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Chaos Effect: The Fleet Of Chaos

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Review of chapter "Aftermath" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
interesting start so far, tx for sharing
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [26 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [25 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Thedruid
Review:
This is both good AND bad.

Good; great idea, wonderful and interesting characters, good melding of both Mass Effect and Star Trek. And kept me hooked enough to read it in one sitting.

Bad;
1. After magic became mainstream, it is almost ignored for the rest of the story. No metion of it during the peace talks with the council.
2. Sudden time-skips and things suddenly happening for no apparent reason is very jarring. Not to mention that you have what I call the .... dammit I can't even remember the name of that book anymore. But the problem is that you have scene timelines skipping all over the place. With something happening in the present, then we get the explanation of why that is a fact later in the story, and you do this so much that I can't keep track of the plot in some parts of the story. Not as bad as that book I can't remember, nor read more than 20 pages of, but bad enough.
3. There is a lot of mini-stories your just skipping over, like the speech Giles gave to the UN to convince them to accept the new ships. Why did Illyria get talked into joining Starfleet?

In summary, it seems like you REALLY want to write certain parts of this story, and so skip over the uninteresting parts to get to those parts you like. As well as not adapting to changes that you didn't originally plan.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your honesty. I appreciate it.

As for magic not being mentioned during the peace talks with the council, that's the last thing they needed to do.

Tevos: "Right...magic...(Great, we have crazy aliens with more advanced technology than we do)."
Review By [Thedruid] • Date [16 Feb 14] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Past Donor)Jewel
Review:
This is fantastic! Now heading to read No. 2 in the series....
Review By [(Past Donor)Jewel] • Date [16 Feb 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from AlphaBeta
Review:
LOL! Love the last part! And nice wrap up! Please tell me there will be another story to continue this! Please do continue this!
Comments from author:
Working on it right now but coming up with OC officers for positions the canon Mass Effect wouldn't have isn't easy.
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [4 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Nuklear
Review:
okay enjoyed the story but got to wonder why the colonies don't have ground to orbit defenses... and why the hell star fleet didn't declare war on the Batarian's immediately after the first or second attack on one of their colonies
Review By [Nuklear] • Date [4 Feb 14] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from KingOfCretins
Review:
Great Stuff

There's one thing that's always struck me about Star Trek is how woefully defended their planets are, even during the Dominion War they seem to rely completely on ships despite having the technology for various planetary defence weapons like the Orbital Weapons Platforms used by the Cardassians, some form of Planetary shielding and surface to orbit weapons.

I'm surprised that a more "real life" Earth using Star Trek technology would do the same thing especially with the Batarians around. So is there a reason why Mindoir was not sufficiently protected against a less advanced hostile force for instance was it a new colony or did the defences fail before the attack due to an accident/sabotage.
Or is there no reason at all and this version of Starfleet is just as overly confident as they are in Star Trek.

Anyway can't wait for the sequel.
Comments from author:
Hindsight was 20/20. After the attack on Mindoir, orbital defenses were set up across the Alliance.
Review By [KingOfCretins] • Date [4 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Raider
Review:
very well done sir, I really hope you make a second story for this.
Review By [Raider] • Date [4 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from armyguy
Review:
Good story till the end where it seemed to just . . . stop. No conclusion, no idea what happened to Xander and Willow, and nothing on where things were going to go from there. Hopefully there will be a following story to this to answer these questions and more.
Review By [armyguy] • Date [4 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Omegaprime
Review:
Now this is interesting.

Some races are being major idiots and those Batarian dumbbells should've realized something: They use Mass Effect relays, the Alliance don't use them.

I hope they find out how stupid it was to invade one of their planets.

Ok, the Volus being contaminated by the Feringi Rules of Acquisition was really funny and I can't wait to see the results of this.

I see that Shepard has the lone survivor backstory and is now a Slayer, I also see that she has gone to the academy via Kirk's route in the first Star Trek reboot movie.

You know, I hope Saren doesn't tell her that he killed her mother or his is going to be in a heap of trouble.

Keep up the interesting work and We will see you on the next story where Reapers will be confused and accidental Time Travelers might appear.




Edit: Mass Effect with the crazy elements from Star Trek?

Looks like certain people are going to be living in interesting times.

As that old curse goes. LOL
Comments from author:
I'm glad you're enjoying it.

As for some races being major idiots, I had to keep them in their natures. The quarians couldn't be too trusting of any race that believed any artificial intelligence was a life form just like them. The hanar had their religious beliefs taking a heretical hit because the Alliance has technology that the Protheans never had. I'm not even going to get into discussing the Batarians.

The Volus being contaminated by the FRoA to me made perfect sense.

Shepard at this point has the Colonist backstory and is a Slayer because of it. I plan on having her have the War hero background before the start of the next story.

I am writing the first chapter of the next story and along with standard events from the game, I'm going to try to incorporate Star Trek scenarios as well. The usual like temporal events, strange anomalies, maybe an evil mirror universe...
Review By [Omegaprime] • Date [4 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from LFW
Review:
I am thinking that I did not understand some of the more subtle points of this fic but I do so love the nuTrek ending.
And I hope that Xander and Willow are okay and will return
Thanks
Review By [LFW] • Date [4 Feb 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from baneblade
Review:
please for the love God make a sequel
Comments from author:
writing it right now.
Review By [baneblade] • Date [4 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from espinosaca
Review:
I'm liking this story, and I hope to see a sequel at some point, as well as your other stories. I'm also hoping you won't do what ST:2009 did and give Shepard a ship as early as that movie did for Kirk. Don't get me wrong, it was a great movie, but it stretches my suspension of disbelief to give what amounts to the best ship in the fleet to a not even out of the Academy cadet. I'm actually surprised at the ease with which the Asari had in becoming friendly with the Alliance. I realize that they'd be highly interested in a race so close in appearance to their own, but at the same time I don't think they'd be willing to step away from what they perceive as their path of guiding the younger races. The Asari can be quite patronizing, to the point of irritating. But I somehow doubt the Turians are going to be content to stay quiet forever. Keep it up.
Comments from author:
I'm glad you like it and no, Shepard isn't getting a ship that early. The end of this story was in the early 2170s. The next story will start at about the time Mass Effect 1 would start so Shepard's going to get her first ship at that time.

The asari or rather Matriarch Benezia know a little bit more than what is being let on. Of particular interest to Benezia was Rowena Shepard. They still haven't backed down from guiding a younger race as the asari were the alien tutors for the first human biotics.
Review By [espinosaca] • Date [4 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from AlecMcDowell
Review:
Nice little ending to this part of the story. I like that you seem to have decided not to involve any actual ST species too; it probably would've opened up too many cans of worms regarding the origins of so many of the ST species and the higher beings that exist in that reality as well
Review By [AlecMcDowell] • Date [4 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from bric
Review:
really enjoyed this story but i have to ask is this going to be a one off story or is it going to be part of a series
Review By [bric] • Date [4 Feb 14] • Not Rated
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