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Review of chapter "Crow" from leb
Review:
this is a great story, i'm glad I found it even if I spend a lot of time looking up the xovers
Review By [leb] • Date [27 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Crow" from jcjade
Review:
It's great but the last line it says (on song) is it supposed to be our song?
Comments from author:
Thanks I fixed the problem.
Review By [jcjade] • Date [18 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Crow" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Ni-i-ice!
Comments from author:
Thanks
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [18 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Crow" from Harry
Review:
Something tells me that messing with a Crow is NOT a good thing for the Goa'uld to do! Might be another ally to call upon when the call goes out to start organizing against this threat.
Comments from author:
Glad your enjoying it.
Review By [Harry] • Date [18 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Crow" from JediKnight
Review:
Nice job on the fight.
Comments from author:
Thank ya.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [18 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Teen Wolf I" from JediKnight
Review:
Nice job.
Comments from author:
Thanks
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [15 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Teen Wolf I" from sorawithans
Review:
It's a good thing BtVS set the precedent of multiple species of Werewolf, otherwise this would just be confusing.
Comments from author:
Already plan how I'm going to explain the different types of wolves. I agree it does make things easier though.
Review By [sorawithans] • Date [14 Jun 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Teen Wolf I" from Dreamweaver
Review:
Sooooo....I guess Teen Wolf goes with the line "Feral moppet Cubs, united with the Holy Bane of their kind"?
Comments from author:
yep, the whole moppet thing was more Dru's speech pattern than anything else. I presume the holy bane part is understandable.
Review By [Dreamweaver] • Date [14 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Teen Wolf I" from Harry
Review:
If the Goa'uld try anything in this area, they are going to be in for a SURPRISE! The people are aware of the invasion and have some resources of their own to deal with the Jaffa and their bosses. Between the weapons and the Werewolf abilities, the Goa'uld are going DOWN! It may leave a bad taste in their mouths, but they are going to get the message: LEAVE THIS AREA ALONE!
Review By [Harry] • Date [14 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hercules I" from SamDragon
Review:
I wonder how many Olympians are left not ot mention the other pantheons?
Comments from author:
Well most of the big 12 and a few of the minor Dieties died or were trapped due to various reasons in Hercules and Xena. Also in the mythos of the shows the Gods gained power through a belief in them as I recall. So a number of the various gods would be a lot weaker than they used to be. A small handful might have more power. Heck the Scoobies are likely a source of nourishment for Janus considering their history with Ethan.
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [11 Jun 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hercules I" from Thedruid
Review:
13. 13 'crossovers' that are little more than introductions of them to the story, with little to no thought about how they would actually be able to do anything. Just adding them for the sake of adding them. You know what the public and military are going to do with all these groups? Focus on one or two and tell the others to stop interfering with the protection of the planet and human race. Or just ignore them entirely save for the time or two they happen to cross paths. And in that situation they are likely to get friendly fire becuase they were in the way of the plan but nobody knew it until after the mortors were used. And even then only if a body is recovered and identfied.

I've seen many stories like this before, and except for a couple of exceptions they are little more than the writer making funny scenes, with little actual story or character development. Sure, they can be long and wordy, but little actually happens but meaningless scenes that barley qualify as omakes.

This is a great concept, but would be a much better story if you focus on 2, maybe 4 diffrent crossovers and actually develop them into a story. Then keep the dozen plus others in omake territory, for that's all they are. Can even keep your Mary-suing of Buffy from chapter 15 and not break my SoD if you can actually create a story with depth and character development.
Review By [Thedruid] • Date [11 Jun 14] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hercules I" from Xoverficfan
Review:
I loved this idea, and the first few chapters. However, your story is 48,000 words of opening paragraph. If there is one for every line in the premonition poem we have another 13 or 14 to go. I'm losing faith you will ever develop this into a real story with a developed plot, a middle, a climax and an end. I truly, truly hope you do. I'm just losing faith.
Comments from author:
I do have plans for this and you should have seen the list before I hacked it down. Maybe I should have hacked it some more.
Review By [Xoverficfan] • Date [11 Jun 14] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hercules I" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Probably my favorite chapter yet. :)

I'm glad to know that Gabrielle (still accompanied by Xena's spirit, no doubt) died fighting the good fight, and that her death saved the remaining Amazons ("To a strong Amazon nation!"). On to the next rebirth for the Bard and the Warrior Princess, at last.

And I LOVED the reference to Methos and the other Horsemen from "Highlander" having fought to the last to kick the Goa'uld off the planet (they might be psycho killers, but still they have higher standards of behavior than the Goa'uld . . . or perhaps they just didn't want to share their prey, or couldn't resist a helluva good fight?).

But most of all, I loved the way you had immortal-Hercules-masquerading-as-actor-Kevin-Sorbo fighting Jaffa who so rudely attacked the H:tLJ location shoot in New Zealand, with Aphrodite (so in character!) showing up as well. (Btw, I hope Sam and Jack from SG1 are among those whom Aphrodite hopes will be brought closer together by the stress of the invasion). Looking forward to seeing what Ares decides to do, if you happen to write a follow-up chapter to this part of the fight at some point.

Well done!
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed this.
Aphrodite just kind of flowed. I always thought that she was an amusing character.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [11 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Hercules I" from draconis
Review:
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Excellent somewhat subtle double-entendre ending in those last two sentences! "The Olympians were on the move." Context is everything.

If it wasn't intended...well, a very fortuitous bit of writer's luck.
Review By [draconis] • Date [11 Jun 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hercules I" from JediKnight
Review:
Enjoyable chapter here, hoping to read more soon.

-Any chance of using the series "Terminator: The Sarah Connor Chronicles"?
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it.

Sorry, no terminator.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [11 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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