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Review of chapter "chapter four: something to feel real" from Oxnate
Review:
You know, you've got the 1 year anniversary of this story coming up. That could be the perfect time for an update or two. (hint, hint)

Seriously, though. This is just excellent. I think you really captured the undercurrents and feelings of Susan perfectly.
Review By [Oxnate] • Date [19 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter four: something to feel real" from Bobboky
Review:
Very good
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [12 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter four: something to feel real" from Discord
Review:
I really like the idea behind this story. That Susan stays because she did as Aslan asked not because she lost faith in him.
Review By [Discord] • Date [5 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter four: something to feel real" from grd
Review:
Aslan is the greatest. Love how much he cares for Susan.
Review By [grd] • Date [5 Oct 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter three: sure of nothing" from tryingtobestine
Review:
I wonder where you're going with this, but I'm looking forward to finding out :)
Comments from author:
*laughs* It's not going to be a terribly exciting story, truly. I can tell you that now.(Although I do have a rather odder sequel in mind - but that might just be the sort of thing that stays in my brain and never comes to fruition. Honestly, it's a bit weird.)

I've just always been interested in Susan's character especially post-books and will be using this fic to be able to walk her through the grieving process (all the while shifting through memories), in a hopefully, somewhat believable way (for the Narnia world anyway *grin*).

I hope you'll continue to enjoy it though. And I truly enjoy the encouraging feedback. :)
Review By [tryingtobestine] • Date [4 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three: sure of nothing" from mousemt
Review:
That is just a lovely story. Thank you for sharing. Can't wait to see more.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your words of encouragement, mousemet. (I actually just posted another chapter so you -can- see a bit more if you'd like. *grins)
Review By [mousemt] • Date [4 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three: sure of nothing" from EarnestScribbler
Review:
This...is beautiful.
Comments from author:
*blushes* Thank ya very much. It's been in my brain for a while.
Review By [EarnestScribbler] • Date [4 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three: sure of nothing" from grd
Review:
A necessary tale as Lewis in my opinion abandoned Susan.
Comments from author:
And rather threw her out to sea along the way - I continue to be baffled by his treatment of Susan. *shakes head* But I do appreciate the sentiment and I hope you continue to enjoy my little tale, grd.
Review By [grd] • Date [4 Oct 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter two: move and keep moving" from Callista
Review:
I have tears in my eyes. I loved this story, and I'm glad that you saved Susan. I think the books really weren't fair to her, Susan deserved more. Thank you for writing this story, and I hope more is coming?
Comments from author:
I'm glad you're enjoying it so far, Callista and that it struck such an emotional chord. I am finding from the reviews that I am far from the only one that found that the ending of the books never sat quite right in regards to Susan. I am just glad that people are responding to this little story, that has sat ruminating in my brain for so long.

And yes, more to come. I want to write her slowly working her way through her grief and homesickness - coming to a sort of terms with it all (while still remembering) and finding her footing as a single entity (as in without her siblings) in this changing world. All along the way I want to keep up her friendship with Aslan - I am very fond of the idea of that.

Thanks for reviewing, Callista.
Review By [Callista] • Date [3 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter two: move and keep moving" from tosca
Review:
Wonderful. I was always so sad for Susan being left behind, and this perspective makes a great deal of sense to me. Very nicely written. :-)
Comments from author:
Thanks, tosca. Susan is such an interesting character - badly treated in cannon but loved by so many readers. I never understood the reasoning behind treating her how they did in story. For a long time I just chalked it up in my brain to C.S. Lewis not feeling comfortable writing teenaged girls/women but then I learned that he wrote other books (a sci fi series for one) with older characters. So, I really don't know what he had against her in paticular.

Ah well, I have fanfic at my disposal for how I wish it would have been. *laughs* (Sorry for the ramble!)

