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Review of chapter "Friends, Family, Destiny" from (Current Donor)Truthmaker
Review:
Not even a few days of respite before carting Buffy off to her next trial. I'm starting to really wish that Ms. Post had been caught by the Master of Cleveland.

Well done with this story. I'll be happily waiting for Book IV.
Comments from author:
Oh don't worry, Gwen will eventually get what's coming to her. I just have to design something really worse than anything I have done until now. But my imagination is good for that. :)

Book IV is on its way. Book V is being written. Book VI is already partly plotted (meaning, I have one of the storylines already ready to be written).
Review By [(Current Donor)Truthmaker] • Date [14 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Friends, Family, Destiny" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
To shuffle off one set of chains and don yet another...an endless existence filled with sacrifice and heartbreak at the mercy of a tyrannical organisation that views Buffy Summers as little to nothing more than a disposable weapon...but for the first time in her existence she knows happiness and love. For this, and for once, she is happy.

Well done; looking forward to the next one.
Comments from author:
He he yes, now that she has almost had a taste, now that she knows her mother loves her and she doesn't give a rat's ass about the Council, but only about her responsibilities - and she never even met Uncle Ben! - she is ready to become the Buffy we have met in "The Wish". Of course at this stage, she still has to meet Vania, who will crush the very last illusions she may have had about the lies her watcher told her and show her what her true nature is. That's why Book IV starts with a rather long summary, enhanced with other events that are essential to understanding what will happen once Buffy arrives to her true mission.

Book V is completely plotted by the way, and the first draft of Chapter 1 is almost complete. I am very enthusiastic about that one, because it gives me a chance to play Buffy the way I really like, in a completely different environment. But it's a little early to talk about Book V...
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [12 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chains and Bonds" from burmafrdnow
Review:
one of the more completely unrealistic fics I have ever seen. Kind of interesting in just how far off the edge of the world you would drive it.
Comments from author:
And you have seen nothing yet! The fifth installment is, quite literally, "far off the edge of the world"!
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [12 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chains and Bonds" from fanreaderonetwo
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"Given the way this series has progressed so far I can't help but think of the old saying...
"The light at the end of the tunnel, is the headlight of the oncoming train."

Everything looks to be headed for a nice, happy ending. Can't wait to see what really happens. ;-)"

****

Given the very dark flavor of this fic, I have long suspected "the oncoming train" outcome.
OTOH maybe the author will pleasantly surprise me.
Comments from author:
Let's just say that Post and Buffy are NOT going to England. "Slayer in Chains" loops back to "A Darker World". Book IV retells - briefly - the events already related in "A Darker World", adding a few pertinent facts, and the the next story begins.

That's it for now.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [6 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End of a Tunnel" from (Current Donor)Truthmaker
Review:
Given the way this series has progressed so far I can't help but think of the old saying...
"The light at the end of the tunnel, is the headlight of the oncoming train."

Everything looks to be headed for a nice, happy ending. Can't wait to see what really happens. ;-)
Comments from author:
Oh you know me so well! :)
Review By [(Current Donor)Truthmaker] • Date [5 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chains and Bonds" from fanreaderonetwo
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"Given all the weird and corrupt Buffy related shit they had seen occurring in official-dom, I would expect that the two FBI agents would be _very_ suspicious of a new player with federal credentials popping up who wants custody of Buffy.
As in, "let's _start_ by calling the Secret Service HQ and verifying that 'Agent Gwendoline Post' actually exists and has official business with Buffy, and also verify that the woman we met _is_ that agent rather than an imposter." And unless the Council has better contacts with _high_ US official-dom than I expect, 'Agent Post' would soon be sitting handcuffed in an FBI interrogation room explaining to the FBI _and_ the angry Secret Service what she was doing with fake ID trying to kidnap Buffy.
Assuming the Council had enough clout to get past that point, they start using their contacts and unofficial sources to poke into Agent Post and her business with Buffy.

Comments from author:

The Council has numerous operatives in the US and the world. Surely they would not have invented that particular story if they had not a way (corruption? magic? both?) to make it hold. Most certainly, the FBI has verified it and found it to be "true".

Unless of course the corruption played a part in a higher level than the LA VCS...

Unless of course TPTB wanted that story to hold, because they wanted Buffy to return under the Council's supervision. After all, Quentin wanted her dead, now he is welcoming her back?

