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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Sanabalis
Review:
Excellent beginning and good set-up for the rest of the story! Which you have to write, like, right now! :P :) I agree that Joyce needs more "screen-time", and as a slayer-mom, she should have it now. Poor Xander though... going to jail for 20 years!! j/k
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

Anything further, though, is entirely up to my muse's whims, so we'll have to see what they might be. ;-)
Review By [Sanabalis] • Date [5 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Morgomir
Review:
Interesting idea. Keep up the good work, whatever it may be.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing, and I'll definitely do so. ;-)
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [6 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
The ending was a nice touch.
Comments from author:
Thanks. That was definitely something which wold have significantly shifted the path of many characters' developments.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [28 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from BlueEyedBrigadier
Review:
My my my....a fantastic bit of "What if?" you and you beloved muse has crafted here, GreyWizard! Joyce getting a front-row seat for Faith's rendition of "This Is Your Life!" and her comforting of Faith after the Bostonian's attempt to attack her spiritual progenitor really shows how much Joyce was underused post-S2 - cuz I don't really recall Joyce getting to do much counselling and support of Buffy in her duties as Slayer, especially with a lot of the stuff that was Joss and his ME Gang working on angst-piling - and having Joyce's oligodendroglioma healed through an infusion of Slayer Spirit/Slayer Healing is a ballsy but brilliant move, since I've always wondered if Joyce's death - natural as it appeared and tied to an important "message" about death and having power still meaning you can be helpless - wasn't something a tad more insidious.

All in all, a superb effort and I think IF the muse strikes again for this storyline, it will more than respect what you have done here and further flesh out some magnificent!
Comments from author:
Joyce had the potential to be awesome in the show, had Joss decided to give her just a little more screen time. He didn't and that was one of many mistakes he and his minions made. ;-(

Glad you enjoyed the story. ;-)

Anything more is up to my muse.
Review By [BlueEyedBrigadier] • Date [17 Sep 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from VillageOrchid
Review:
A good and plausible "what if" as in "what if they wanted to use Joyce as a character a little more in the story.
Comments from author:
Yes, indeed. Most of the characters were sorely neglected over the course of the series in order to highlight Marti's loved one, Spike. ;-( PTOOO!
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [17 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Now Chosen Two have Three become,

And fair moth'r now is add'd to

th'roll.

Good Rupert now shall clean his glasses thrice,

And on this stage It will appear most nice.

Crumbl'd Dust shall blow on errant wind

As the undead foe doth meet its end,

The more intelligent shall deign to flee

Than face the wrath o' th'almighty Chosen Three.

[Exeunt all]

Edit/Reply: Eh, 'twas my lame attempt at iambic pentameter. ..didn't even really fit the pattern, not really. Changes and additions have been now made to better fit. What can I say? Gotta love Shakespeare sometimes. ..
Comments from author:
Very clever review, and I thank you for taking the time to make it so. ;-)

Ad I can *so* see Joyce kicking ass when someone or some *thing* pisses her off. ;-)
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [17 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
An interesting tale, and told well, and the premisse is intriguing. But I agree with Willow that her action might have been precipitous, but it was wise. Willow was threatened by Faith, she tried to kill Buffy, attacked Joyce, and she did kill the professor.

Yes, she was young and frightened and alone and had been through terrible things, but Willow was allowed her skepticism. (As is Buffy)

I'm happy Faith has been brought within the family, but work needs to be done before there is trust. And the Council hit team musts be dealt with as well... Good thing Wesley isn't there, he probably would have killed her and then what would have happened...

Good, but with things to say for both points of view.
Comments from author:
Never said that Faith was blameless, and Faith specifically said she was willing to face up to her wrongdoing.

Willow was a bit too precipitous in her actions, as you pointed out, and if Buffy wasn't suspicious, she would be seriously OOC.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [17 Sep 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from TroyGuffey
Review:
Very nice!

Naughty Willow!(Although she WAS wise enough to shut up and let Tara shine)

Now Faith will get the mothering she NEEDS so badly.

Also, very nice forshadowing of Joyce's last action. (I was pretty sure that was what going to happen.)

