Large PrintHandheldAudioRating
using
 paypal
Twisting The Hellmouth Crossing Over Awards - Results
Rules for Challenges

Don't Taunt Murphy Like That, Jack!

StoryReviewsStatisticsRelated StoriesTracking
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DieselDriver
Review:
Wait what? No way. You have to write more.
Comments from author:
The next part is partly written, but Real Life isn't being all that cooperative at the moment, so i have no idea when it'll be ready to post. ;-(
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [21 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DieselDriver
Review:
Never, ever tempt fate by saying "all we need now is..." or any of the many other phrases such as "what could possibly go wrong?". Jacks version of the alien menace just showed up. Boy is she in for a shock!
Comments from author:
You'd think Jack would know better, by n0w, wouldn't you? ;-)

And I'm sure you can imagine just how well Anise is going to interact with the Scoobies. ;-)
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [21 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from serenityselena
Review:
that was interesting and some scenes were really amusing :)
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed it. ;-)
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [23 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing. It's much appreciated

I'm trying for a bit of a different take on the whole SGC-Tok'ra relationship here, which is why Anise is showing up now.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [8 Oct 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Shadowman
Review:
I just finished reading the three stories of this series and enjoyed them quite a bit. I hope we will be seeing a lot more of this series in the future.
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying the series.

I've got the next story started, but it's up to my muse's whims when it'll be finished and posted.
Review By [Shadowman] • Date [2 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from clei
Review:
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DianeCastle
Review:
I like this Kinsey, since the canon one got pretty darn boring.

But why does everyone pick on Anise? :-)
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying my take on Kinsey. ;-)

And people dump on her mostly because she's an arrogant, condescending sociopath. ;-)
>
>
Anise, meet Faith ( Just a sociopath :D)......
Comments from author:
While I will admit that Faith is not much of a warm and fuzzy people person, she has shown that she does care about others, and shouldn't be considered a sociopath, since sociopaths completely lack any regard for others' well-being.

Where Anise differs from Faith is in her total lack of any concern about the potential results or consequences of her work on other people - at least as far as humans are concerned. She may care about her own species, the Tok'ra, but she was rather indifferent about SG-1's health or well-being when using them as guinea pigs for the Atanik armbands, and essentially treated them the way she would experimental test animals.
Review By [clei] • Date [27 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
Review:
Very good
Comments from author:
Thanks. ;-)
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [27 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from aartBluestoke
Review:
A highly enjoyable chapter. Once again greywizzard has managed to both follow existing cannon, and add his own unique spin as two quite different worlds collide in this story.
Comments from author:
Thanks.

And I really couldn't see Jack *not* being sarcastic and annoying in this type of situation, especially if he can't do a whole lot about the situation or the circumstances. ;-)
Review By [aartBluestoke] • Date [27 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from draconis
Review:
.
Fun series so far. It will be interesting to see whether you let SGC and/or Thor know Xander isn't actually the kind of Ancient they think he is. And of course there's always the probability Sam would run a background check on all the people she met to verify they're human, and will find Xander's history. That would need some sort of backstory if they plan to try to maintain the fiction that Xander is an actual returned/returning Ancient.

I think it would be a mistake to portray Kinsey as softer and too accepting of the Scoobies/Council taking control of the SGC and Stargate. It is not in Kinsey's personal best interests. Remember that Kinsey would have directly and IMMENSELY profited both financially and politically if his plans worked out to take control himself or by those over whom he has major influence/control.

How did Anise (and others?) get into the gateroom? If she came via the gate then she'd have had to overcome the 'iris'. No one would have opened the 'iris' without authorization by either Hammond, his 2IC, or whomever was acting base commander at the time.


EDIT: Response to author's initial response
You seem needlessly over-defensive about this. I certainly wasn't being negative. All I basically said was that I think Xander's situation needs to be explained to the satisfaction of the SGC and the readers if the Scoobies decide to try to maintain the fiction. Regarding Kinsey, your story definitely seemed to be STARTING to depict him as "softer" to a degree quite atypical vis-a-vis the canon character. It was a surprise and seemed completely out of character. And it was just my non-inflammatory opinion/suggestion, that you not let the character become any softer. The decision of course is up to you. Regarding Anise et al, I was simply curious how they breached SGC security features and protocols and hoped you would explain it in the story...which you say you intend to do.
Comments from author:
As far as just exactly what details Stargate Command and/or the Asgard will be learning is going to be one of the upcoming minor storylines.