You're right, there's a mystery there. I'll make myself a note to explain it at some time."

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The simplest way for Post and the Council to get a deception past the two FBI agents would be for her (or someone assisting her) to use magic to suppress their suspicions.
This might be far faster and cheaper (in terms of burning favors and contacts in the US) than making sure that Post would check out "clean" if Washington was called. Then of course there is the Council's incredible arrogance, assuming that no mere "colonial" would _dare_ suspect a Highborne Brit of nefarious activities.

This magic approach could be by directly putting spells or compulsions on the agents (Jedi style) or with "Harry Potter" style magicked documents. So the two see or handle Agent Post's ID and documents taking control of Buffy and accept their validity without question instead of 'smelling a rodent' and verifying them.
Of course the next question is how long either form of magical "whammy" will last. Image of one of the agents' associates asking about how they verified Post ID and their suddenly asking themselves "what the hell happened to our professionalism" and starting an investigation. Image of Post and Buffy being stopped boarding a plane for England.
Comments from author:
Your last paragraph is particularly interesting. It goes along with a story development I've been tinkering with, and would mean a quite interesting "association" between the FBI and somebody else. You may definitely notice your idea being used, maybe in Book IV. Thanks!
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [5 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End of a Tunnel" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
And a Happy New Year!
Comments from author:
Short and sweet, like this chapter.

Don't worry, the story is far from over, and Buffy is going to miss the Moment of Perfect Happiness by half a minute. Story #4 is already drafted, and Story #5 is being plotted. Even better, I now know how the whole saga ends. Not in a while.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [5 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End of a Tunnel" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
Given all the weird and corrupt Buffy related shit they had seen occurring in official-dom, I would expect that the two FBI agents would be _very_ suspicious of a new player with federal credentials popping up who wants custody of Buffy.
As in, "let's _start_ by calling the Secret Service HQ and verifying that 'Agent Gwendoline Post' actually exists and has official business with Buffy, and also verify that the woman we met _is_ that agent rather than an imposter." And unless the Council has better contacts with _high_ US official-dom than I expect, 'Agent Post' would soon be sitting handcuffed in an FBI interrogation room explaining to the FBI _and_ the angry Secret Service what she was doing with fake ID trying to kidnap Buffy.
Assuming the Council had enough clout to get past that point, they start using their contacts and unofficial sources to poke into Agent Post and her business with Buffy.
Comments from author:
The Council has numerous operatives in the US and the world. Surely they would not have invented that particular story if they had not a way (corruption? magic? both?) to make it hold. Most certainly, the FBI has verified it and found it to be "true".

Unless of course the corruption played a part in a higher level than the LA VCS...

Unless of course TPTB wanted that story to hold, because they wanted Buffy to return under the Council's supervision. After all, Quentin wanted her dead, now he is welcoming her back?

You're right, there's a mystery there. I'll make myself a note to explain it at some time.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [5 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Consolation" from DarthTenebrus
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You....weren't lying. And it was about damn time Buffy learned the truth. And for that, among many other crimes, Hank Summers is spending eternity roasting in the flames of Hell...

It's a damn shame that Buffy has to go back to Post, but at least now her days at Desdichados are numbered. It kinda puts the events of the first story's opening chapter in a new perspective; I shall have to read the first story once again because of this.

Truly well done.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Yes indeed Hank Summers deserves the worst. And Buffy, well Buffy is now free of her guilt, she understands more clearly what to expect from whom, and she is going to turn into the Slayer we all met and found so different in "The Wish".

The first story is actually two stories, remember: before her arrival to New Orleans and after "Slayer in Chains". The next story will summarize what happened in the "after" part, adding pertinent facts which had no real relevance until now, and then we will plunge into Buffy's future.

Last night I had a major idea for the fifth story. I can't talk about it because it would mean telling what happens in the fourth. But it blew my mind, so you know it's something BIG!
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [30 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Consolation" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
I'm still thinking that Buffy's reward for all her suffering will to be told while she is dying in some extremely nasty way is that it was an enormous practical joke on her.
Comments from author:
Oh that would be nasty indeed. You should write a story like that.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [29 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Love" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Perhaps this should have been titled "Hope"; that seems more fitting than "Love", yes?

