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Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Wise
Review:
I like the story. It's a neat idea, and it sounds like fun. So does your other Halloween related story, for that matter. But it suffers from some of the same problems as the other one of yours that I reviewed. You keep cutting your scenes short, like they are all ending at about the halfway mark. You should let them play out. Let them stretch their legs.

Don't get me wrong - if a scene is just sort of flopping about, by all means, put the poor thing out of its misery, but if it's working, let it work. Don't be afraid to let your characters have conversations.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review.

At this point in the story where I'm setting things up the scenes do have a tendency to flap a bit and become unwieldy which is why I've kept them short for the moment. As i progress the scenes will increase in length. I'm also trying to keep to a time frame. I am so looking forward to after the Ethan's spell has ended when i can get into the story proper.

Thank you for your thoughts...please keep them coming. :)
Review By [Wise] • Date [8 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from raxadian
Review:
Well, so basically the Buffyverse becomes a fusion of the Buffyverse with the DC universe?
Comments from author:
Only a little
Review By [raxadian] • Date [14 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from raxadian
Review:
Well, Xander being the bat, I wonder why they aren't more fics about that?
Review By [raxadian] • Date [14 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from raxadian
Review:
You should have made Willow be Catwoman...
Review By [raxadian] • Date [14 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from JediKnight
Review:
Very nice work on the new chapter, hope you'll add more soon.

-Which Kara are you using(Powergirl or Supergirl)?
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review.

It's Power Girl, She has skills that will be useful down the line, once the i can get past the set up phase of the fiction.

I'll be adding again to this one once i have updated a couple of other fics. and of course when RL allows.

Thanks again for the review
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [7 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Bobboky
Review:
Nice
Comments from author:
Thank you
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [6 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
I will admit, I had thought of the brown haired man as a blank-faced man, but not Question.

The Phantom Stranger is one of the more enigmatic (and annoyingly so) characters of the DC universe.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review

The brown haired man is an original character. Not from DC universe. That comes from my RPG Campaign.

His main function is to annoy the living daylights out of the player characters while dropping completely useless info, well useless until after the fact.

Edit1: You can see more of him at the beginning of 'A journey through the Realms' and 'The trouble with families'.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [6 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from djhardim
Review:
Question from chapter 1 -

A brown haired man grinned as he watched the discussion between Janus, Zeus and Athena.

Would the man be Q?
Comments from author:
The brown haired being is one of mine. He isn't Q.

Many years ago before Buffy was a twinkle in Joss's eye i found i needed a 'Power' for my rpg campaign and i made this character up on the fly during a gaming session and he's been around ever since. basically he exists to be a pain in the rear to overly powerful characters that think they can stomp npc's with impunity. It ended up that the player characters of that campaign hated him with a passion but my players loved him. so he end as part of my rpg universe.

Edit1: You can see him in slightly more detail in the beginning of 'The troubles with families'
Review By [djhardim] • Date [3 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Kaosreign
Review:
Well I just found your story, though there isn't enough yet to say I would follow it I am intrigued.

That being said some thoughts I had when I read it and some of the reviews.

First, you didn't get it wrong when you got Athena involved if there is one thing you forgot is to add the other female Goddesses of Olympus, if you go to the DC wiki you will find that it was Athena, Artemis, Demeter, Aphrodite & Hestia who are their main patrons (or is it matrons?).

Second, how much the possession affects them is up to you, but if you show Buffy going full lesbian that means you went to far and must do the same with Xander. However if you go say give her a different mindset without altering her to much than I say you hit a balance, hopefully while you have Xander accept certain aspects of Bruce you don't make him sacrifice parts of him self to accommodate them.

I'm guessing Kate watched the show in her reality and therefore knows what is going on given her comment?

You showed Wonder Woman here but you haven't specified which version it is, I could take it that you are using the New 52 version or perhaps a version that had yet to leave the island. In either case I take it she looks 24 not is because either way she is part of an immortal race of warrior women.

You have balance the Amazon presence, while most don't have Diana's gifts they are a bit higher than a Slayer from what I have studied for my works. And if you don't include something like say a Martian or Kryptonian you have nothing to balance out Diana who would be the most powerful being on the planet.

Power Girl's introduction is actually fairly easy, given that she is a interdimensional refugee, you could have it that her ship was on its way to Earth but got caught in a dimensional rift that shunted her to Buffy verse. That way you have someone to balance out Diana.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review.

I do not plan for Buffy to go full lesbian, but as always i will let the characters tell me what they want.

Wonder Woman is 24 years old in Odyssey.

The Amazons are pretty easy to balance, they rarely leave their Island. They also bring their own balance in the shape over their own version of a hellmouth. But that is something i will explore in a sequel if this story takes off.

As for Power Girl i really like the idea of flattening Snyder's car with her arrival.

Thanks again for the review
Review By [Kaosreign] • Date [3 May 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Dhampyr
Review:
Why do I get the feeling Diana is going to want to mentor Buffy and Xander once this is all said and done?

Edit 1: Ah, so it will be a post "New 52" Diana. Pity that. I was hoping with the surprise at the return of Themyscira that it was a pre-retcon version of the Amazon nation that would leave Diana as a "would-be if they weren't so stubborn" love interest of Bruce's and thus she would be eager to help Xander and Buffy continue his legacy.

