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Ship of the Line: Pioneer's Dawn

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Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from MistofRainbows
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I think the only vampire that isn't overly flammable is Spike. We know for a fact that he didn't burst into flames when he grabbed the flaming fists of the warrior during his test for his soul... most every other vampire is like liter fluid so I think you're okay on the vampires bursting into flames.

I'm looking forward to seeing where the characters go with this, I'm hoping they don't just turn stuff over to the gov like I've seen in some of these stories... but hey we'll see how things go. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [21 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from raxadian
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Yeah, vamps burns easily.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [21 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Wormbait
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Very nice start to what looks to be an interesting, well written story.

Be interesting to see who turns out to be who and what little (or big) surprise Janus left on the ship.

Sad to see Willow get shafted with the 'not good for much but screaming in terror' character once again, poor girl never gets anything good from Halloween fics :(

Well done and thanks for sharing, I look forward to seeing where you go with the story.
Review By [Wormbait] • Date [21 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Bobboky
Review:
very good work
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [20 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from AlphaBeta
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YAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!! Update! Loved the update! The only real problem I have is they way you made it sound like cyclones could easy take down a Royal Command Battloid. They are not that fragile. It took 4 of them to take down Corg. And he took multi hits form missiles and he was fine. It wasn't until they took out his gun arm that things turned around for them. And even then, they had to collapse the a lot of stuff on top of him to stop him, and even blow up the place, and he still lived. So, other then that, great job. Also, please update more quickly if at all possible.
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [20 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Raziel
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good beginning looking forward to seeing exactly where you go with this.
Review By [Raziel] • Date [20 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from proofreader
Review:
I'm rather hoping there's a character who dressed as Miriya Sterling somewhere around. If you have Jenny Calendar dressed as her (on her day off duty and/or watching the kids, and therefore without her communicator at the time) with Giles as Max as I heard somewhere he used to want to be a pilot (I don't know if that's canon or not) it could make for a smoother relationship between them. The need for glasses by both characters is a possible hint in that direction. If you go with the kids option, there's an instant Dawn option with in built special abilities from the Halloween incident (Dana Sterling or her sister Maia) AND the abilities granted by being the key. Plus there's the scene you can write where she shows up and says to Giles, "Hello, we're married and here's your daughter". I don't think ANY amount of glasses rubbing would help him. He'd probably pass out.
Review By [proofreader] • Date [20 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Dragan
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I love how this is going, can't wait for them to get to Pioneer and find out who the extended who is :)
Review By [Dragan] • Date [20 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from FinalGuardian
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I'm looking forward to seeing who's who when the spell/event ends.
Review By [FinalGuardian] • Date [22 Jun 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Delkatar
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Very good start of this story! I'll like to read more of it! :D
Review By [Delkatar] • Date [18 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Morgomir
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Great start. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [17 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Bobboky
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Cool
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [9 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from draconis
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Excellent start and build-up. Looking forward to more.

I am however, kind of thinking "Rick" would've expressed a tad more concern/effort than so far exhibited in determining the status of his wife...even given the professional the character should be. (Hmm. Female with 'honey-blond' hair...Tara analogue? Don't answer!)
Review By [draconis] • Date [9 Jun 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from AlphaBeta
Review:
Good to see another chapter to this story out. Really enjoyed it! Please have the next chapter out soon!
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [8 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Bill
Review:
Nice! It's gonna get crowded in orbit soon.
Review By [Bill] • Date [8 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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