Maybe you could write the Dawn-included version as well? (I like the one's where Faith was always nice to Dawn.)
Comments from author:
Willow wasn't *completely* out of line, worrying about Faith trying to escape, but she should have said something to Buffy about it, rather than committing unprovoked assault with intent.

And I'm not exactly sure whether or not this universe has a Dawn in it yet, (or at all) since my muse didn't say anything about the rest of this particular Scooby-verse.
Review By [TroyGuffey] • Date [17 Sep 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from JediKnight
Review:
Any sequal?
Comments from author:
Not sure. That depends on my muse's whims.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [17 Sep 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CPTSkip
Review:
Now THIS is the way it should have happened on the show. I like your story and your Faith and Joyce. I even like your version of the First Slayer. Even though Bad Things happened to Faith, I am now feeling very happy from reading your story. Thanks.

And did Joyce just crush the katra-thingie with her new Slayer strength? Cool! With three Slayers I think Glory just might get her ass kicked.
Comments from author:
Yes, I thought that this idea could have given us some very interesting alternative paths to head down as far as plot developments go.

And yes, I wanted to be a little bit subtle about Joyce's new empowerment. ;-)

As far as the Glory situation is concerned, I could very easily see Joyce just saying, "Buffy, you take your sister to the airport and decide where you're going, once you get there. Then go there, rent a car and keep on traveling and keep Dawn safe until this situation is resolved. I'm going to stay here and deal with this person."

Just wait until the required stellar configuration has passed, and things are good. That is one of the extremely contrived 'critical' decision points Joss insisted on which annoyed me about Season Five. Season Sux and Season Sux Part Deux merely got worse as they continued. ;-(
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [17 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)Katrina
Review:
I kinda really liked this. :D! Thank you for sharing it!
Comments from author:
Thanks.

I started writing an entirely different take on this, and my muse said, 'Uh - no! Let's do it this way!' and this is what I ended up with. ;-)
Review By [(Current Donor)Katrina] • Date [17 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Martin
Review:
The only problem with this is that by that point Faith went out and assassinated a professor. Yes the first death was an accident, but the second one is first degree murder. Yes she was in a bad position, but at some point she could have left instead she killed a defenseless person on purpose.
Comments from author:
Yes, Faith screwed up badly, but she was far less a menace than Spike was, and Marti and Joss showed him reforming and basically becoming Buffy's pet, good guy vampire, so I don't see a problem with showing one possible way for Faith to redeem herself for her previous crimes.

*Everyone* of the Scoobies screwed up massively at least once over the course of the show, so to deny Faith a chance for redemption is unfair.

Besides, I thought this particular idea could develop in a very interesting manner, especially with regard to the Council's reactions.
Review By [Martin] • Date [17 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
Honestly, this seems more author rant and attempted justifications for the behavior of a favored character than an actual story. It's more like an essay trying to excuse Faith's actions in canon, ending with a quickie forgiveness and happily ever after. I'm rather more with Buffy and Willow here - such actions are not so easily forgiven.
Comments from author:
Faith most certainly is not my favorite character, but I can see why you would view the story as an apologist's excuse for Faith's behavior. Actually, all I was showing here was an alternative path the show could have shown us, in much the same way that Spike went from being portrayed as an unrepentant serial killer, mass murderer and one of the middle-tier Big Bads to, ostensibly, one of the heroes of the show.

And given the complete lack of any sort of support provided for her, it's only somewhat surprising to me that Faith didn't go bad sooner than she did - especially after seeing her Watcher slaughtered in front of her by a creature intending to kill her, too.

And Buffy and Willow had their own, just as significant, share of screw-ups in the show, so they are hardly free to cast stones.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [16 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LordCorwin
Review:
What an ending..... excellent!
Comments from author:
Thanks. I was trying to add a bit of hope to the Scooby-verse, rather than the eternal gloom and oppression Joss mandated. ;-(
Review By [LordCorwin] • Date [16 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
It makes sense that Sineya would empower Joyce as a Slayer. With the connections forming and Joyce having been a Potential, there's no reason it wouldn't happen.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing. I view having simultaneous active Slayers as straining the bindings on Sineya, and thus allowing her to have more opportunity to do what *she* wished to do, rather than what the Council was forcing her to do.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [16 Sep 13] • Not Rated
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