Review of chapter "Part 2 Shocking the Family" from MagnusXXN
Get a beta reader. I'm assuming the gist of this is everyone the scooby's knew came back from the dead. Maybe that's good, maybe it isn't, but either way it's too difficult to go through when it's written like this.
Post you need a beta reader, or a proof reader. And don't worry, a lot of writers just starting out have the same problems.
Review By [MagnusXXN
] • Date [13 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One A Special Gift" from DarthTenebrus
Fitting start for Valentine's Day...Willow gets to see and be a part of the brightest light ever.
Only caveat there is when the light burns brightest, the shadow is deepest. White lighters beware...the shadow and the light are one...
Comments from author:
True enough but sometimes the good has to happen. Balance and all.
Review By [DarthTenebrus
] • Date [14 Feb 14] • Not Rated