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Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Oooh, no! I agree completely! Plus, this is the way a Scooby battle would run. All the major players lined up and posing, while a quiet someone slides in to do the deed. Good work!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [7 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from VincentGK
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While I was expecting a fight between Xander and Jedi, which would have been great, I still like your story so far. Being a fan of both Star Wars and Warhammer 40k universes I can safely say that Eldar would win 9/10. And that's only because Jedi had a numerical advantage, otherwise Eldar would win hands down. Simply due to the difference in the type of enemies they face between the two universes, Jedi simply stand no chance.
Review By [VincentGK] • Date [6 Aug 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from serbob
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awesome sauce!
kinda disappointed that Farseer!Xander didn't seem to succeed at saving his people... but what can ya do? :D
Review By [serbob] • Date [6 Aug 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from Invictus
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You can still do a couple surprises, Xander could still be Elven, or Buffy could be Slanesh (sp?) (SHE who feeds). After all, Buffy was in that bone cage at the center of a vortex of energy that led straight to the Warp.
Review By [Invictus] • Date [6 Aug 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from MistofRainbows
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I was actually sort of hoping that he would turn and sacrifice Warren to get back to his world. I mean that would be fun and it would be sort of interesting to see. I'm looking forward to the wrap up.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [5 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from raxadian
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Cordelia saves the day? Wow, I did not see that coming. i guess this is it then?
Review By [raxadian] • Date [5 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from AnFan
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heheh, wise choice. To paraphrase a saying from "War Games" interesting game, the only way to win is to not play. You may still catch flack from readers, but not the ones who would say you did it all wrong.

After some more thinking, I suppose there is a chance that Xander will be able to remain friends with the gang given that Buffy's character went along with the plan and she will likely focus on her own guilt. Though it does have a chance of boiling up if she chooses to redirect that and place it on Xander. You'll likely not even deal with this option, given you said you were near the end of the story.

Now, the question comes up again from an earlier review I gave. Did Cop'lann provide a plan B and impregnate Buffy as both an option if he failed in plan A and also the possible addition of additional sacrifice if she became pregnant to fuel the plan A? Probably something else you aren't planning on using. Oh well.

Does Cordelia now get to be called the Spanish Inquisition by Xander? heheheheh. Guess it depends on how upset the apple cart is on whether normal quipage is appropriate for the situation.

Thanks for the update.

Oh, btw, all comments I make in any review or anyplace you read them are available for usage in any story you may be inspired to write. It's the reason I even try to give reviews out. The more I inspire people who are productive with their imagination and play well with the muse, the more I get to enjoy reading their work! :D
Review By [AnFan] • Date [5 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from Womgi
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Booooooo!

Its a nice story and all with an eldarish twist and all-I mean Booooooo!
Review By [Womgi] • Date [5 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from kolar
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Really like this story, one of the few where Xander's persona doesn't just shuffle along and follow the cannon script despite it being out if character for that persona. Also like that his character is actually the villain in this, there are tons where Xander dresses as a villain and is still helping the good guys.
Review By [kolar] • Date [5 Aug 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from uten
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Nice twist with Cordelia - especially her comment about aiming for Buffy's head. It will be interesting to see what happens there.

I'm surprised by the Farseer.. They are usually more perceptive. Unless he has taken this into account and there is some mental nudging in place within Buffy, Giles and the others.

After all, Farseer are far from idiots, and he had to have seen at least one future where he failed. All the official stories I've read that had Farseer die, always had them accomplish their goal. Or at least arrange for it to occur later. (Granted, I haven't read some of the newer novels)

So, I'm definitely looking forward to the fallout from this, as the nerds are also involved, and I can't see them stepping back, especially after having been a jedi for a night. Heck, it may even be enough to stop Warren falling to the dark. A lot depends on what is left over, and how long it lasts. And that depends on whether or not the energies on the statue were modified or not, either intentionally or unintentionally by the interaction with the warp - wraithbone was sung out of the warp next to it at least.

Can't wait to read the next chapter!
Review By [uten] • Date [5 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from grd
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Better question is if Xan will be able to live with himself if he sacrifices Buffy. He may go all dark side and be the reason the Eldar are dying out. Hmmm.
Review By [grd] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from raxadian
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Okay... things are going awfully wrong for the night were nothing happens.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from LanceAvalon
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One TK pull would have ended this once they'd stopped at the range of his control. Even glinting by pure movie level feats this should have been over.

The fact that your still nerfing the Jedi when facing a Farseer just ruins the story.
Comments from author:
No nerfing was intended, just something to delay the Jedi. If you need to blame anything, blame my lack of knowledge. Which I guess again proves that you should never assume intent when sheer stupidity will suffice.
Review By [LanceAvalon] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from AnFan
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Jedi vs Eldar? I think not. The Jedi can't win. Unless the exercise of this story was a futile confrontation that would disrupt and end the scoobie gang and any hope of the group working together ever again. Even if it isn't Xander's fault what his costume gets up to, there is no way that Buffy or even Willow will let him live down what he's done. It will be all Xander's fault and there will be a very large rift put between the groups members that wouldn't be able to be mended.

Now having said that, the Elder could loose. However I wouldn't mark it as a win for the Jedi ;) This would need further story telling by you or something like an afterwards that would tell how the world changes due to the actions taken by all involved. This could be possible, but I don't think it's likely.

The result of Xander's costume winning could be the birth of the entire universe he's trying to prevent in the first place, bringing about a closed loop that makes the whole thing inevitable and sucky. Not a bad story, but definitely not a happy ending kind of deal.

Personally I am kind of rooting for the underdog option: Magnito flying in to disrupt the outcome supported by Raven and Destiny :)

Thanks for the update. I'm kind of wondering how this will end.
Comments from author:
The really fun thing with reviews is when readers come up with all sorts of interesting plots and twists that can really take a story into all sorts of interesting ways. Things you could never hope to come up with yourself. That you wish you could use. And for that, I thank you.
Review By [AnFan] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from Bobboky
Review:
Very good work
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [3 Aug 14] • Not Rated
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