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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from wswords
Review:
You took my review way to seriously, it was 50% a joke, 25% about my lack of observation skills and only 25% about anything actually wrong with it.

That said seeing the next chapter, I agree it was a bad chapter cut. Still don't worry about it I have seen people do much worse than that.
Comments from author:
Oh. Well, I do try to take my reviewers and their concerns seriously.
Review By [wswords] • Date [31 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen" from Mcspender
Review:
So Seo and Dave, teh hehehehehe!!!!. At least Seo now knows that this time, it was the guy the one that felt the attraction to her xD.
And I really, really wanna see Ten Seo eating some well deserved humble pie, so, count me in for the Ten Seos!!.

Cool fic, see ya!!!.
Comments from author:
Yeah, Dave and Seo will wind up having a very long and interesting relationship, which will lead to passion, romance, betrayal, adulterous love affairs, a lot of yelling at Seo from her family, and voyages into other universes. It's gonna be a long road ahead.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [31 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve" from wswords
Review:
Good story but the ending was terrible. The resolution of the plot was good, but have you ever heard of a falling action? You are normally better than that.

Oh wait the story isn't over yet.

That was more or less what I thought after reading that chapter.
Comments from author:
Uh... yeah, there's one more chapter.

It sounds to me like your criticism is more about the way I've divided up the chapters in this story, as I'm usually careful to make the story not feel like it's over before it really is. That's a completely valid criticism.

To be honest, I always write these things as one long continuous story, then go back after I've got it pretty good and decide where to shove in chapter breaks. As a rule of thumb, I try to aim for 1,500 -2,000 words per chapter, but take care to make each section read okay as a segment of the whole, as well.

However.

When I got to posting this story, I opened up the file and found -- to my horror -- that I'd forgotten to divide it into chapters. As a result, the chapter divisions in this are really not very good. I whole-heartedly agree.

When I post up the ending, though, I'm hoping you'll like the story better. And I promise to be better about chapter divisions in the future.
Review By [wswords] • Date [30 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve" from Mcspender
Review:
Oooh yeah, I is dizzy because of the twists.
I literally did not see it come the game of doubles, all I can say is. this was reaaally cool! xD!!.
Cool chapter, see ya!!!!.
Comments from author:
Why thank you!

*bows*
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [30 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve" from ellf
Review:
Oh dear. There _is_ more than one Nestene consciousness, right? I mean, something has to make Auton Rory and.... well, I suppose if it doesn't have the other stuff... it makes sense.


Edit: Uh... I just realized that half of that didn't make sense. Good fic. I should sleep.
Comments from author:
Hehehe. I understood what you meant. There's a bunch of Nestene Consciousnesses out there, yes. So while Seo's eliminated the problem on this planet, she hasn't destroyed all the Nestene Consciousnesses completely.
Review By [ellf] • Date [30 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from Mcspender
Review:
So long Trinch, you're gonna go to a very special place, pretty warm if you ask me, but you're gonna be in in verry infamous company.

I wonder what did Seo saw now xD.

Cool chapter, see ya!!.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [29 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from Tir
Review:
Is Trinch going to show up in a future story?

Edit: no, not really. I was just wondering if his back story with Dawn and Seo was going to show up at some point.
Comments from author:
Not one I have planned. Do you like him?

Edit: Oh. Well in that case, I won't bother. It's okay, I wasn't really planning on it, anyways.
Review By [Tir] • Date [28 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from Mcspender
Review:
Nothing like having a good ole demagogue to manipulate people, specially the paranoids one. And to think David was classified like the un-trusty one.

Cool chapter, see ya!!!.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [28 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from Dmitri
Review:
It looks like the girls aren't out of the woods just yet!
Comments from author:
Yeah, this is the part of the plan where everything goes belly up.
Review By [Dmitri] • Date [27 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from wswords
Review:
If you were talking about me, I meant the crazy relative who left his money to Alison's parents. But this story is good too. Hope you aren't too disappointed.
Review By [wswords] • Date [26 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from Mcspender
Review:
Ok, it kinda sounds like a veeery simple plan, altough little David doesn't like that simple.
Let's see if the Nestene reacts the way Seo expects :s.

Cool chapter, see ya!!!.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [26 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from Mcspender
Review:
Hoooly cow, so this quite the mess, and little Dave is the key( Teh heheh, the key xD!) to solve this mess caused by that racist Mad Doctor.
Let's make some mind noise xD!!.
Cool chapter, see ya!!!.
Comments from author:
Exactly! Let's see what Seo has planned!
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [25 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from (Current Donor)ColBlack
Review:
Great story. Looking forward to what happens next.

David Walter Korjensky III. I'm sure I've heard that name before...
Comments from author:
Hey! You picked up on that! Whoot!

Reread the end of "A Scooby of Her Own."
Review By [(Current Donor)ColBlack] • Date [25 Mar 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from Mcspender
Review:
So the Nestene want to run away from the planet?. Interesting, very interesting, let's see if that cage doesn't kill Seo and Dave first :S.
Cool chapter, see ya!!!.
Comments from author:
Fingers crossed they make it out of there alive!
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [25 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from Dmitri
Review:
Well, that was a bumpy ride! And Seo made herself a new friend. That is good too!
Review By [Dmitri] • Date [25 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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