And as far as Carter or the rest of the SGC running a background check on Xander and finding a detailed history, they'd most likely ascribe it to him having his people creating a thorough and well-fleshed out false identity for him. After all, what's more believable - that an Ancient established a well-documented false identity, using their admittedly superior technology to provide an unbreakable false identity for him, so that he can go about whatever business said Ancient has to conduct here on Earth, or that a young high school graduate, with no college degree, somehow became the commander of an Ancient base? ;-)

And nowhere, at any time, did I indicate that Kinsey was anything but a self-serving politician. All I noted in this story was that Kinsey was quite happy to have the deaths of Travers and the rest of the Council confirmed, since he hated them all with all his being, and that he was willing to sit in on a meeting with the SGC and the new owners/operators of the Stargate. Since he realized that this sale is basically a 'done deal' set up by President Hayes to prevent him and his cohorts from gaining control of the 'gate, and not something he'll be able to motivate his fellow Congressmen to oppose quickly enough to prevent, Kinsey decided to cut his potential losses and try to establish some sort of connections to the new group controlling the 'gate. That's just basic politics, and even the Scoobies are astute enough to realize that.

And the details of Anise and her companions arrival will be revealed in the next story, 'Diplomatic Relations - Scooby Style,' which I'm currently working on. ;-)
Review By [draconis] • Date [26 Sep 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from TharzZzDunN
Review:
Pretty interesting, I wouldn't mind reading a new chapter if it doesn't stress you out or derail your plans for conquest.

Cheers~!
Comments from author:
Working on the next story in this part of the series.
Review By [TharzZzDunN] • Date [26 Sep 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from wonderbee
Review:
Most interesting, and something to see a Kinsey who's not just the 2d bad guy that he is in so many fics, but appears to have a beef that's legit at least concerning the Watchers anyway.
Comments from author:
Kinsey had the potential to be an awesome adversary opposing SG-1, but he was relegated to a minor role more akin to Snidely Whiplash.

I'm trying to both humanize him and make him a more formidable potential opponent. And he has a perfectly understandable and quite reasonable basis for his hatred of the old Council.
Review By [wonderbee] • Date [26 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from RevDorothyL
Review:
I never thought I'd read a depiction of Senator Kinsey that DIDN'T make me want to drop him in a deep, dark hole, but your version actually made him tolerable and borderline respectable, which is a major accomplishment! :)
Comments from author:
Tolerable - yes. And thank you for reviewing and letting me know that I succeeded in my attempt. ;-)

But Kinsey will never be respectable, borderline or not. He's a lowlife politician, which is even more despicable than a typical politician.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [26 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from cwolf
Review:
Leaving the story hanging on what they're going to do next, isn't a FIN
Comments from author:
It's fin for this section of the story/series.
Review By [cwolf] • Date [26 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from missinglink
Review:
Nice addition. Your fic reminds me of somthing I thought about but have yet to see. Someone (either Scooby or SGC) creating a Taunting Murphy Jar. Kind of a swear jar but for those who stupidly ignore his influence and ability to wreck havoc. Change would not be acceptible for taunting Murphy as I feel only cash would do with the size of the bill depending on the size of the invoking of Murphy's wrath. Maybe as something Xander mentions to SGC as a way of curbing Jack after his gaff. Funds could be used to buy beer/alcohol for those that suffered thru the events at some regular interval (monthly, semi annual, annual).

Thanks for the fun read! Later.
Comments from author:
I *really* like that idea, and I think I might co-opt it, if not for this story, another one in the future. ;-)

And for invoking Anise's return to the SGC, I think the rest of the team will insist Jack contribute his Platinum Visa Card to the jar, for this incident. ;-)
Review By [missinglink] • Date [26 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from burmafrdnow
Review:
The whole NID/Kinsey mess was such a typical hollywood stupidity that there really is no way you could salvage either one.

I would go so far as to call them parody but I doubt frankly the writers/producers were smart enough to do that.

And really there is no way Giles and the others would have had any illusions about how far the council would go. You clearly do not follow BTVS that much if you think otherwise.
Comments from author:
Yes, the entire Kinsey characterization was such a Hollywood depiction of politicians that it was ridiculous to the point of puking. ;-(

All he needed was a mustache to twirl, and he could have been cast as Snidely Whiplash. ;-)

And I do think that the Scoobies would be appalled at Travers and his crowd blackmailing entire countries, as opposed to smaller groups and/or individuals, which would be much more believable.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [26 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Page: 1 of 2 next end
StoryReviewsStatisticsRelated StoriesTracking