanks, I'm glad that you enjoyed it.
Review By [lordamnesia] • Date [17 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from shakeval
Review:
well i'm seeing that a bunch of other people have mentioned this or that thing you seemed to miss or they wished you fleshed out a bit more before ending. . . i was just wondering what happened with that hedge wizard that had a guild chasing him across dimensions. . . was kinda hoping there would be an interesting chapter or three involving that possible story arc, maybe some other time when you get the urge you could do a side story or two involving this and some other unspoken loose ends.
Comments from author:
I plan to do some side story stuff to tie up some lose ends. Tales to Joyce and all that... the story of Richard... the capture of the forsaken maybe... I'm not sure exactly what format I'll use.
Review By [shakeval] • Date [17 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Bluesnowman
Review:
Great as always
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [Bluesnowman] • Date [16 Oct 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from WCSII
Review:
I'm not exactly sure how I feel about the rush to end this one. I mean yeah, you were S(t)u(e)'ing this one big time... but it is still interesting to see how you break reality to help the better choice than the others win, and at the same time wreck everything in their path. And yeah I get that you found something else to write about, and don't like leaving stories unfinished (like that last one)

But I am wondering, if you just couldn't see what else you could do without it descending further into madness (no, not Sparta) or if you just got bored with it utterly destroying any opposition once they reached a certain level of power. Cause there's always the "We're here to fix the mess!" clean out the filth, then realize "Oh crap! Who's going to take care of it now? WHAT!? WHAT DO YOU MEAN US!?"

If you do try another over powered, you should see if you can do sneaky cleaning up messes. I.E. maneuvering people into both taking care of business and coming into power to lead where the others... 'failed'. Might have to outright provide aid on a frequent basis, that may, or may not be anonymous.

(edit)... well, if you're stuck on what you could use to write with.

http://wraithrune.wordpress.com/

The master of writing story ideas, but never going anywhere with them. You've managed to write two stories (one a series even) from Wriathrune's lead. Think you could add to anymore maybe? (there's several, read through 'em and take a pick) I've got some suggestions myself, but they're to big to simply add to a review. (I like to go into details, but I absolutely suck at writing so I don't write often, and only have one story on ff net)
Comments from author:
I'll admit that the ending could have explained things better. I could have went other places with the story.

I'm amused by the idea of having the characters have to clean up the mess that the demon army made. I think exploring that could be a lot of fun.

Sneakily cleaning up messes sounds amusing. Anyways, thanks for the review. I know the ending probably wasn't what you were hoping for.
Review By [WCSII] • Date [16 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from KrisB
Review:
Hmm. I'm generally o.k. with the ending. It was bit more rushed feeling though.

I think that you need to try your hand at having your alts met. There is a part of me that would like some of the lesser screen time gods from this one. Like maybe Xander, Faith, and the Dirty Girls, and them getting a neat elven planar ship to go adventuring on.

I liked how Harry Potter and the echo of the White Witch ended and would like to see them cross abit more. You'd need some sort of naming scheme for all the various alts though.

Ship of the Line, Up up and away had them jumping around abit, but I felt that you got bored with it abit after they got too powerful. They just really didn't have any one really worthy to fight.

I like how Mystic Dawn's army ended up. That Dawn seemed higher powerish maybe around Q level or atleast able to give Q's brand new multiverses to explore.

Gabrielle's reset and the new crew was about what I liked as well as your one with Hermione and the genis.

With Gabrielles you kept the power levels a bit more managable. This set could jump through Buffy worlds and totally cleanse them of various demons. It wouldn't really be fun to read over and over again.

You should pick out a handful of folks from here that are ready to go on a vacation and they met up with some alts in need. I'm of the opinion of Xander, Faith, and a few dozen Dirty Girls. Faith and Xander aren't Hermione, Willow, or Gabrielle. Xander might be able to build some impressive structures now and actually cast a board spectrum of magic and maybe even Sing a little himself, but he and Faith aren't the type to memorize and such everything that they learned. Sure it might be rattling back their in their head, but they'll just try doing things a slightly different way. I figure you could so something along the lines of Xander, Faith, and company either raise an alt Harry or help out their alts for a bit.

Hmm. You've actually done both quite a bit lately. I have several other fandoms that I like to read. Naruto, Ranma, and Negima are the big ones. Maybe have your chosen couple or so vacation on one of their worlds for a bit. Naruto's world is a bit more warlike than what they'd want, but it has 9 near demon lord level entities that they could capture and bound to a tree for gems. You know that could be a fun read where Faith and Xander bitch because they don't have the abilities of making new bodies and transplanting souls and such. They need a set of limits to make it a fun read though.

With Ranma, he and a few friends make more sense to follow along to fight demons rather than stick around in Nermia. Negima has an entire "magical" girls school and a magical world. Blinks. I'm amazed that you haven't dipped into that world, yet.

