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Review of chapter "Chapter Seven - Standing in Deep Water" from raxadian
Oh, so she isn't the only demigod OC uh?
Comments from author:
Hi, thanks for reviewing. Just to clarify, Luke (Lucrezia) is not an OC.It's a gender bender thing. Rhea will be the only self-insert OC that's read the books.

Review By [raxadian] • Date [15 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Great Escape" from JamesBrown
okay, first- my only complaint about your story
if you don't update it often enough :)

Second-I don't think you need to mess with her
power levels or abilities, I don't think you have even
gotten close to Mary Sue levels with your character.
and I have no clue who your mystery God is -yet

Third-even modern automobiles with a lot of fiberglass
and plastics in their construction still act as Faraday cages,
but even though the people inside are mostly protected
you hit something with the amount of volts and amps
necessary to produce a lightning strike and it's not going to do
anything any good - particularly with multiple strikes.

fourth-you want to know something about your readers/reviewers.
okay, male,old enough to have been reading fan fiction
back when it was printed on mimeograph machines.
fairly well known in Chicago area fandom.
probably read maybe 5/6 thousand books at least over the last 60 years
even with the dyslexia.
thank God for Dragon NaturallySpeaking or I wouldn't be writing this.

keep up the good work, I look forward to your next chapter.
Review By [JamesBrown] • Date [6 Jul 14] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Great Escape" from AceDreamer
This is beginning to sound like Loki is her 'sponsor'...

If they're fighting a Minotaur, the best bet is to get it to do something stupid, like step in a hole, or over a cliff. It's got horns, a lot more strength, and experience of combat. They can hope they've got better eye-sight (useful at night in a storm), better reflexes, and they'd really, really, better hope sharper wits.
Review By [AceDreamer] • Date [6 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Great Escape" from misterwhy
I reckon Mr Vogel is an avatar of Chronos. The gods of the ancient greeks were versatile that way.

The relationship between Rhea and Percy seems about to get even closer, maybe a bit of incest soon? Your choice. Nothing shocks me about people going through stressful times.

I'm really curious as to the nature of Rhea's power over water will be since Percy is more volatile in nature while she is the one more grounded in nature.
Review By [misterwhy] • Date [6 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Great Escape" from Chargone
Very much a guy, here.

Humm. The car thing's a bit odd. Modern construction methods may have changed enough for it to happen, i suppose, but a car's basically a giant conductive metal shell. Lightning, being electricity, would normally take the path of least resistance and just run over the surface to the under side of the car then jump to the ground. Ruined paintwork and possibly Tires, sure. Hole in the roof? Only if it's a fabric convertible one... at which point the people In the car should have been electrocuted too. Or, i suppose, Enough lightning strikes in rapid succession might cause enough heat to Melt the car, but it wouldn't just be the roof and would cook everyone inside.

Or at least, that's my understanding of the basic physics involved. Admittedly, it doesn't account for the whole magical aspect that's probably involved.
Review By [Chargone] • Date [5 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Great Escape" from raxadian
Chronos champion... and her patron god acts like he was Discord...
Review By [raxadian] • Date [5 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ride the Wind to Me" from raxadian
Slayer by Gaslight is my favorite story of all the ones I am reading, is a 19 century Batman/Buffy story.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Great Escape" from phoenixrampant
gender: male

who Mr. Vogel is? he acts like Q from star trek, but he talks of Poseidon inheriting his insanity so my guess is that he is either Cronus or Uranus, since Cronus is supposed to be imprisoned in Tartarus i think vogel is Uranus, the father of Cronus and grandfather of Poseidon.
Review By [phoenixrampant] • Date [4 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Close To Home" from raxadian
Brotherly love? Well, it was common in the Greek myths...
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Super Powered Hot Chick" from raxadian
You know this is a site about Buffy and Angel, yes?

Anyway, I hope she doesn't lose control like that unless she is in danger.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Momentum" from raxadian
Well, maybe you could make her weaker that her brother? physically at just very fit human level, and having to mostly rely on her wits?
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Passage" from raxadian
It would be hilarious if she had been reborn as a boy. Also if this story isn't to involve anyone from BTVS, you need to re-tag the story.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Passage" from Selias
"I will help you and your brother any way I can, rules be dammed. But I cannot be a visible presence in your life, not if your mother raises you and Percy on the surface. I am so sorry for the tragic fate I brought you, but I am not sorry you were born."

Is that "dammed" just a typo, or a water pun?

EDIT: It's up to you, honestly. If you keep it, get ready to have people point out the "typo," though.
Comments from author:
Oh crap, yeah that's a typo.
Does it seem like a pun though...mmmh maybe I'll keep it then.
What do you think?

Review By [Selias] • Date [14 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ride the Wind to Me" from (Past Donor)Charlotte
I like this story which is why I am tracking it. I don't review much since I do a lot of reading on my phone and posting is a pita.
Comments from author:
That's good t hear. Thanks for taking thee time to review, tough. It means a lot.
Review By [(Past Donor)Charlotte] • Date [28 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ride the Wind to Me" from DeaconKrow
Hey, I started reading this story because it is very good and very well written. I have kinda slacked on reading this and started skimming because I am really here to read Xander Centric Buffy fic. Like I said this is really good and you are a talented writer, I just lost interest in the content as I am not really a huge Percy Jackson fan. I did read the books and they were interesting, but I wouldn't read them again. I hope you get more traction with readers on this. You may want to post it on under Percy Jackson to get more feedback.
Review By [DeaconKrow] • Date [27 May 14] • Not Rated
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