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Review of chapter "chapter five: the way in which they moved" from Eureka
Review:
A princess instead of a prince. Interesting. Very Charming that Cinderella didn't know that it was a ball for a princess instead of a Prince. LOL
Comments from author:
I actually tried to keep Cinderella's knowledge very ambiguous - I purposefully never mentioned, leading up to this in the story whom she believed the ball was for. But yes, in my little fic Charming is a Princess - Nolana to be exact. *grin*

And at the same time Cinderella does not know she is currently strolling with the Princess, Nolana is unaware that the fellow she is arm and arm with is actually a woman in her Father's suit -I enjoyed the balance of their secrets.

Thanks for reading my little story, Eureka!
Review By [Eureka] • Date [3 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter five: the way in which they moved" from CPTSkip
Review:
Your story remains a delightful retelling of Cinderella. I have no idea of how your story will end, but I'm sure I will find it charmingly romantic. Sorry about the pun, but it seemed to fit. Lol!

Edit: As I am a Swannqueen shipper on OUaT, I am now picturing Emma and Regina in my mind's eye.
Comments from author:
I've heard a bunch of different mash up names before but I got to say, I think Swannqueen is one of my favorites. And Emma and Regina as Ellis and Nolana, huh? That certainly works (just throw Emma in a snazzy suit and Regina in a ball gown *laughs*). I've never watched Once Upon a Time but since I have written different fairytale fanfics and been told about the show by a few different folks, I have looked up promo photos.

Personally, I don't have distinct actresses in my head really. The Disney movie was my starting point, timeline wise - and even aesthetically a bit both for the color of Cinderella's hair and eyes but also when I looked up the flashback shots of her Father for the fashion in which to do the suit. As for Nolana, I choose the name because it was the male of Nolan - one of the voice actors for Prince Charming but I didn't have anybody in mind for her either, although I can picture her a bit. Perhaps one of these days when I'm wasting time on the internet I'll cast my own story. *laughs*

Thanks so much for reviewing, CTPSkip.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [3 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter five: the way in which they moved" from Dmitri
Review:
Thank you for the update! It was very charming! (Pun intended.)
Comments from author:
It is one of those unavoidable puns when writing this story *laughs*. And I thank you very much for taking the time to review, Dimitri.
Review By [Dmitri] • Date [3 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter five: the way in which they moved" from (Current Donor)wizathogwarts
Review:
This story is progressing wonderfully. All the character interactions feel natural and real. The lead up to meeting the princess wasn't rushed and the actual meeting was detailed sufficiently to be quite credible. I'm looking forward to reading how and where this story goes.
Comments from author:
Thank you, wizathogwarts - I really appreciate that compliment. I know that I have been taking my time a bit with the pacing, but I rather enjoyed simply writing Cinderella making friends and becoming more comfortable with herself in this environment, and in these clothes. It is nice to hear that it read as feeling natural.

Thank you again, for your lovely words and for taking the time to review.
Review By [(Current Donor)wizathogwarts] • Date [3 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter five: the way in which they moved" from SamDragon
Review:
Very nice.
Comments from author:
*curtsies* Thank you kindly, SamDragon.
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [3 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter five: the way in which they moved" from misterwhy
Review:
an interesting twist on an old folk tale.

btw cinderella is not owned by disney or any other corporation. it is folklore.

disney owns a specific version of cinderella limited to the drawings from their movie
Comments from author:
I think the reason I initially started using that disclaimer was because it -was- that version of Cinderella that was my basis to diverge from. Starting from the point where, in the film, the step-sisters destroy the mother's dress. Does that happen in the folklore? It has honestly been a while since I read the original stuff.

Other than the starting point though, I really have no other pull towards the movie - I am even using many of my own characters (with more to come) and switching the gender on the love interest, but I didn't know if I needed to continue to use that sort of disclaimer, so I figured better safe then sorry. *shrugs*

Now that that ramble is over *laughs*, I thank you for reviewing, misterwhy.
Review By [misterwhy] • Date [3 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter four: new and wonderful" from Chargone
Review:
Well, this is an interesting story you've written so far.
I shall observe it!
With great interest, even.
Review By [Chargone] • Date [21 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter four: new and wonderful" from Dmitri
Review:
So far it is a very interesting story. Genderqueer Cinderella is a neat twist. Thanks for posting it here.
Comments from author:
Thank you, Dimitri. The idea itself, is based on a prompt from the lovely afterandalasia (as seen in the disclaimer section). But when I saw it, I certainly couldn't pass it by - right away, the idea was too intriguing. And by now I can so clearly see in my mind "Lord Ellis", picture certain little mannerism, hear the banter between Rel and Ava. This story has well and truly burrowed into my brain *laughs*.

Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [Dmitri] • Date [20 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter four: new and wonderful" from Taryn
Review:
How interesting! I hope this is a long story. Update soon!
Comments from author:
Thank you, Taryn. I do plan for this story to be many more chapters - I fear that I do not wish for this to play out like the well known tale and have lots in mind for the gradual growth of "Lord Ellis'" character. I hope you will enjoy it - and thank you for reviewing.
Review By [Taryn] • Date [20 Dec 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter four: new and wonderful" from CPTSkip
Review:
I continue to enjoy your story. Your 'Lord Ellis' is growing on me. 'He' is a nice 'fellow'. Lol!

I found my grandparent's copy of Grimm's Fairytales. My family throws no book away, ever. Not only did this version of Cinderella have the stepsisters cut off their toes and heels to fit into the slipper, doves that had sung earlier for Cinderella came down and pecked out their eyes! I am glad Disney left that part out. Lol!

Edit: He was Promethius, According to the Greeks he was the guy that brought fire to Humanity and the gods didn't like it. It made us Humans uppity. Screw the gods. The only one I might have worshipped was Athena and even she was a bit ... odd. Lol!
Comments from author:
I am glad this "fellow" is growing on you. *grin* Because although I am pulling from the story, much of this Cinderella's/Lord Ellis' personality is of my own creation and that is always chancy.

It is always so neat to have those old family copies. Although honestly I think the oldest family books I own are cookbooks passed down - we are a big baking/cooking family (my grandmother owned a catering business).

And the first thing I thought of when I read the bit about the doves was that Greek myth about that man chained to the rock who would have his eyes and liver eaten by an eagle every day and regrown every night....I believe I am remembering that correctly (even if I cannot pull the name at the moment.) Did you ever read Bulfinch? I think punishments in old tales were just always much more gruesome.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [19 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three: just waiting all along" from Muroshi
Review:
This looks to be an amazing story that I will eagerly await each continuing chapter of. A story of a person finding them self in a way they never even knew was possible and becoming a better person for it while at the same time finding love in the most unlikely of places.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much for your kind words, Muroshi. I must admit, that although the original tale is so very based on finding love, I am enjoying just writing this Cinderella discovering herself and having joy over making friends. So, I will play out the romance side of the story - with different twists here and there of course - but I like not making it completely the center.

Sorry for writing so much in response to what was a very nice review - my mind goes down rabbit holes and I have a tendency to just keep typing *laughs*. Thanks again for reading and reviewing my little story.
Review By [Muroshi] • Date [15 Dec 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter three: just waiting all along" from CPTSkip
Review:
I really like your story! I enjoy a twisted fairytale and you are doing a delightful job with Cinderella's gender switch. I can't wait to see who 'Lord Eilis' ends up with in your version of the tale. I also wonder if you will use the ending of the story where Cinderella hangs her Stepmother and Stepsisters for their mistreatment of her. Such jolly goings on in so many 'children's stories'. Lol!

Edit: I read a version of Grimm's Fairytales that my grandparents had that I believe was published in the 1920s. I was always amazed at how bloody some of the 'stories for children' the original folk tales were. I think I read in the version of Cinderella in the old collection the Stepmother cut the toes and heels off her daughters' feet so they would fit in the 'glass slipper'. I think a lot of modern parents would be horrified if they read the original versions. Of course, as a young boy, I thought they were pretty cool. Lol!
Comments from author:
I'm glad you are liking it so, CPTSkip. One little thing I feel I must say though, just for clarification, that it's not a complete gender switch - just Cinderella (still a woman) wearing man's clothing and everybody seeing her as a man (Lord Ellis - my own little male twist on the often used Ella).

And I haven't decided on my ending yet. I know my middle, but not the end. *laughs* Though I know what you mean by the "jolly goings on" in the original stories - I have a translation of Grimms Fairytales that I am very fond of and that can get both very random and very violent.

Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [15 Dec 13] • Not Rated
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