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Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from DieselDriver
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I have a teensy tiny problem with the idea that there are ruins left of Los Angeles after a 1 mile rock is dropped from interstellar space. The Arizona Crater is almost a mile wide and was made by what they think was a rock about 100 meters wide. Probably from Solar System space so the velocity would not be nearly as high. A mile is 16 times as big and with the much higher velocity the energy at impact would be at least hundreds of times more, K.E= 1/2 (m*V^2) is the formula. K.E. is the kinetic energy of impact. m is the mass which goes up as the square of the diameter (I think). V is the velocity at impact (which would basically be the escape velocity of the suns gravity (very high, I don't know though, somewhere in the dozens of miles per second?, Earth's is seven miles per second). The Arizona impactor was probably doing anywhere from 30 to 50 miles per second. Anyway, the velocity is squared so the kinetic energy goes up VERY FREAKING fast with the increased velocity. That is one heck of a lot of heat. Debris from the impact would land for hundreds of miles around as well. Some of that would probably be big enough to leave it's own craters.

So I doubt seriously if there would be anything but a hole, possibly filled with magma, where LA was. So use the ruins of Bakersfield or San Diego unless those were hit as well. I think you need to use smaller rocks... LOL

Oh yeah, just read Chapter 2 again. 2 to 2.5 K rocks would be twice as big as I thought. 20 to 25 times as big as the Arizona impactor. That makes it just that much worse.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from DieselDriver
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I'd like to respectfully point out that he has Earth ties too, to protect, in that there must be other dranzil demons around. Never have just one, right?
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from DieselDriver
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OK! I laughed about "called in reinforcements". Very good!
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from DieselDriver
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It sounds like Mulak and Buffie just might become friends (with a shared secret).
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from DieselDriver
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Ewww! Dip. That's nasty stuff. I can't imagine why you had to put that little bit in there. I hope there's a better reason than any I can imagine.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DieselDriver
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When I suggested a crossover to RAH's ST I didn't quite expect that you'd already done it. I also didn't quite imagine starting at a combat drop. I was thinking she'd fall out of mid air and land in front of someone and would end up joining. This kind of doesn't need her abilities at all (yet?).
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from alynambered
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I was pretty impressed with the whole story. Very Heinlein-esque.

Having partaken of just about every tobacco product (gagged the one and only time with chewing tobacco), I'm pretty much neutral on the subject. If you use, fine, and if you don't, keep it to yourself. This IS supposed to be a free country.

And my two cents is that I've enjoyed everything RAH has written, even his non-fiction. Tramp Royale was quite interesting, especially he and his wife's evaluation of Moscow's infrastructure.

Finally, yep, this don't need a sequel. But do keep your other stories coming. Thanks
Review By [alynambered] • Date [19 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from ThunderGod
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It was okay, a proper crossover with the book and NOT the (censored) movie. The dip was a niggle that you could have done without, as it interupted the flow of the story, I was WTF when you brought it up.
Comments from author:
Excellent review.
Review By [ThunderGod] • Date [27 Jan 14] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from nightshift
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Great ending.

In answer to your question, I think I never liked the original probably because it shocked me so much to see how harsh one of my favorite writers could sound. I had just finished Stranger in a Strange Land and Methuselah's Children and this was so different to both of them that it might have been as simple as I just couldn't wrap my extremely intelligent yet very timid 14 year old head around it. It's been a long time, maybe I should go reread it now that I'm considerably older and bolder. Michael Z. Williamson is a current favorite so I think the bellicose tone won't shock me quite so much.

If it does work out that I enjoy the re-read, I'll blame you.
Comments from author:
I loathed Stranger and any of the Lazurus Long stuff so I am the WRONG guy for you to take recommendations from :)
Review By [nightshift] • Date [26 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
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Wonderful story, thanks!

Tom.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [24 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from Xovervore
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Nice callout to the original novel's having Rico's father joining up, with your version having Dawn there. Makes a satisfactory conclusion to end it as you did.
Review By [Xovervore] • Date [24 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from (Recent Donor)DaveTurner
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Nice to see this end with a tribute to the original.

And yes people seem to get very passionate over Starship Troopers, I often think people have read a different book to the one I did!

Ok, nearly finished the fic I'm writing now, then its on to my take on Starship Troopers. Probably won't be posted for some time, thanks for giving me the 'push' to start work on something I've been meaning to do for several years now.

Great story.

D.
Comments from author:
I had the same thing going. I really wanted to write it and I just needed a tiny push.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DaveTurner] • Date [24 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from Starfox
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Nice ending indeed - and glad to have Dawn back. One of my favorite characters.

I don't really get the fascism seen in Starship Troopers (the novel). Militaristic, yes, but fascism seems a bit off. After all, while one needs to serve in the Military to become a citizen, one has the right to serve, no matter one's personal disability. As the recruiting Sergeant (who wears well-made prosthetic limbs off work, and only acts the cripple to make recruits see what MI can be like) said, even if one is blind, deaf and can only move one thumb, the army has to find them a Job, maybe as a sponge tester.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [24 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from PhilH
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I had a good time reading this. While it could clearly be continued, this was a good place to end it. Thanks for the ride!
Comments from author:
Ended in the same framing mechanism as the original novel.
Review By [PhilH] • Date [23 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from LordCorwin
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Excellent ending ....
:)
Review By [LordCorwin] • Date [23 Jan 14] • Not Rated
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