This Switch Won't Turn Off! is just pure randomness.

Maybe you should actually dip into the world of pokegirls. Actually, I think that you briefly mentioned them with Gabrielle's crew.

Thinking about. I like the idea of Xander wanting to learn how to fight from Ranma along with his daughter. Their big thing is that they only care about perserving Ranma as a teaching resource and maybe convincing him to actually have kids. It could be fun especially if Xander mentions that he has a few friends that might be able to fix that curse he has.

Negima would actually work better if who ever showed up was going to be a teacher, or you decided to send an entire company or so of girls there and they thought the girls from Negi's class were just tame prudes.

Hmm. Negima could be fun if some one Pactios with one of the gods or even the divine children start to match up using that form of magic and you toss out interesting effects mainly due to having divinity on one side of the bond.

Oh well, what ever you come up with next will be fun to read.
Comments from author:
~Hmm. I'm generally o.k. with the ending. It was bit more rushed feeling though.

Yeah, maybe a little.

~I think that you need to try your hand at having your alts met. There is a part of me that would like some of the lesser screen time gods from this one. Like maybe Xander, Faith, and the Dirty Girls, and them getting a neat elven planar ship to go adventuring on.

Xander, Faith and a couple of the Dirty girls might be amusing.

~I liked how Harry Potter and the echo of the White Witch ended and would like to see them cross abit more. You'd need some sort of naming scheme for all the various alts though.

If you know any good schemes... :)

~Ship of the Line, Up up and away had them jumping around abit, but I felt that you got bored with it abit after they got too powerful. They just really didn't have any one really worthy to fight.

That's probably part of it. Other ideas seemed more interesting as well.

~I like how Mystic Dawn's army ended up. That Dawn seemed higher powerish maybe around Q level or atleast able to give Q's brand new multiverses to explore.

And yet they still had some things to work on and such.

~Gabrielle's reset and the new crew was about what I liked as well as your one with Hermione and the genis.

I want to get back to those.

~With Gabrielles you kept the power levels a bit more managable. This set could jump through Buffy worlds and totally cleanse them of various demons. It wouldn't really be fun to read over and over again.

Gabrielle never really had a burning desire to destroy all demons. :) And yeah reading about every world falling... would get old.

~You should pick out a handful of folks from here that are ready to go on a vacation and they met up with some alts in need. I'm of the opinion of Xander, Faith, and a few dozen Dirty Girls. Faith and Xander aren't Hermione, Willow, or Gabrielle. Xander might be able to build some impressive structures now and actually cast a board spectrum of magic and maybe even Sing a little himself, but he and Faith aren't the type to memorize and such everything that they learned. Sure it might be rattling back their in their head, but they'll just try doing things a slightly different way. I figure you could so something along the lines of Xander, Faith, and company either raise an alt Harry or help out their alts for a bit.

That could actually be amusing. I could totally see Xander and Faith going to a Harry world and taking out the problem... as a short fic. :)

~Hmm. You've actually done both quite a bit lately. I have several other fandoms that I like to read. Naruto, Ranma, and Negima are the big ones.

I'm a bit burned out on Harry Potter for a while though. As for Naruto... I never really got into it. Ranma... it's been years and I got tired of the unchanging nature of things... or his inability to kidnap the chef girl and Akane and run. I can't remember enough Negima to write it.

~ Maybe have your chosen couple or so vacation on one of their worlds for a bit. Naruto's world is a bit more warlike than what they'd want, but it has 9 near demon lord level entities that they could capture and bound to a tree for gems. You know that could be a fun read where Faith and Xander bitch because they don't have the abilities of making new bodies and transplanting souls and such. They need a set of limits to make it a fun read though.

Probably true. I'll toss Xander and Faith on the back burner and see what I can come up with.

~With Ranma, he and a few friends make more sense to follow along to fight demons rather than stick around in Nermia.

True, I can see him jumping the chance to explore especially for a chance to break the curse.

~Negima has an entire "magical" girls school and a magical world. Blinks. I'm amazed that you haven't dipped into that world, yet.

I might have to as it could be interesting but it would require me finding more episodes.

~This Switch Won't Turn Off! is just pure randomness.

It's fun though.

~Maybe you should actually dip into the world of pokegirls. Actually, I think that you briefly mentioned them with Gabrielle's crew.

I have before yes. I could see them tossing a lot of pokegirls at the trees... :(

~Thinking about. I like the idea of Xander wanting to learn how to fight from Ranma along with his daughter. Their big thing is that they only care about perserving Ranma as a teaching resource and maybe convincing him to actually have kids. It could be fun especially if Xander mentions that he has a few friends that might be able to fix that curse he has.

That could be amusing.

