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Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from Hecatonchires
Review:
Once again a fun romp in the Grim Up North series :)
Comments from author:
Thank-you,
D.
Review By [Hecatonchires] • Date [16 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
Well, there we go! Nothing like some good, solid "ultraviolence" with assault weapons to solve all your problems for you. I approve. :-)
Comments from author:
I thought you might!

There comes a time when problems like, someone kidnapping and sacrificing your little sister can only be solved by the application of large amounts of fire power.

As they say; Peace through superior firepower...its one of the rules.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [15 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from Mcspender
Review:
Aah, nothing beats a good massacre to lifts the hearts =D!.
Buffy and Giles behaving like a married couple, Willow and Kenn planning for her baby, and a very nice round of BSDM for Dawn and Faith, thing are back to normal... or what happens for normal to this group xD.

Cool chapter, see ya!!!.
Comments from author:
Oh yes, so many different types of normal!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [15 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from MarcusRowland
Review:
And they all lived happily ever after (except for everyone who got shot, sacrificed, etc. etc...)
Comments from author:
No, they all lived happily ever after 'til the next time.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [14 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from Jazzibear
Review:
Oh, I did enjoy that! Full of blood-letting, and sex (though mostly unconsummated) – what’s not to like?

You’ll think me very slow on the uptake (and you’ll be quite right), but are we to take it that the holiday camp was a cross between Butlins and Colditz? Just wondering …

Experience suggests that another ripping yarn is in the works? I do so hope so.

C-E time: A plea from Tim in the words of Dictionary.com – “Usage note: Till and until are both old in the language and are interchangeable as both prepositions and conjunctions … Till is not a shortened form of until and is not spelled ’till [or ’til].” Quite a number of fanfictioneers should pay heed.
Comments from author:
First, until/till/'til. Interestingly I've always been taught that the shortened version of 'until' should properly be spelt as, 'til! I've been told by people in the book publishing business that grammar and spelling is often subject to 'fashion'. These changes and differences are what keeps 'English' a living language. I'm not saying you're right or wrong I'm just telling you what I've been told...isn't English fun!?

Butlitz, yep you've got it, the term was coined quite a few years ago by myself and some friends on visiting a friend who was working at one of these camps. They're mostly all closed now.

Next story in this series is 'The Torture Lovers' a tail of Evil-Alien-Frogs spoiling a night out in Middlesbrough!

Cheers,
D.

PS: I've just read your 'till' note again. While I'm not admitting to anything, I think using ' 'til' in speak is quite acceptable as its how some people speak. I'm not 100% sure but I think that's how I've mostly used it. As I say, isn't English fun!?
Review By [Jazzibear] • Date [14 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven." from Mcspender
Review:
Talk about jumping from the pan into the fire, oooh boy :O.

Cool chapter, see ya!!!.
Comments from author:
Cheers,
D.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [13 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven." from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
Wow, this is not Dawn's *year*.
Comments from author:
When is it ever?

Cheers,
D.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [13 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven." from CPTSkip
Review:
OK, Dr. Zimmerman has Gone Too Far! Sparking Tesla coils, billowing dry ice clouds, bubbling beakers with odd and brightly colored chemicals is par for the course, but shooting people is just Going Too Far! He must die. Or at least loose his academic credentials and tenure! Which would actually be worse than death for a Mad Scientist. What would Ming the Merciless or Dr. Fu Manchu say about his violating The Mad Scientist's Handbook? He didn't even use a Death Ray! Just a pistol, how mundane.

One thing you can say about the Kali Worshipers, they are persistent buggers. But is it a Tuesday? I mean, Dawn is getting kidnapped and all, but I have totally lost track of the date. And the Kali Worshipers should observe tradition, after all Kali is a very traditional goddess.
Comments from author:
Well, Willow is going to talk to the Ethics Committee about him.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [13 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven." from MarcusRowland
Review:
Naughty Ahme!
Comments from author:
Well she is a baddy.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [13 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten." from Mcspender
Review:
Oh boy, a holiday themed camp... that bring memories to my mind :S.
Nice to see Zimmerman and Algy bring around, things would be boring without them.
Cool chapter, see ya!!!.
Comments from author:
This was the dreaded 'Holiday Camp' based on the British sitcom 'Hi-De-Hi' and my one visit to such a camp...they really did have a fake volcano in one of the bars!

Cheers,
D.

