Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from KingOfCretins
Just read through it again and can't wait to see how things progress.
Please update soon
Review By [KingOfCretins
] • Date [13 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: - Duel of the Killers" from Downery
Weak excuse for not killing Angel. Almost as bad as the story where Xander turned into the priest from Helsing and didn't kill Angel.
If he really wanted Buffy to put up a stronger he would've killed her lover.
Review By [Downery
] • Date [27 Sep 13] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from Morgomir
Great story so far. You seem to use word['s] when you should use word[s]. Th first refers to possession the second means the plural. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir
] • Date [15 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from BenjiC
Really? All that build up for Xander killing Ethan and you throw it away for a cheap cliche? Very poor writing on your part. It's a shame too,I had been enjoying this story for the most part. However if this is going to set the tone for your story I think I am done here. Hope I am wrong and Xander kills Ethan in a slow painful way.
Review By [BenjiC
] • Date [7 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from Rorschach
Can't wait for the next chapter. Hoping you post soon. Here's a thought that might not have occurred to you. Namor and Atlantis vs The Legendary Super Saiyan. Anyone
Review By [Rorschach
] • Date [4 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from Delkatar
Review By [Delkatar
] • Date [1 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from deusexsububi
I'm actually not sure about this chapter. I like the idea of a rage induced hallucination, but to pull that off with text is really hard to do. Really hard to get the nuance right. You wrote this pretty good, still want to see more of where you take the story. keep it up!
Review By [deusexsububi
] • Date [26 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from Narf
Nice update keep up the good work thanks and bye
Review By [Narf
] • Date [21 Aug 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from TJG
The question becomes, is it really Willow or a fake? If it is Willow, which afterlife did she come from? Marvel writers are a bit strange and schizo when it comes to the afterlife. They seem to be infatuated with ever sort of hell and keep them in canon. When it comes to heavens if they are written in, they are eventually retconned into being gilded prisons (like the Soul Gem world or the Infinity Room), vaporware by divine/demonic con-artists, or unknowns even to those who should know. Leaving that aside, maybe Xander could go off an a tangent of whether Willow went to Yaweh's domain due to religious influence, North American or Californian afterlife due to geographic influence, Asian afterlife (due to the tenuous effect of being killed by a being from that pop culture which is derived from those myths), etc.
As for what Xander should do with Ethan, my views are somewhat different though it would require breaking Brolly's bad habits. Xander could put on a Joker smile and just question / interrogate Ethan to find out what is going on (taking it with a grain of salt the size of the Jupiter) and gently tell him to seek redemption under Giles direction, all the while memorizing his scent and ki signature. Xander might want to research how to permanently kill a super villain in a comic universe because super villains tend to escape death even when there are witnesses to the complete destruction of the body and essence of the being. The reason for the above is so that as soon as Ethan is out of everyone's sight and no longer on the path of redemption (and no witnesses for what Xander is going to do), then Xander might use something like instant transmission or something to send Ethan to some punishment. One possibility might be to dump Ethan in front of Man-Thing (probably would react in a hostile manner to evil of Ethan and dissolve him chemically and spiritually with his tough).
For Xander to become stronger, here are some suggestions. He might want to work up the list of things to do and equip himself to become a wandering warrior adventurer since training and battles are what makes Saiyans stronger. Survival skills for Saiyans (food, water, medical self-care, etc. as Saiyans might actually have quite wide differences from humans in those needs). Survival skills for demon hunters (presumably his main interest and dealing with hostile magics and magic beings). Survival skills for dealing with super villains (not necessarily being a super hero). Disguise and similar for concealing one's identity. The equipment for the above in some portable manner or form. Then wander the multiverse alternating between searching super martial artists (or their schools) and destroying evil that can't be dealt with by others.
Review By [TJG
] • Date [20 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from nerfherder
And as we all step back from the brink of an Extinction event, let all praise the namer of 'Poopy-head'...
Review By [nerfherder
] • Date [19 Aug 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from Kaosreign
That better not be an hallucination or the First! Xander is owed a break after he has been put through, and as for Ethan...make it last and painful.
Review By [Kaosreign
] • Date [18 Aug 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from CrystalBlaze
This needs to be good.
If it's the First, the world WILL end.
Review By [CrystalBlaze
] • Date [18 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from RoyalTwinFangs
Not bad. I thought that all of the emo was done already? When are we gpoing to get to the marvel part? Update soon.
Review By [RoyalTwinFangs
] • Date [18 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from JediKnight
Story has been as waste since chapter 3.
Review By [JediKnight
] • Date [18 Aug 13] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: - Sense of Betrayal" from ZaziTheBeast
Pretty good story so far. I am a bit annoyed that Xander apparently isn't going exact some bloody revenge on Ethan. I was really hoping Xander would beat him to death. Mainly because way too many stories pull the "it'll make you just as bad as them" bullshit. I really don't get why people say vengeance isn't satisfying. It feels awesome (or maybe I'm just sadistic). Come on, don't cop out. Xander deserves some brutal revenge.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, but what makes you think that he's gonna cop out? I happen to agree that revenge is satisfying, especially when it's warranted and believe me....in this it is rightly so.
Enjoy the rest of the story
Review By [ZaziTheBeast
] • Date [18 Aug 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]