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Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from nightshift
Review:
Well written. I'm very surprised that this is first draft. The ex-soldier part of your CV doesn't surprise me, the action stuff makes sense tactically and physically. I don't always care for the worlds in which your stories are set, but I know that no matter what I read of yours the characterization will be excellent. On more than one occasion you've sent me towards something I'd never read before--and I've enjoyed it immensely. One day I will reread some of the "oh I don't like that" pile again--just because I've liked your stories set in those worlds. Darn teachers, being all educate-y and stuff.
Review By [nightshift] • Date [14 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from draconis
Review:
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Thanks for this very nice, fun, retro story.

I thought the last 10 chapters or so were too compressed. Would have preferred exploring interactions of Gotham characters with the other Buffys in more detail, and Glory was wrapped-up a little too expeditiously.

I think the story would have stood-up well without the Glory angle. Flexing Buffy's mental and physical muscles against non-demon, hard-core bad-guys was a refreshing change. I thought the Bruce-Buffy dynamic was brilliantly handled.

Still...nicely done.

Were I Buffy, I'd press to be able to go back and forth between the two realities at will. Buffy!...Padrig!, Buffy!...Padrig!.

Kagome!...Inuyasha!...

(Sorry, couldn't resist the comparison: two realities, bad-boy-ish rogue love interest (with a relationship conflicting issue) in the more primitive one)

But, if she absolutely had to choose, I'd choose to stay in the Gotham reality with her new 'family'. She has a much more 'normal' life there, while still being able to use her Slayerness to fight evil...and apparently no pesky PTBs (or vastly diminished power over her) to make her life miserable. Plus, who else is going to take on sociopath Waller and win? Batman against insane Feds?...Not gonna happen!


EDIT RESPONDING TO AUTHOR'S COMMENT ON GASLIGHT V. GLORY
I realize that was your intent, and it worked very well. I was just pointing out that I think the story could have stood equally well all on its own as a displaced Buffy story...no Glory karmic linkage needed. Best wishes in your continued writing.
Comments from author:
The whole story was designed around the Glory angle. The Gaslight stuff was just a smokescreen to hide the real story.
Review By [draconis] • Date [9 Aug 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from Obsidian
Review:
Now this was a great story. Loved it! About time someone did a not modern Batman in a alt universe. Very nice. thank you!
Comments from author:
I'm kind of fond of this one too actually.
Review By [Obsidian] • Date [6 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from Grovtech
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I very much enjoyed this fun story. Sure you juggle some dates around, but all those things made this a fuller more steampunk like story. Even the open ending was great. :)
Grover
Review By [Grovtech] • Date [1 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from RedIAm
Review:
That was a lot of fun. Great job. I've included some more detailed thoughts below. Despite including some (hopefully) constructive criticism, I really did enjoy this fanfic. Thanks for writing it.

What I liked:

- You did an excellent job with the setting. I hadn't read Gotham by Gaslight before, and exploring the shared Batman/Buffy world was probably the funnest part of this story.
- You respected both the Batman and Buffy characters. It's unfortunately common to find crossovers where one fandom dominates/lessens the other, but you walked the fine line and gave us both.
- Great actions scenes.
- The Padrig romance was great fun, and just at the perfect level.

What I thought could use improvement:

- I think Buffy's voice was a little off. Words I'd use to describe Buffy, even in the beginning of this fic, would be: confident, cunning, veteran and cool professional. Buffy is all of those things in-part, but at the end of Season 5 she's also: a little broken, a teenager, isolated, stubborn and sometimes unsure about herself. I feel like some of her rough edges were polished off, which can work in moderation for the tone, but she also lost a bit of her character in the process.
- Most of the mini-arcs would have been stronger if they'd tied in closer to a main plot or theme. Many could have been edited out with no loss to the larger story. If those arcs had done more to move Buffy along a growth path, or culminated in a central tied-together plot, then things would have gotten really exciting.
- Some rough grammar in places. A repeated mistake was a missing comma when someone was being addressed. "Bring me the butter, Buffy." Not "Bring me the butter Buffy." It was one of those things that would break me out of the story every time I saw it.

Thanks again!
Comments from author:
Standard Grammar reply:

"I write a lot and I write very quickly.
I also write directly into the browser, so what you're reading is pretty much the first draft with minimum polish."
Review By [RedIAm] • Date [29 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from kirkpatrick
Review:
Excellent
Review By [kirkpatrick] • Date [26 Jul 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from Avantre
Review:
Silk and Leather was the Mars version? I thought that Buffy (much like the natives) went around naked except maybe for some jewelry, which would have made for amusing reactions from the others at her blase attitude to it.

