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Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from arturusoriginal
Review:
Awesome series, well written and very well paced.

Probably the high point for me has been your superb handing of your characters.
Review By [arturusoriginal] • Date [3 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from (Past Donor)wolframhart
Review:
Had fun reading this. Looking forward to more.
Review By [(Past Donor)wolframhart] • Date [2 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from theunixer
Review:
Unlike the previous reviewer, I really like this story.

That isn't to say that there aren't flaws.

Your portrayal of Col. O'Neill seems a (little) bit too antagonistic and for too long. However, his anger at the ages of Called Slayers is spot on. I likle how he reacts to it in fics.

Giles apparent arrogance about their purpose there seems slightly off as well. Of course, it could just be Giles being momentarily annoyed at Col. O'Neill's antagonism.

Although you slewed the timelines a bit, which is fine, I think you went too far with it. Buffy being a Slayer for 18 years is too much. It really should have been around 10 years or so. It would mesh with both SG1 and with Elizabeth Stabler's age much better along with how long since she was Called (which doesn't seem to be during the mass Calling in canon, needs explanation or editing).

I'm also curious as to why you picked 9 months as the averge life expectancy for a new Slayer. Usually, it's around a year or so under the old Watcher's Council's influence. After the Scoobies took over, having teams of multiple Slayers plus real backup would have increased that tremendously.


To go back to the begining of this review; your portrayal of the Slayers abilities is, I think, perfect. Too many fics have Buffy at perhaps 5 times normal human strength with corresponding speed and reflexes. Canon had her abilities all over the place depending on what that episode needed. She lifted a grate which she said weighed a ton at the start of season 3. I'll go with a literal ton here. This would require a strength level at least around 12 to 15 times normal. That makes Elizabeth's and Raven's seeming ease fighting both Teal'c and the other Jaffa totally accurate.

I also like the human touch about the Roller Derby. It rounds out the characters humanity along with their behaviour at that age. I *really* hope you have Walter letting Gen. Hammond and SG1 know of it (with Buffy's name for it) along with their reactions to it.


All in all, this is a really fun story. Please continue it (yes, I know you have started a new one, 'Not In Kansas' [I like it as well], but please don't drop this one).

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Ok. I am going to have to retract a little of what I wrote above. Since writing it I reread the whole story and realized how much detail I had forgotten.

First, I have upped the rating to 10 for the whole story. It rates it.

I had forgotten about O'Neill's arm. That would tend to make someone more than a bit cranky. Especially toward those who did it.

You have been showing the age appropriate human side of the Slayers all along, not just with the rollerblading part. Nice.
Review By [theunixer] • Date [5 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from ecsnorway
Review:
Sigh. Yet another "Scoobies are better and less mature and more cool than everyone" crossover. Yet another Stargate cast getting stomped by Buffywank. Booooooring. Highly recommend AGAINST reading. Or writing.
Review By [ecsnorway] • Date [17 Jul 14] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Game's Afoot" from clei
Review:
This is certainly not the same Jack who has outwitted and frustrated so many superior foes in his years of commanding SG-1.
Instead he keeps losing his temper so the point of view OC can make speeches. And so we go round and round and don't seem to be getting anywhere.
After this many threatening mini-confrontations, it's obvious that they can't even learn to work together, at least not with the same personnel.
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No, it's the same Jack (and SG1) as always. They've always treated people no matter who they may be like this.

They go to more advanced alien world to basically beg for their tech, and basically talk down their nose to the people they are asking for help from in the process, especially Sam and Daniel.
Review By [clei] • Date [4 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from lunalurker
Review:
This is certainly not the same Jack who has outwitted and frustrated so many superior foes in his years of commanding SG-1.
Instead he keeps losing his temper so the point of view OC can make speeches. And so we go round and round and don't seem to be getting anywhere.
After this many threatening mini-confrontations, it's obvious that they can't even learn to work together, at least not with the same personnel.
Review By [lunalurker] • Date [3 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from djhardim
Review:
"Because if we don't allow you to work with us, we will take possession of the Stargate to keep you from making a bigger mess than you already have," Giles continued. "As you will have shown you are NOT mature enough to handle such a responsibility."

Yes, of course, the Scoobies are a much better choice to run things.

Was there any doubt about such a perfect group they are?
Review By [djhardim] • Date [3 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from clei
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Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from Sunhawk
Review:
yet another bash fic, I went into it with high hopes only to have them completely dashed. Total flanderization of the Stargate crew, the Scoobies are ultra-competent can-do-no-wrong one-dimensional cardboard cutouts.
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Dude, the Stargate Crew has f**** everything they've managed to touch.

From the Goul'd to the Wraith and beyond.

They don't know,
They don't listen,
They don't learn.

It's amazing they haven't gotten themselves and everyone around them killed....Oh wait, they *HAVE*
Review By [clei] • Date [2 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from Rich
Review:
1. Overall, this is still pretty good, although I think you may be overdoing the "Jack is a butthead" theme.


2. “You look at that video and that’s what you get out of it??"

"Well, yeah, 'cause we already KNOW how good we are"


3. Slayers on rollerblades ? Outstanding ! How is it that nobody thought of that before ?
Review By [Rich] • Date [2 Jul 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from Rich
Review:
1. Overall, this is still pretty good, although I think you may be overdoing the "Jack is a butthead" theme.


2. “You look at that video and that’s what you get out of it??"

"Well, yeah, 'cause we already KNOW how good we are"


3. Slayers on rollerblades ? Outstanding ! How is it that nobody thought of that before ?
Review By [Rich] • Date [2 Jul 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from Sunhawk
Review:
yet another bash fic, I went into it with high hopes only to have them completely dashed. Total flanderization of the Stargate crew, the Scoobies are ultra-competent can-do-no-wrong one-dimensional cardboard cutouts.
Review By [Sunhawk] • Date [2 Jul 14] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from cmdruhura
Review:
“Colonel,” Giles began quietly, “You’re mistaken if you think we are here to determine if you will allow us to work with you, we are here to decide if we will allow you to work with us.”



"Because if we don't allow you to work with us, we will take possession of the Stargate to keep you from making a bigger mess than you already have," Giles continued. "As you will have shown you are NOT mature enough to handle such a responsibility."
Review By [cmdruhura] • Date [2 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from burmafrdnow
Review:
You have to have Hammond slap Jack down harder. At a certain point you have no choice; and as badly as he has been acting to important people who have the president's ear more than you do you also have to protect your vital program.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [2 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from grd
Review:
Beautiful. Hope Jack gets the full story soon. He is making too many insulting assumptions. Now it is the Slayers show and tell.
Review By [grd] • Date [2 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Do sit down and shut up" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
Who coated O'Neill's head with superglue before he stuck it up his ass?
That's is the only reason I can think of to explain how he is acting,
and why he can't extract his head from his lower orifice.

Hammond should have had him zatted and brigged long before this scene,
or else accepted that both of them would shortly be forcibly retired.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [2 Jul 14] • Not Rated
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