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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Hmm interesting. Having Dawn control her Key abilities early - I guess that comes with having a magical core from being a Potter as well as being the Key. Interesting Idea.
Comments from author:
Yeah, well, I can just see it happening. Dunno why, I just do. Besides, Apparation kind of sounds like creating a very localised and very personally directed miniature wormhole, or something, with how it squeezes you into a compact space and spits you out.
At least as far as astro-physicists are concerned, in some of their debates.
Fits way too much in with what the powers of the Key are supposed to be.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [19 Aug 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from EnergyBeing
Review:
Interesting premise, if underdeveloped.

I have a few qualms about this story, but the main one is - how do you learn a mythical language? If its mythical, no one knows it.

The rest of it is just me doubting that the Dursely's would allow Dawn to be a translator - weirdness must be stomped! - and thinking that, at seven, Dawn wouldn't be exposed to that many languages in the first place. And that you gave no reason for Gabrielle to be at Hogwarts.

But hopefully you'll develop all of that?
Comments from author:
It'll all be developed, and mythical languages are things like Klingon, Elvish from Tolkein, and other languages that are developed enough to not be considered actual languages, but 'geeky fanaticism'. Don't tell me that it hasn't crossed your mind that Dawn, for all her language prowess, wouldn't have picked up something like Klingon, just to impress Xander, and Willow wouldn't have introduced Dawn to Lord of the Rings.
Review By [EnergyBeing] • Date [13 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Nukem
Review:
I know that there are some quite young official translators out there but since i never really researched that topic i can only guess there and state my own opinions.
I'm not sure how it works with larger official appointments with a big audience.
I think that there those young translators won't get invited due to maturity reasons (simply because it may look strange to have an 10 year old at a gala evening with all the "old farts" in suits).
The same issue should be regarding sensitve/security related topics.
I think the young translators would more find their work in the more private/family settings or text translations.

I know that you are playing the "old soul" angle in this story, but it comes over a wee bit overpowered.
Even tho it's an interesting start and i'm looking forward to this story.
Comments from author:
Surprisingly enough, there's a three day course for children who are basically hired out to be play dates so that anything they may hear in passing. It's basically a 'if the grown-ups say something that sounds important, try and leave, but if not, try and not pay attention' type of thing, until they are legally allowed to sign a confidentiality contract.
Sometimes, it's unavoidable.
The children go to gala events, but usually to the play rooms where all the kids are shoved into.
And you have to remember that this is an incarnation of Harry Potter, though, so most magicals are either thinking he's the be-all-end-all of the magical world, some kid that got lucky, or special.
For the most part, the whole diplomatic thing is mostly just a way to get the story rolling. It won't be as OP or anything after this chapter, at least I'll be trying, but this IS an inter-dimensional entity made up of magical energy capable of tearing open a rift in space and time made flesh and bone we're talking about here, so, really, if anything, it's an understatement of what the potential limit of her power is, in the long run.
Review By [Nukem] • Date [13 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Too much power too soon, but nicely in character - just not for a 7 year old super translator. I could see this at 12, 13, or 14, perhaps. I think this series would work better if they ended up being Harry and Ginny's children, together.
Comments from author:
There are actually several very accomplished translators for my states capital that are only seven or eight years old that basically get paid ludicrous amounts of money, just to act like kids and help to translate what they don't understand, and Dawn hasn't really struck me as a person who would just hold back when she has the chance to do something.
Besides, it has a reason behind it, I just haven't written it down, yet. It's in the rough notes that I've been drawing up for the past few hours when I had some time between classes.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [12 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Too much power too soon, but nicely in character - just not for a 7 year old super translator. I could see this at 12, 13, or 14, perhaps. I think this series would work better if they ended up being Harry and Ginny's children, together.
Comments from author:
When has Dawn ever tried doing anything by half? And this is basically a character reborn into the Harry Potter world type of fic, so it kind of reasons that Dawn would, regardless of what people thought of her, still do her best, at least that's how I saw her when I watched BtVS.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [12 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Mystical, bagical, POWERFUL, mischievous and just all-around cute, she means no harm and just wants to have a good time and be friends. Nice kid, real smart with languages and cultures, ridiculously wealthy from her translation work, so she has enough money to pay her way through Hogwarts several times over.

Green-STREAKED hair? Really? Shoulda done the whole mop green...would prolly be real pretty. Make a pic of that and let's see what peeps think?
Comments from author:
Harry Potter always came off, to me, as a Metamorph, and I can't see Dawn doing her whole mop green. As for the pic, I was going to ask another author to borrow one of his pictures since it fit perfectly with my vision of Dawn when she's all grown up.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [12 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from deathgeonous
Review:
Cute. Thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [12 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DragonBard
Review:
This is the only one of these stories I like.

The Willow one could have been good without the sadism.
Comments from author:
Well, if you have read the comics, towards the end of her 'alternate timeline' life, she was Darth Willow before she got killed by Buffy. Other than that, yeah, I don't like the sadism any more than you do, but thats essential to the plot line I had envisioned for the story, if I ever got around to writing it.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [12 Aug 13] • Not Rated
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