Anyway, enjoyed the story quite a bit.
Review By [Avantre] • Date [24 Jul 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from ColleenStClaire
Review:
That was amazing! I stayed up late to read the whole thing over two nights... Easily one of my favorite pieces of fanfiction EVER.

I was pleasantly surprised to see it avoid the Buffy+Bruce pairing. I completely loved the the change to young Miss Greyson and her becoming Buffy's ward!

The characters in general were great. I could very much picture this Victorian era Bruce Wayne. I also really enjoyed what we saw of some of the other superheroes from this era, like Spartan. I haven't actually read the DC gaslight series, so I don't know how much was directly drawn from that, but the story you told with them, and the world it took place in, was incredible.
Review By [ColleenStClaire] • Date [23 Jul 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from Hecatonchires
Review:
That was a Fun read
Review By [Hecatonchires] • Date [23 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from Chan
Review:
Whoa interesting parts at the end there and to realize and remember that the stories/series you're pulling from you created took me a moment to remember that don't know why that was considering I liked each story with the characters mentioned.
Review By [Chan] • Date [23 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from AceDreamer
Review:
Nicely done story.

This stands well as a story in its own right, as well as a vehicle to allow the Eternal Slayer avatars to all appear together. Shrike Buffy is an excellent addition to the pantheon of Buffys, and works well with Steampunk Batman. Your handling of the science and tech in this is excellent.

I guess the only other thing to say is... What are you going to do next? [grin]
Review By [AceDreamer] • Date [22 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from (Current Donor)WildMartin
Review:
Yet another amazing fic. I liked how you tied in your other Buffys at the end there. Any chance of new Enigma stories in the pipeline?
Review By [(Current Donor)WildMartin] • Date [22 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from SlowMercury
Review:
Thanks for writing this fantastic story -- I loved everything about it, and it was fun to see all the Buffys at the end. Buffy really is a great character in almost any setting (as you've proved once again with this one).
Review By [SlowMercury] • Date [22 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from HappyWonKinobi
Review:
Honestly? I love it! Thank you for such a wonderful ride that I have enjoyed from chapter 1! And I also loved the way you did the ending too! :D

I can't wait to see how you top yourself now! I know you can do it because you are just that awesome! See you in the next story! :)
Review By [HappyWonKinobi] • Date [22 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ninety Six" from SapphireSparks
Review:
I'm very lazy about reviewing, but I have read and enjoyed a number of your stories. I have to say though, this is by far my favorite of your fics. There were a few chapters that I thought were typo heavy, but I can't recall exactly which ones. (IIRC, it was somewhere around the late fifties to mid sixties.)

You developed the setting in this story so well that it helped the character development feel organic. Buffy in the role of a more traditional superhero made sense, and it felt like a natural development of the character. My one real complaint about the characterization is that Kate felt a little flat. It felt to me like there needed to be another couple of scenes with Kate and Buffy talking in more depth about her motives. Buffy's attitude of "eh, she's doing it; so, I might as well keep her from getting killed" worked, but it felt like it took away from giving Kate more of her own personality.

Okay, now to do my annoying supergeek thing; This story desperately needs a sequel! :)

One thing I would mention, is that it has become a sort of "station of the canon" that what changes the dynamic of the DC heroes, from being just a loose coalition of people who know each other, into a team is the origin of Green Lantern. Which IRL, is supposed to be the start of the Silver Age, but it being treated in universe as a real turning point is a nice touch. The DC Animated Movie: The New Frontier, did a wonderful job showing that off.

DC has done a LOT with The War of The Worlds over the years. Some of it very good, and great deal of it much less so. It wouldn't be a bad place to go with a sequel. That would be a fairly logical plot to develop for a story with a Gilded Age setting. The key thing to remember with that though is that just having supers vs mechs can get old quickly. The juicy stuff in the DC version of Mars is the White Martians; telepathic shape shifting sociopaths who can replace anyone. They can make for a wonderful paranoia thriller setting.

Another thought is how DC has traditionally dealt with war since the silver age. Superhero ethics, the Banana Wars, and the Spanish American War, might make an interesting direction to take a story.
Review By [SapphireSparks] • Date [22 Jul 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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