Thanks for reviewing, tosca.
Review By [tosca] • Date [3 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter two: move and keep moving" from SpaceAnJL
Review:
Thank you for this. It actually took away some of the lingering argh! I've been experiencing since reading Neil Gaiman's creepyawful short story about Susan. I still remember the 'wait, what?' reaction I had to the whole ending of the books, (and decades on, I still cry at the bear) - it seemed so petty to throw someone out of heaven for simply trying to grow up in the real world. Christianity is all a bit weird and alien to me anyway, though.
Comments from author:
Oh dear, I only read an excerpt from that Neil Gaiman short story a few years ago and was not inclined to read more - creepyawful is a good way to describe it. (Which is sad really because I often love his stuff.)

And even though I was raised in Christianity, it often feels alien to me as well (I often feel both too close and too far away to understand it quite right). I prefer to just go with my instincts with things - and in this story anyway I'm going more with Aslan as the character in the books (pretty much ignoring all of the allusions of a biblical nature). To me, that Aslan wouldn't have acted so cruelly as to bar her for a place where all her family was for no reason. (Then again, I place a bit less significance on innocence then the author seemed to - but hey, this time it's my story *winks*.)

So, I'm glad you're liking my little fic- and I'm happy it took away some of the lingering "argh!". *grin* Thanks for taking the time to review.
Review By [SpaceAnJL] • Date [3 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter two: move and keep moving" from CPTSkip
Review:
This is a wonderful story that made me feel a lot better about how C S Lewis messed up Susan's life. As the oldest of five siblings, when I first read about how the Kings and Queen of Narnia 'transitioned' to Uber-Narnia and left Susan behind... It is one of the few things about the series I truly hated and still hate. But your story soothes some of my horror and dislike and I thank you for that. Stupid C S Lewis.
Comments from author:
It was a very harsh ending to a series that had mostly been so - well, it's cheesy to say, but magical. But as soon as I read that, I couldn't think of this wonderful "uber-Narnia" I could only picture back in the real world where there was just one young woman who's entire family had just died - leaving her all alone - because, what? She grew up a bit?

Ahh. So, yes. I understand your feelings in this. I'm glad my fic soothed them a bit for you - it has been in my brain, almost since I started writing fanfic, to write a Susan story. (Although I'm glad I waited - my writing isn't exemplary now, but I feel a lot better about it than I did a little over a handful of years ago.)

Thanks for reviewing, CPTSkip
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [3 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter two: move and keep moving" from calliopesol
Review:
Thank you for this. Narnia was the first series I absolutely loved, and I identified so very much with Susan (elder sister, cautious -- er, not so much the gentle though); what happened to her in the books was devastating to me (what, she can't go back to Narnia? What? She's playing with *lipstick*? Nooooo!).

This is very beautifully written, and I can't wait to read more.
Comments from author:
I am so glad that you are liking it so far. And I know what you mean about how devastating it was to think about Susan at the end - I've thought about writing something for years about it and finally my brain prodded me into just writing it down.

And as for those weird comments from the last books - about her being all tied up with lipstick, nylons, and such - I'm taking them simply as twisted perception. Susan wasn't doing things the same way as the rest of them, was taking a different path, and they didn't understand it.

That's my AU anyways. *laughs* And how it rather makes more sense in my mind - I mean in earlier books it said she was perceived as beautiful in Narnia, not vain or materialistic. There is certainly a difference after all.

Thanks for taking the time to review!
Review By [calliopesol] • Date [2 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter two: move and keep moving" from Bobboky
Review:
and inherit the earth.

Nice work
Comments from author:
Isn't that actually the meek? The poor? Oh dear, my bible is rusty. Close enough though - and hey, she's already a Queen. *laughs*

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [2 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter two: move and keep moving" from Amberdrake
Review:
Thank You.
Comments from author:
*curtsies* You are very welcome. It has been in my mind for a while to do a Susan story and this one won't leave me alone.
Review By [Amberdrake] • Date [2 Oct 13] • Not Rated
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