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Review of chapter "Chapter 09" from Alkeni
Review:
A very good fic. I don't watch Criminal Minds, and I usually don't read fics that cross with fandoms I don't know, but this one is enjoyable enough to make the exception. I look forward to reading more whenever you post it.
Review By [Alkeni] • Date [22 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 08" from Rich
Review:
Last chapter I thought that maybe the BAU could have investigated Sunnydale, and in this chapter it looks like you already thought of that. I also like the BAU's explanation for Lilith - completely wrong, but from their POV it actually makes sense. Nicely done.
Review By [Rich] • Date [21 Nov 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 07" from Rich
Review:
In general, I like what you're doing here. You've set yourself a difficult task, with the various groups of good guys not trusting each other, and Lilith and Gideon raising the stakes every time they turn around.

The mini-reveal Buffy and Willow did in this chapters feels a little forced to me, but I don't see a better way to handle it - maybe if the BAU had discovered some of the background data on Sunnydale on their own it would work a little better, but I'm not sure how you could make that happen.

Characterization is pretty good; the major players are all behaving in character, given that the BAU are apparently all under a spell.

So, overall, an interesting situation, and a pretty good job.
Review By [Rich] • Date [21 Nov 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 02" from Alkeni
Review:
Wesley gets to run an Academy? Go him. ^^ Always figured later season Wesley would have a lot of good ideas on how to fix the way Watchers were taught, if nothing else :p
Review By [Alkeni] • Date [21 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 09" from Grovtech
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So we have an oncoming disaster as Buffy's fear about the team being kept in the dark is coming true giving the bad guys yet another hostage. I'm afraid the kid's choice of Halloween costume is going to be a problem too.
Good stuff
Review By [Grovtech] • Date [21 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 08" from Antz
Review:
I'm really enjoying this story. I think that it is fabulous that you have drawn out the reveal of buffy being the slayer and shown what her actions would look like to outsiders, I find that to many crossovers just have Buffy reveal that she is the slayer strait away and it takes a lot of the conflict out of the story as well as a lot of the fun.
Comments from author:
Antz,
Thank you for your comment. I am so glad that everyone has been understanding about why I am drawing things out. Having everything happen at once doesn't make a very good story, as far as I am concerned. I think that, were these two universes cross, Buffy and her slayers would try very hard to take care of things without having to reveal the truth to Hotch and his team. She understands what its like to see a friend transformed into a monster by some demented vampire, and would likely want protect the BAU from learning that Gideon had been turned. Like with her mother and her friends, whom she only told the truth after they'd already seen her world, she'd only tell others if she had no other choice. And as she sees JJ as part of her extended family in my story, she would do what she had to in order to protect her. Also, she admires the human Gideon because in many ways, he was a normal version of herself and wants to prevent those who called him family from having their image of him destroyed by the demon controlling his form.
Just to let you know, I plan to post one more chapter of this by this Sunday. I begin the draft of the final project for my current class next week, and will have to focus on that. So after the next chapter, I won't be able to update again until the Christmas break in December at the earliest. Hope you and everyone else can wait that long. :):):):):):)
Review By [Antz] • Date [13 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 08" from fanreaderonetwo
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I note the Slayers vainly finding a way to _destroy_ Lilith and Gideon, and a thought occurs to me.
Obviously it would be better to _permanently_ destroy them, but other solutions are available albeit less satisfactory ones.

Capture them "alive"; and then keeping them prisoner until ways to destroy them, and failing that keep them harmlessly out of circulation for a long, long time.
Image of Lilith _heavily_ chained (using corrosion proof steel) and placed in a large box made of heavy gauge stainless steel which then filled with high strength cement and the lid then welded on. The box is either dropped into a very deep part of the ocean (ala what happened to Angel) or placed (or assembled and filled) in a deep abandoned mine shaft and the shaft back filled or blast shut. Ideally with the ocean burial, they would carefully avoid recording or even _knowing_ where the location she was dumped, this would make it far harder for vamps or others to retrieve the coffin from the ocean floor.
Either way, to escape Lilith would _first_ have to get out of the chains, the cement and the box, then out of the ocean or the filled in mine. I suspect that she would be out of the world's hair for at least a few thousand years.

