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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
quite the nice fic, thank you for sharing and I really hope there is more.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [4 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from deathgeonous
Review:
Again, I say "On with the sequel!!!" This is just too good and too much fun to just leave it here. Well, thanks for writing this, and bye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [8 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from shinewolf
Review:
To add on.
I agree with the flash backs do take away unless its a part of the story and blends in with it as to not take away from the story. Sadly a lot of writes are as subtle as a punch to the face.

I was think though more a long the lines of xander revealing his past in steps, at first not to forth coming and as time passes and bonds/trust is made he reveals more of his past to the crew. Like a blind date at first its very general and impersonal but as time goes by and you find common ground talks become more personal and less general and more to the point.
Ex. Were are you from? Around. To. Were are you from? Earth. Getting some were but still not as in formative. To. Were are you from? Earth, its an uncharted planet on the other side of the galaxy.

This we as xander make friends the reader makes a connection at the same time.

Also what about pairings xander may be in the body of a female but he is still a male. So would it be with a female or would you try to change xanders mind set to like men? Hope its not the last one. Or are there no pairings?
Comments from author:
Xander probably won't be revealing much about... herself. Maybe a turn of phrase that nobody will get, and she'll have to explain. However, a running gag like that would get boring after a while. She told Celeste that she can't talk about how she knows what she knows, so it'll be her excuse for a while.

Pairings: Got to be careful here because Xander is in the body of a newly minted 16 year old, but it's a 37 year old male in her head along with the memories of a old Satele Shan. If there is a pairing it'll be with another girl. He's already got an attraction to Celeste. Ahsoka is closer in age... but she's 14, which is worse, pedo-wise. Needless to say, there will be problems. Most likely there will be sexual angst of some sort, but I'm not a fan of heavy angst in a story, so it won't be overwhelming or anything.

I can definitely say that there will be no Aayla/Xander pairing, nor with the guys.
Review By [shinewolf] • Date [30 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from shinewolf
Review:
I really think you should continue this story your self its amazing. You wouldn't have to add a intro because of how you wrote the story you can simple have xander reveal his origin later on when he builds closer bonds to people. So I'll bag you to continue this fic please a very happy and excited fan. :)
Comments from author:
Thanks for taking the time to comment!

I've started and stopped a number of follow-ups to this. My original intent was to make this a "Adventures of Xander and Crew" type short-stories (5-10k word), but I find myself writing a lot of stuff that needs a lot of back-story, and I dislike *Flashback* *End Flashback* crap that a lot of poor writers lean on as crutches. In fact, I dislike flashbacks in general, because it throws off the pace of virtually any story I read.

Keeping that in mind, I've gone back and started from where I left off. I want to make sure I have enough material at first, before I start posting what I've already done. This way there's not a lot of waiting for the "next" chapter.

Thanks again for your interest.
Review By [shinewolf] • Date [30 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from kffs
Review:
Fun!
Review By [kffs] • Date [10 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from malchance
Review:
I really hope you intend to continue this story (maybe make it into a series). I would love to see where you take it in the future. I also enjoy how you were able to write a gender-bender that doesn't feel like a gender-bender, Xander is still Xander throughout the fic.
Review By [malchance] • Date [23 Mar 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Semil
Review:
Enjoying the setup, and eagerly await more.
Review By [Semil] • Date [21 Mar 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Oxnate
Review:
I eagerly await the sequels.

Make sure you Edit Story Details on this one and add it to a series (Add Series) first before you post the next story. Actually, you can do that now so you don't forget. That way, all your loyal readers will be informed of the story instead of having to find it again on their own.
Review By [Oxnate] • Date [9 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Chikageko
Review:
Nooooo.... how could you? Such a beautiful setup and it's over? Please for the love of all you view holy say there's another, either posted or in the wings.

Edit1: Thanks for the reminder. I'll be looking forward to that.
Referring to CJcold's review. Something like HK would be cool. Most the the Jedi seem to be robotics genius's for some random-ass reason, and that should be tech that Satele's familiar with so...
Aside from that there's the ubiquitous R series astromechs everyone seems to like. Or, shit, since you're Revan's kid you could make something entirely new between Xanders comics and Satele's tech know-how.
Comments from author:
You might want to check the very first paragraph of the story, the Note to be more specific. There will be more, but it's not going to be "the next day" or whatever. It'll be specific adventures in the same universe using the same characters that I've set up here. ;)
Review By [Chikageko] • Date [2 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ChefJackButler
Review:
I normally ignore writers who fish for encouragement as blatanty as you did here,but this is too good to not contijue.

Edit:

This is the quote that drove my commentary: "This story is finished and awaiting a squeal if there is any interest. So let me know afterward if you are interested in anymore, if you want."

That's a pretty blatant request. But hey, as I said, yes, I am interested. Its too good not to continue.
Comments from author:
I'm sorry; I'm confused. I went back to reread what I put in my notes that would lead anyone to think that I "blatantly fished" for encouragement. I'm boggled as to what that could be. The only thing I ask for was "if you want to see more let me know." If I was to say, "I'm not writing any more until I get X-number of reviews," or something of the like, I could see where fingers could be pointed. For some odd reason, I think you're reading more into the statement that was actually written.

Normally, at the end of each chapter, I tend to write something along the lines of, "Thanks for taking a few moments to write a comment; they are always appreciated."

I seriously hate to think about what something like that might have sparked in your mind.

Edit: I still see that along the same lines as "If you want to see more let me know." just reworded. Again, I'm still not seeing how asking if there is any interest in seeing more is akin to what you're saying. Maybe I'm simply too thick or something.
Review By [ChefJackButler] • Date [2 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Raider
Review:
very well done..more please.
Review By [Raider] • Date [28 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LostDragon
Review:
To hell with waiting for someone to answer your challenge. Write this story yourself! !!
Review By [LostDragon] • Date [25 Feb 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Blackguard
Review:
Interesting start, I look forward to where this will go.
Review By [Blackguard] • Date [23 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Orchamus
Review:
OOOOOOhhh!!!! So evil, cutting it off like that!! This'd make an amazing fic, a splendid one!! Honestly, I can't point anything wrong with it out, and the premise of a Black Ops Jedi squad running about with 3 unattached females and Xan in a clone teen Satele body(hot damn by the way, Satele was gorgeous in the Old Republic game), yeah, something resembling sexual tension is gonna happen.

More PLEASE!!!
Review By [Orchamus] • Date [22 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Yshury
Review:
Awesome story. Please write more.
BTW. What is Anakin talking about:

Anakin took one look at me and his eyes widened. “You! You’re the one…”
Review By [Yshury] • Date [22 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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