Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Nuklear
You know was really enjoying this story right up till it hit the Dawn/Xander parts... so while this appears to be well thought out and written I am going to stop there. In the future could you please say the pair in your summary so that people that hate Dawn to the point of thinking being boiled alive in a vat of oil is too good a death for the character know to avoid it...
Review By [Nuklear
] • Date [31 Mar 14] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Swagster
Great story! Can't wait to read more!
Review By [Swagster
] • Date [31 Mar 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from sorawithans
This is one of the more creative Ship of the Line stories, most certainly. Although I'm not sure if your misinterpretation of Dillithium was deliberate or not, you seem to be confusing it with Di-lithium.
Still, Star Trek plus Star Wars with a dollop of W40K and a hint of Thundercats has great potential. The later villains of Star Gate will have them massively outclassed, however, not to mention vastly outnumbered.
(Has anyone pointed out to Dawn that Eldar live for a thousand years?)
Review By [sorawithans
] • Date [24 Mar 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Hawklan
quite nice so far hope to see more............
Review By [Hawklan
] • Date [26 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from nerfherder
Wowsers! A fine blend of the genres with a firm hand on the backlash. Cannot wait to see what's next!
Review By [nerfherder
] • Date [10 Feb 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from reddaeth
Can't wait for more please continue soon.
Review By [reddaeth
] • Date [16 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Balder
It's a great story. I hope you finish it.
Review By [Balder
] • Date [14 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from CaptainBoulanger
Just a note on the Mayor situation - there actually wouldn't be any laws violated by him being in office so long. In California, cities can be governed either by a custom city charter or the default one provided by the State; I'm not sure if the default one has term limits in it or not, but if it does, Sunnydale could easily be a charter city and not have term limits (The Mayor would have been around and involved when the charter was written, of course). They would still have a defined length of term and regularly scheduled elections, but the number of terms one person could serve would be unlimited. Most state government offices weren't term-limited until the late 1970s or 1980s (our current governor was eligible because his previous terms were before the term limit law was in place and the law was not retroactive).
They would still have to have regularly scheduled elections, but those could be manipulated by several different methods (not all of them magical); rigging the vote count, for example (although in California, voting is usually conducted by a county agency and not the city government, there IS one city that also acts as its own county government, so you could claim Sunnydale has the same arrangement), or making the registration and eligibility requirements for candidates extremely difficult to meet (therefore keeping the competition off the ballot in the first place), are the most obvious non-magical methods that could be used.
EDIT: True, but if they had rigged elections, the outcome would be the same; they could have an election every few years, but as long as he won all of them, he'd still be the mayor for ages. I know of cases (even without resorting to illegal methods) where candidates have been re-elected to the same office ten or twelve consecutive times.
Comments from author:
Yes, but I would guess that 'regular' means a lot more often than once a century...
Review By [CaptainBoulanger
] • Date [8 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from garrycooper
What can I say that others have not already said, except keep it up. I am looking forward to seeing how this story turns out. The longer the better!
Review By [garrycooper
] • Date [28 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Bill
Very well done!
Review By [Bill
] • Date [22 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from CageFire
Hehe, great chapters. I'm glad I have a plugin watching the challenge page because apparently I forgot to set the tracking settings on this and one other SotL fic. I'll be looking forward to reading more. The same could be said for almost all the SotL fics. I wish there was a way to subscribe to challenge pages to get notifications of new stories.
Review By [CageFire
] • Date [10 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Morgomir
Great story so far. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir
] • Date [7 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Lictre
So far as ensuring the trustworthiness of potential crew recruits, interview with crew members could be an appropriate and reasonable part of the recruiting process. There are 4 identified J'dai in the crew, two of whom are in quite logical positions to conduct interviews and evaluations, the Chief Medical Officer, and Security Chief.
What's going to be interesting, should the story proceed to that point, would be to watch some recruit try to hide intoxicating substances (or just being intoxicated) from either the Captain or the Security chief, with their senses. Oz would also complicate those issues.
How will you have space travel interact with lycanthropy, or other effects that have lunar or other astrological aspects?
Review By [Lictre
] • Date [6 Nov 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Robby
Interesting story so far.
I look forward to seeing where this goes!!
Review By [Robby
] • Date [6 Nov 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from eriktheviking
A well written and enjoyable blend of the different universes.
Review By [eriktheviking
] • Date [6 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]