PS: I wish to add that my visit was to meet up with an old army buddy who was working as the 'Camp Photographer'...that's a photographer who worked at the camp and not one who was 'camp'.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [11 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine." from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
I confess I'm not sure why they're so concerned about a lot of dead bodies. Willow should able to handle the following situations with a few permanently-placed spells:

A) Dead bodies laying about - Disintegrate them, or polymorph them into rocks and drop them a mile offshore.
B) Bullet-holes and bomb damage - Repair spells, TK and/or Unseen Servant spells to gather up any incriminating evidence, then dispose of as per previous.
C) A large, illegal arsenal - Invisibility, or a "don't see me" type spell.

Using the above, on their own land and seeing as they're not in the middle of town, they should be able to do pretty much whatever they want without being bothered by the authorities.

EDIT:
They're unsanctioned, judge/jury/executioner vigilantes (essentially international terrorists by any reasonable legal definition) - when exactly did they start caring about what's legal and illegal? Functional definition of "illegal" - getting caught, with evidence. Don't bother the cops and leave no evidence for them to bother you, and then worry about getting the job done of keeping the world safe from supernatural threats.

As for the magic, I don't see the above as "solving everything with magic," but more like "don't forgo some basic, useful spells where they would do the most good." The "rules" of BtVS magic changed practically by the episode and writer, and there was no consistency at all. The whole idea of "addictive magic" was not only incredibly stupid, it was also an admitted attempt to cash in on some federal money for putting "anti-drug" storylines in their show (several other shows around that time period took the feds up on it as well). As soon as that storyline was over and done with, and therefore inconveniently limiting, they went back to having Willow work whatever magic was useful for that episode's plot, this time without Tara around to whine at her for doing so. The sad truth of the matter is that Joss and Marti were not even remotely acquainted with the concept of an internally consistent cosmology, and the show suffered for it.
Comments from author:
Hi there,
Every thing you suggest would go against Willow's Responsible magic program, the poor women's trying to keep her use of magic to a minimum!

A) Shooting people dead is generally illegal as is deposing of bodies.
B) I always got the impression that on BtVS this sort of magic fix wasn't permanent. Also they have their very own building contractor...Xander has to eat too!
C) Again 'Responsible Magic' also the weapons are kept off sight although that might change.

Slayer Central is sufficiently close to Saltburn-by-the-Sea for the police to notice a small skirmish going on at a Girls Adventure Training School. This isn't Sunnydale, the Cleveland Constabulary are quite good at their jobs.

On a more 'real world' note. I've always thought that letting Willow 'fix things' using magic was too easy and in some cases bordered on 'lazy writing'. Willow comes along, casts a few spells and everything is better again! This is why I try to have the characters solve problems in a non-magic way. Also, remember what Tara said about 'using too much magic'.

In the Grim Up North reality, the slayers have a good relationship with the British security services, if the police became too nosy no doubt MI5 would 'lean' on them.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [11 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine." from Mcspender
Review:
Daamn, this one of the best combat scenes in all the series, congratulations dude =)!!.
It was so darkly funny seeing Buffy getting ready to kick butts and take name, and being thrown back inside again right when she was taking her first step out, talk about bein rejected.

Cool chapter, see ya!!!.
Comments from author:
Thank-you...I try my best with the combat...and there's more to come!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [10 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight." from Hecatonchires
Review:
"Yeah, okay you're pissed that Britain had to give India independence,” Buffy said
And Giles telling Dawn he thought she had better taste made me laugh :)
Comments from author:
Thank-you, I try my best.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Hecatonchires] • Date [8 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight." from Mcspender
Review:
There's no kill like overkill, and Dakka, there's never enough of it.
Clang is a follower of the Overkill Church, just like Buffy, I mean, she likes lasers too =D!!!.

The Blame Dawn party was wickedly funny xD!.

Cool chapter, see ya!!!.
Comments from author:
"There's no kill like overkill..." Which is more or less what Buffy says in 'The Wedding Day Zombie Blues' a future fic in this series, it goes something like...

Young Slayer: 'Don't you think that's over kill?'

Buffy; 'That's what I'm aiming for...'

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [7 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight." from Eureka
Review:
LOL Everybody trying to blame Dawn! I know a Clang that is going to be hurting if anyone is hurt from those bombs!
Comments from author:
Well Dawn always gets blamed for EVERYTHING!

Poor Dawnie.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [7 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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