~Negima would actually work better if who ever showed up was going to be a teacher, or you decided to send an entire company or so of girls there and they thought the girls from Negi's class were just tame prudes.~

The dirty girls really would think that.

~Hmm. Negima could be fun if some one Pactios with one of the gods or even the divine children start to match up using that form of magic and you toss out interesting effects mainly due to having divinity on one side of the bond.

Hmm that could be interesting...

~Oh well, what ever you come up with next will be fun to read.

Hopefully.
Review By [KrisB] • Date [16 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from DragonBard
Review:
Guess you just got burned out on this.

One thing, you forgot to take out the Forsaken first. Ishamael, Aginor, and his friend were the only ones actually killed, with the rest running around doing their own thing.

Would have been interesting to see if Elayne was the reincarnation of Lews Therin's wife, and remembered things.

I'm still not 100% that Lanfear hadn't been tainted by the Shadow when she helped create the Bore.

Did they do anything with the Dark One's prison, now that it's completely empty?

When Faith named her sword, you said "collection over empty magic apples" when it should have been 'collection of empty'

Next, Buffy says 'we had a twenty five,' the 'a' is extra.

Illyria's apple probably allowed her to return to her original Old One form, but keep Fred's influence.

Or maybe a cross between it and Cthulhu.

I would have thought Mat would become a Raven instead of a Fox, but Fox would have been my second guess.

This line reads a bit weird: “No problem. I’ll also start on the light of higher powers that aren’t worth their salt.”

You said Perrin only had to touch a girl and till her pregnant. I think you meant 'will' her pregnant.

I wouldn't be surprised if she wanted to wait until she herself was pregnant the old fashion way before she allowed it.

So Buffy had more kids.

Wouldn't be surprised if Xander had fathered children on all the Scooby girls who weren't lesbians.

Hope to see another new project soon.
Comments from author:
~Guess you just got burned out on this.

It did what it was supposed to do.

~One thing, you forgot to take out the Forsaken first. Ishamael, Aginor, and his friend were the only ones actually killed, with the rest running around doing their own thing.

Yeah, it was in my mental notes to deal with that and I forgot.

~Would have been interesting to see if Elayne was the reincarnation of Lews Therin's wife, and remembered things.

I'm going to go with no. The other way reeks of soul bonds and true love and all that crap.

~I'm still not 100% that Lanfear hadn't been tainted by the Shadow when she helped create the Bore.

Judging from author comments... she was decently screwy before but that probably didn't help.

~Did they do anything with the Dark One's prison, now that it's completely empty?~

They likely cut it apart with gateways and sunk it.

~When Faith named her sword, you said "collection over empty magic apples" when it should have been 'collection of empty'

I'll fix.

~Next, Buffy says 'we had a twenty five,' the 'a' is extra.

Thanks.

~Illyria's apple probably allowed her to return to her original Old One form, but keep Fred's influence.

She gave it to Spike... (which is why get grew.)

~Or maybe a cross between it and Cthulhu.
Amusing.

~I would have thought Mat would become a Raven instead of a Fox, but Fox would have been my second guess.

Yep.

~This line reads a bit weird: “No problem. I’ll also start on the light of higher powers that aren’t worth their salt.”

Yeah... I'll fix it.

~You said Perrin only had to touch a girl and till her pregnant. I think you meant 'will' her pregnant.

Yep.

~I wouldn't be surprised if she wanted to wait until she herself was pregnant the old fashion way before she allowed it.

Yeah... none of that magic stuff for getting her pregnant. :)

~So Buffy had more kids.

Yep.

~Wouldn't be surprised if Xander had fathered children on all the Scooby girls who weren't lesbians.

Likely.

~Hope to see another new project soon.

We'll see how things go.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [16 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from warslick
Review:
I must say that I am much saddened by the conclusion of this story, not by how it ended but that it ended at all. Any chance that you might revisit it sometime and tell some stories about the fight for earth? or Dawn's dragon world? or any other adventures in this world? I do like that Xander got a bit more screen time in the final chapter as he is my favorite character, although I was a little bit surprised that he did not end up with Dawn instead of/in addition to Faith. But any way to put it I loved this work and it will be on my rec list for a very long time.
Comments from author:
I'm not a large fan of endings either. There is a chance that I might revisit the story at some point. Either telling tales about the fight or possibly about Dawn's dragon world. There were some stories in there that I didn't explore as much as I could. As for Xander and screen time, I don't think I used him as much the last couple of chapters as I could have. As for ending up with Dawn... yes.. yes he did. I probably should have written things a bit better to clarify that yeah he ended up with Dawn as well.

I enjoyed the story, it did what I set out to do with it which was to explore a couple of ideas on using the Mirror Worlds for useful things. I'm hoping to come back to the story at some point in a series or something but we'll see.

Thanks for the review and the rec.
Review By [warslick] • Date [16 Oct 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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