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Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from RuneAlpha
Not sure how the rating works, so I'll leave it for now, just know that I love the story so far and can't wait to read more ;) You had mentioned earlier that they were setting up mining stations to begin building shipyards, does that also include orbital stations such as ODP's or perhaps some type of space station facility? Anyways keep up the writing!
Review By [RuneAlpha] • Date [20 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from imortis
This story has promise, only problem is the shard of glass I feel grinding into my heel every time you mention buffy. It makes it extremely hard to keep reading the story.
Review By [imortis] • Date [20 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Absolutely wonderful story so far, I am really enjoying the concept and execution.

Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [5 Dec 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from storiescollector
Enjoying the story, thanks for the latest chapter.
Review By [storiescollector] • Date [3 Dec 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from Vilkath
Bit surprised Xander is forgiving any one really. I mean ever lasting hatred is out, but being part of their life at all is another thing. The worst bit wasn't Buffy shoving him into hell imo, it was the cover up and slandering of his name after wards. Sadly everything about that was pretty believable. Willow quickly went from crushing on Xander to doing what ever Buffy said threw out the series. In later years Willow went more than a tad evil and even stopped listening to Buffy.

Killing your best friend to save your boyfriend is bad, but driving his name into the mud afterwards and making it him look like a jealous idiot is worse. Especially since you can blame the PTB for the shoving him into hell bit but really have nothing but Buffy's own selfish needs to make him seem like anything but a hero doing it.
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [2 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2 - Faith Recon" from Vilkath
Great story so far and I look forward to more. As for the Buffy issue, meh it could of been worked better but it's not totally unbelievable she would do such a thing. She had proven in the show that she was willing to risk other peoples lives for her own selfish needs before, though most of those further down the road.

She was willing to let Joyce run around ignorant of danger for years because she feared her reaction. Sure she got put into a mental hospital the first time, but she completely failed to show any proof of her claims. Proof she could have now. During the Angelus crisis he proved to be able to enter Willow and Giles house via killing her fish and leaving Jenny's dead body in Giles bed. Yet she still wasn't willing to kill him despite her friends being danger.

Down the road 'General Buffy' treats the potential slayers as cannon fodder during the fight against the first. Though she was more than a bit crazy at the time. So chucking Xander into hell to save her boyfriend isn't completely out of character. I would say it would been a little bit more believable if she thought he was already dying due to the fight with Angelus first though. One thing Buffy's always been good at is rationalizing away her actions or inactions.
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [2 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from userid
Would it be to much of a troll for them to release a stargate show on BBC a few months before wormhole extreme hits? Start with a movie going over the basic history then shows matching up with real mission reports with a special thanks to an anagram of Kinsey full name?
Review By [userid] • Date [1 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from satsuma
Great to see another chapter to this fascinating story. Please continue.
Just one query; In the first chapter you said Xander with his a.i.'s controlled a battle group of ships. Any chance you could list out what he has and did they come through the portal intact? How many crew is needed for all the ships, fighters, bombers, stations, etc. Will the CSC be building any Cairo-class space stations with Super MAC's? I know cloaking them would be nearly impossible but imagine Kinsey's heart attack if the NID ever sent the Prometheus ("Earths most advanced spaceship" smirk) after the unknown space station(s) in the Kuiper Belt and are challenged by the CSC Home Fleet. In the SG universe you know the Yanks ALWAYS have to be first among others and have never learned to share their toys equally with others. The Russians protesting the Americans weren't sharing comes to mind.
Review By [satsuma] • Date [1 Dec 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from Toras
Good to see another chapter of this. I greatly enjoyed this chapter, and the way things changed with Sam in the x301 test flight instead of O'Niell. One nitpick I have though is I can't see Sam agreeing to keeping what happened to her and Teal'c from the rest of her team or the General. From the politicians sure, but not her team. I could see here inviting them over to her place, running a bunch of bug jammers and detectors all over, and then explaining what really happened and that the politicians are still arguing at the top. That at least covers her from spying and treason charges when things do come out.

Keep up the great work, I look forward to what you do with this.
Review By [Toras] • Date [1 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from eriktheviking
A very enjoyable read with well written character development.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [1 Dec 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from Omegaprime
Now this is getting interesting.

Now Sam can get some help or advice when things go south again.

When Kinsey finds out what is going on his head will probably explode.

Keep up the good work.
Review By [Omegaprime] • Date [1 Dec 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from MasterRahl
Grate to see this updated. I think I see what the pairing is going to be now.
Review By [MasterRahl] • Date [1 Dec 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from KageRyu
The fuck? How is Johnson alive?
Review By [KageRyu] • Date [30 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from Studyofchaos
Great chapter. It actually makes sense for the Commonwealth organization to pull from the UN and NATO. While many people have noted that the US provides a majority of the funding, the majority of the manpower for peacekeeping comes from countries other than the United States. Primarily due to the US not willing for US Troops to be under the command of the UN. The Commonwealth on the other hand has a shared history and co-operative structure outside of both NATO and the UN and is the closest to a multi-national democratic organization that there is. Yes, some of the member states are a little on the hinky side, but it is a far sight better than the corrupt UN.
Review By [Studyofchaos] • Date [30 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 - Sam's Secret" from AnFan
If you get any military person responding to this new chapter, I'd take their advice over mine. But I would think that Sam is going to get into really hot water over not telling what happened to her to at least someone. I understand that the risk of a secret getting out given the past with the NID would encourage people to keep secrets. Especially of long standing allies like the Commonwealth is made up of. However, there should be some kind of position in place where she could report to. Even if it is directly to Hammond so he could talk directly to the President. That kind of thing. Otherwise I would see her as possibly being even charged with treason.

It just seems like a very bad idea for Sam to keep the secret even if there is a canon similarity to the episode where she is tailed back from the planet with that giant cannon they find. In that one, the fact that the ascended could not be tracked would lead her to fearing being called crazy. Here, she doesn't have that excuse. The problem of course is that she cannot verify (other than the case) what happened in any way or prove that it hasn't compromised her. Which would be the reason it could be considered treason. So, I guess that there is a problem with her reporting to a short chain. However, you may want to have her try to create some kind of chain for her to report to covertly. I'm sure that with her position and training, the covert aspects could be considered part of her education in the military. That would allow her to try and set up a chain of command she could report to if it doesn't already exist. If you want to have one exist already, then you could solve the problem with her trying to investigate who the contact is to report to. It would clean up that bit anyway :)

Other than that problem, the chapter was great! Loved reading what is happening. The only question that I have is what type of story is this. Is it a mesh with the game in that the missions are going to become like levels? Or is it going to be character driven and you are going to tell the story of all the separate canon characters meeting and interacting then going on to attack problems in the combined universes? I love how the background is developing for the story. The development of the Commonwealth is a great idea to consolidate power and direct it towards problems that will be faced in the story.

One silly question would be when will Allucard get his commission as a Captain? hehe :D Then again, he's probably more of a ground pounder.

Thanks for the update! I like the story a lot and even thoroughly enjoyed rereading it from the start. Actually needed to because I read so much I'd forgotten much of what had happened before.
Review By [AnFan] • Date [30 Nov 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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