Ok, I read this again and was thinking that you could do a short story: When Dawn met Vala. That would be a good one, don't you think? :)Vala is like Anya if Anya did cons LOL

Still a good read, doll.

Not too shabby, really.

The idea of Dawn abandoning her entire world was a BIT extreme, of course, but you gave us a pretty clear look at how she adapted once she came through, and the characterisation of SG-1 and the battle-hardened Dawn generally went very well.

To say nothing of the addition of their reaction to learning the truth about Dawn’s origins; the initial scepticism might have been frustrating, but it all went well once the necessary questions were answered regarding Dawn’s world and her Key status.

Keep up the good work!

(Any chance of future stories looking at this universe?)

Great story! It is interesting to see a different side of Dawn with less supernatural stuff.

Thanks for your review, Gideon.

Regards, Tals

An excellent tale. The personalities of each character from SG-1 were dead-on. The new, battle-hardened Dawn is engaging and entertaining to read about. The only (only only) critique I have is the occasional spelling or word-choice error. The storytelling aspect, however, is great. Thank you for the entertainment!

Hi Starshinedown. Thanks for the review. I'm glad I managed to entertain you with this story, and even more that my characterwork was - quote: "dead-on". *smiles*

As for the spelling... Ugh! - I just don't feel like fixing it at the moment, so it's good to hear that it didn't ruin the story for you.

Thanks again for the review. Regards Tals

Awesome story - Thanks for sharing!

Thanks for reviewing!

Tals

I read your story from start to finish in one sitting a couple of years ago, but apparently neglected to review (or it may've been before I had a log-in on TtH), so -- having just re-read it ALMOST in one sitting, after a fanart by Methos reminded me of it -- let me take this opportunity to say thank you for writing this moving story.

I see from your response to a couple of other reviews that English is, as I'd suspected, not your first language, but that didn't seriously detract from my enjoyment of the story. The situation and characters were so gripping and believable that the little details of spelling or grammar didn't seem to matter at all. Excellent story-telling!

Thanks for your review, RevDorothyL... I'm glad you enjoyed the story. And it's good to hear that the less than perfect grammar didn't detract from the story. Sorry I haven't responded earlier to your review (I do feel it's only polite to respond when you take the time to share your reactions to the story). Real Life, and all. Thanks again.

Regards, Tals

Just wanted you to know that I've reread your story a few times and as a result, this is your fault. ^_^
http://www.tthfanfic.org/Story-19384-20/Xayian+Worlds+Collide.htm Hope you like :D

Ria

Hi Xayian, I just reviewed your picture/manip, before seeing your (this) review of my story... - I have your story/fanart on my list of tracked stories. Thanks for the review, and for the lovely manip.

Tals

You have a problem with capitalisation. Proper names, such as the Goa'uld, Asgard (notice the spelling), and Tok'ra are all capitalised. So too are acronyms such as SGC and SG1.

Hi Taure, thanks for the review... It's been a while since I wrote the story, and I had problems with capitalisations, since in danish, my main language proper names are written without capitalization, and in german, my first language, all nouns are written with capitalization... accordingly, it was one of the areas in which I was insecure in regard to the english language... I might some day return to the story and fix it, a long with giving the story a propoer overhaul, I'm quite certain that there are any number of mistakes. But for now it'll remain as is, since I don't feel like/have the time for proofreading it.

I hope that you enjoyed the story despite the grammatical issues, and would love to hear what you thought of it... hopefully the mistakes didn't put you off the story entirely.

Regards, Tals

It is a very good story you have written and you managed to end it with no dangling threads which is a achivement on its own.

However it is a pity it has already won a CoA, if it hadn't I would have added it to my list of CoA potentials.

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Thank you for your review, Dragonelf. I'm happy you liked the story, and honoured that you'd consider it for the CoA, although I can't say I'm sorry it has already won... ;)

regards, Tals

This is a great fic, I just wish that it went on longer. (You picked a perfect time to end, since if you went on it would take an epic battle to end the fic after this point and that would not follow the main theme of finding a new home and team.) It is understandable not re-editing this fic; going through and editing the whole fic would be a challenge since it is so long. Lack of time is one thing I understand. Once again, this is a wonderful story. :D

Thanks Angelbaby; you're right, I decided to end the story where I did exactly because Dawn had found a home, and some sort of peace - that was always the thing that attracted me to this story; it wasn't about the action or pairings... It was about Dawn as a character and the journey she was on. I'm glad you liked the story, and that you have understanding for why an edit might be a thing of the future...

Thanks again for the review. Tals

I really like the story so far. I don't know if anyone told you this, but you have been using the word depth instead of debt. Twice in chapter 3 and once in this chapter. (Not to say that I am a genius at spelling or grammar, but I thought you would like to know.)

Hi Angelbaby, thanks for your review, I'm glad you enjoy the story. I wrote it a couple of years ago, and english is my third language, so I'm certain there'll be some mistakes. Thanks for pointing it out to me; especially mentioning the chapters so I have a chance of finding it. Someday when I got some more time on my hand I'll probably go through the whole story, and give a read through to try and eliminate any mistakes. I hope you'll enjoy the rest of the story as well.

regards Tals

Great story. Loved it, thanks.

Thanks for the review, Obsidian. Glad you enjoyed it.

Tals

Excellent stuff! Thanks

Thanks for your review, HiltonK.

Tals

Just wanted to say this is an absolutely amazing story, perfectly well written and had so much emotion in it as you read you could really feel what the characters were going through.

one of my definite faves, so i added some artwork in my "Favorite Stories" thread...

http://www.tthfanfic.org/story.php?no=11355&;chapter=65

Hope you like it...

M

Oh wow... Thanks for your lovely review... I'm really glad you liked the story, and I'm beyond happy that the emotions of the characters came through... And thanks for adding me to your favourite stories thread - I'll head over there now, and leave a review....

Thanks again.

Tals

What a wonderful story! Absolutely wonderful!

Thank you, Ecila.

Tals