I like the suggestion with Powergirl, although part of me would almost want to see the Kara/Supergirl we see in Batman/Superman Apocalypse (which in itself was an adaptation of a comic origin story for Kara) just for the sake of her age being much closer to Xander's and Buffy's. Well that and the reaction the first time she would refer to Xander as "Grump Ass."
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review

Diana is unlikely to want to mentor anyone because she is still figuring things out for herself. The Diana i'm using for this story is only 24 if memory serves. We'll just have to wait and see.

Edit: I don't know anything of the 'New 52', as i'm not a comic reader anymore and haven't been for nearly twenty years. But for some reason i bought the cardback version of Wonder Woman: Odyssey by J. Michael Straczynski which gave me a new version of WW.

The reason i want Power Girl is that has skills that would prove useful for the main characters. And allow me to move the story along in later chapters if the thoughts i have play out in the writing.
Review By [Dhampyr] • Date [3 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from djhardim
Review:
You might find this article on the Batsuit useful.

http://batman.wikia.com/wiki/Batsuit_(Nolan_Films)

Of particular interest is the discussion of the suit drawbacks from the first film.

Costume design for the would be superhero is always going to involve compromises.

Edit: You're welcome. In case you're still having problems getting the page to load here's a few things

Drawbacks

Although supposedly designed for maximum flexibility and movement, the Nomex armor does restrict Batman's movement somewhat, slowing him down in combat. The design of the mask and cape also restricted his neck movement, making it impossible for him to turn his head, and forcing him to rely on peripheral vision. For these reasons, Bruce asked Lucius to design a new suit with faster, freer movement in mind.

Edit1: 1. Power Girl could be a refugee from another dimension. 2. If you want to bring in Atlantis and Aquaman (post Crisis), she is the granddaughter of Atlantean Sorceror Arion.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Power_Girl

Edit2: How about Snyder's car?
Comments from author:
Thanks

I'm finding batman wiki a life saver for this fic.

I'm also using this page for reference: http://www.angelfire.com/planet/dc_media/batman.html
and this: http://www.angelfire.com/mi2/dcuniverse/batman.html

When i first looked into the batsuit i couldn't get the page to load. (i think my browser was having a hissy fit)
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I'm gonna end up mixing DCAU JLU with nolan universe stuff. Basically taking a mix of everything.

Wonder woman i'm taking straight from issues 601~613

at the moment i'm creating the layout for ch3 - i will be so glad to get the halloween bit done and dusted and get into the story proper.

Thank you for the help

Edit: Thanks. Got the page to load.
yep going to have to address that in story.
There is one problem i'm having and i can't think of a way to do it that fits in with the basic premise and thats how to bring in Power Girl. Any ideas?

Edit the 2nd: Thanks. Gonna have to go with dropping a kryptonian spaceship on Sunnydale much like the Queller Demon. - wonder of i could hit city hall with it ....

Edit the 3rd: LOL. oh i am so tempted to use that idea...if he's in it at the time, i could make/bring in an OC to fill the space left by a flattened Snyder. ok now i'm starting to have very silly thoughts.


Thanks again
Review By [djhardim] • Date [3 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from djhardim
Review:
I look for their possessions to serve as their Jiminy/Jane Crickets.

You might find "Knight of Faith" by Idhren interesting.

http://www.tthfanfic.org/Story-22970/Idhren+Knight+of+Faith.htm

One thing they can do is to turn Willow into Oracle. From the standpoint of her computer abilities, she probably isn't that far away.
She'll need work from the physical standpoint.

From the standpoint of financing, you might try a wealthy patron such as David Nabbit, or have Willow steal a bad guy's money.

Xander and Buffy's "batgear" isn't going to last forever. It will require maintenance and (later) replacement. Some of the materials used in their construction are either expensive or not available in this universe.

Edit: Forgot one thing - the life of a Bat is physically demanding. At the very least, it would be nice if you could justify a enhanced healing factor for Xander (close to slayer level if you could swing it). Additional trait(s) if possible - enhanced stamina and reflexes.
Comments from author:
Thanks :)

Jiminy/Jane Crickets: not sure about this. It's one of the questions that hasn't gone away while I'm writing the set up ch1~4

I'll check out Knight of Faith this evening. Thanks for suggesting it

I did think about Willow becoming an Oracle like character and it would be a natural progression for her character in light of the DC influence. Yet i find myself resistant to that path. I have my reasons which will become clear in either ch3 or 4.

Yea i kinda like the idea of Willow stealing from the bad guys. thanks for suggesting it.


Feed back is always useful :)

Edit:
Have you been reading my notes for this story hmmm? :)

I have been thinking exactly that, he really does need a boost. Installed the reason already in Ch1 :)

Thanks again
Review By [djhardim] • Date [3 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from falsegod
Review:
great work so far but maybe you could develop each part into the rest of the story just a bit better so that it feels less like your jumping around
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review.

The jumping around will slow down once i've introduced the various aspects into the story. It's bugging me too. Just one or two chapters of it left then i can get into writing the main body of the story.

Thanks again.
Review By [falsegod] • Date [3 May 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from JediKnight
Review:
Very interesting work, hope to read more soon.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review

There will me more in the next few days.

Thanks
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [3 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Drake
Review:
Interesting start. The only thing that bugged me was Athena. In mythology it's always Artemis that's associated with Amazons, not Athena. Is there a reason you switched that up or just a typo?
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review.

I have to put my hands up and say it was a mistake on my part. Thank you for pointing it out. I will fix it at a later date.

Thanks for pointing it out.
Review By [Drake] • Date [2 May 14] • Not Rated
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