Hope Sorrento got his comeuppance with his death; the new DA seems less of the bought and paid for type than Sorrento ever was. And if our dear friend Quentin is angry at the Slayer surviving that assassination attempt, then Don Angelus must be dancing a jig that she's still alive; this almost guarantees that he'll be able to get her brought back to LA to face his tender mercies...and Darla's. All he has to do to facilitate that is to delay the new people in place in the California justice system long enough to get his people in place.

And if the bastards at Desdichados have the unmitigated gumption to make Buffy leave Dawn behind in that place, then I can imagine that she'll use the judgment award money to orchestrate a breakout and the total destruction of Desdichados.
Comments from author:
"Love" refers to the sacrifice Buffy is making by staying when she could leave. By the way, "Slayer in Chains" refers mostly to the chains Buffy has made for herself by accepting to come and save Dawn. You really think she could not have escaped the inept New Orleans cops if she had wanted to? Buffy KNEW she had to sacrifice herself to obey the order her mom gave her in her Slayer dream.

Funny you talk about "Don Angelus" (I love that nickname, I may use it), he opens "Consolation", the next chapter. I think you'll agree with the title of that one...
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [22 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hope" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
Wondering how many of the inmates have frost bite, and are (or should be) in the hospital due to malnutrition, exposure, overwork, abuse and infections (from the abuse).

Given how Buffy has been starved almost from the beginning of her capture in Louisiana(with a Slayer's fast metabolism) she should be particularly bad shape.
Comments from author:
Yeah, it's really strange that the inmate don't fall like flies. But this is an alternate universe, so maybe their Fahrenheit scale is a bit different...

As for Buffy, you bet she's in bad shape at this time. At THIS time...
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [15 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Hope" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Level V custody...I can barely imagine what's in store for the Buffster there...and likely I don't want to know.

Nice job with the buildup; things look pretty much hopeless for everyone imprisoned at Desdichados, but sending Buffy 7447 out to be hunted, while atrocious in itself, whilst everyone who sees her clothes in the main yard is subjected to the worst possible treatment. Then you offer a faint glimmer of hope in the form of two FBI Special Agents with orders from a US District Court Judge to see Buffy.

And Lisa's one step closer to finding Buffy, having found possibly the one remaining living relative that has any semblance of compassion for her niece, and that's an understatement. It's just too unfortunate that finding Buffy will come with a grossly unfair price to pay, in the form of Cyvus Vail...
Comments from author:
Oh just more beatings... the routine in Desdichados.

As for the glimmer... Well, you'll have to read the next chapter. This story has only four chapters to go, and I can't say too much at this stage.

Don't worry, there ain't no wicked witches on Joyce's side of Buffy's family. And yes, Lisa will have to pay a gross price. But she's that kind of girl...
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [15 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vengeance" from Vorchan
Review:
Well, I have only this to say about the conduct of the state in this matter in this fic: "Yes! Sue the state into bancrupcy! Then fire the cops, the judges, hey, the legal system in that state belongs behind BARS! They are the criminals, and belong Perminently incarcerated!"
In addition, the state belongs perminently in debt that it cannot repay, and WILL repay, even without the ability to repay; and musten't ever even Eat or Drink until Every Single Cent is re-payed WITH INTEREST!
Let them have their police, but prevent the police from Ever being equipped to do their jobs, and prevent the state from Ever having any ability to function- then punish it for it's inability to function! That, my neighbor, is the way a state is to be punished: render it powerless, and continually forced to pay money that it cannot get- yet it doesn't get what it needs until it Does pay the money it cannot pay! Then, publicly humiliate the government of the state, and use it's own funds to fund anarchists in it to destroy it! That's how you discipline a state: Destroy from within!!!!!!
Great morals of the story: "the state is always the enemy of the citizens, never show it any mercy or forgiveness!" I support the concept COMPLETELY!!!!!!!
Comments from author:
Well, before we get our electric saws and Molotov cocktails out, let's remember that this is an Alternate Universe.

But, having said that, I agree that some people in this story deserve a harsh punishment.
Review By [Vorchan] • Date [15 May 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vengeance" from Eureka
Review:
SPIKE???? Spike is taking "care" of those who have tortured or harmed Buffy?
Comments from author:
That's what it looks like, doesn't it? Of course, the big question would be "Why?"...
Review By [Eureka] • Date [8 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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