Its obvious that just staking vamps of Lilith's powers (strength, speed and mind control) would be hard enough, but taking her alive would be far harder.
Comments from author:
While your idea would work on Gideon, locking Lilith in a box wouldn't work. She is incredibly strong in magic. She also has knowledge of magics that witches and sorcerers in our age don't remember exist, including portal magic. So sadly, locking her in a box and dropping her in the Mariana Trench wouldn't work.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [27 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 08" from cmdruhura
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The spell for the Gem might make one immune to the Sun's rays but what about the nuclear furnace that is the Sun? Would it protect them if they got up close and personal with the actual Sun? And even if it did, how would they escape the Sun's gravity to get back to Earth. Of course there is the problem of getting Gideon and Lilith there in the firs tplace but that's what portals are for.
Comments from author:
But just throwing them in the sun would be too easy. I wouldn't have a story then. And if you read my description of Lilith in demon form, she does have wings. It might take her a long time, but if she escaped the sun, she could fly back to Earth. It might take her a couple million years, but she is immortal, so she could do it. However, you make a good point.
Review By [cmdruhura] • Date [26 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 08" from link
Review:
The story becoming more interesting and I love it very much. I love your unique take on Gem of Amara. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your wonderful comment. I wanted to explain Gideon's abilities without simply saying Lilith wanted him to have the powers he possesses. I wanted there to be a reason.
Review By [link] • Date [26 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 08" from burmafrdnow
Review:
kind of dumb cover story for Buffy and company. Anyone that spends time with her will realize that the Military has absolutely NOTHING to do with her training or the Council. So it will fall apart.

But that is the government; never really think things through
Comments from author:
Exactly right, which is why Hotch and his team are as suspicious of this claim as they are. Buffy is warrior and predator material, not soldier material. Which is why she's so good at what she does. The Military's protocol of planning and discussing every little scenario that comes up would never really work in Buffy's world.
And you're absolutely right. The government is definitely not thinking of the consequences.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [26 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 08" from ScorpioP
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I like the "explanation" for Gideon's abilities, and tying it to an item of canon is especially well-done. I would have gladly accepted a bit of hand-waving about Lilith being able to choose who receives her special powers, and this is much better.

So, the intelligence/law enforcement community has concocted an official cover story for vampires? ::snicker:: That could never go wrong, could it?

As a digression, I am curious to Lilith's relationship with the Turok-han. Are they also her children, perhaps sired from some minor demon? And in terms of relative power, where does she compare with the First?

Personally, I suspect there will be one or more incidents involving vamps, magic, or both that the BAU witness and seek a "rational" explanation before Giles gets to stand up and say "The world is older than you know..." I for one can't WAIT for Reid's response.
Comments from author:
I am glad you buy my way of Lilith passing her special abilities on to Gideon. I puzzled over how to do that for several months before coming up with that.
Of course the government's concocted story about vampires could never go wrong.:;););) Not!!!
I am still working on Lilith's relationship to the Turok-han. I need to rewatch Buffy Season 7, but my old DVD set is too damaged to play and I can't at this time, find a new or used set that I wouldn't have to wait to get. I tried watching the season online, but my video player keeps crapping out. So it might take a while to complete the scenario. Lilith's power is different from the First. The First existed since the beginning of time, when good and evil originally divided. Lilith in my story was created when a human woman made a bargain with the last demon present in this dimension, following the great wars that ended with humanity being given control of this realm. The reason Lilith can't have her soul restored is because her soul joined with this demon's spirit form as part of that bargain. So technically, her soul never left her body. It was transformed. However, Lilith is not quite as powerful as the first, simply because, part of that new essence was stolen from her in order to shape the first slayer. In Joss's universe, if I remember correctly, Buffy learned in season 7 that the slayer's power came from the same source as that of the first vampire. And I plan to explore that a bit in a later chapter.
There will be a few encounters with vampires before the big reveal. However, I think I will have Buffy give the big speech instead of Giles.
Review By [ScorpioP] • Date [26 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 07" from (Recent Donor)amenti
Review:
This is amazing, I love these two crossovers. Not enough of these crossovers that are still active. Am still trying to find a finish story of a Hotch/Buffy relationship. Well done, can't wait for the next chapter. Am gasping for updates all the time haha
Comments from author:
I am having a lot of fun with this crossover, though I am finding it difficult creating the team's reactions to some of what is happening already and with what I am working on for the story's climax. Reid is especially hard because of his vast intellect. Garcia is by far the easiest, as she's got a more open personality. Everyone else is kind of in the middle.
I honestly can't say I think a pairing between Buffy and Hotch would be something I can support. I can see Hotch with someone, but Buffy in my opinion belongs with Angel. Just my take. Anyways, thanks for reading.
Review By [(Recent Donor)amenti] • Date [12 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 07" from writerdragonfly
Review:
This is beyond amazing.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [writerdragonfly] • Date [9 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 07" from dreameralways
Review:
Yay! Chapter! Still loving this story. It is amazing. You make the crossover seem very plausible. I love it! I can't wait for more.
Comments from author:
Dreameralways,
Glad you think my blending of these two worlds is plausible. And I am really glad you love it. Unfortunately though, you have to wait for more. :):):):) I have to finish my Geography class before I can post another chapter.
Review By [dreameralways] • Date [2 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 07" from ScorpioP
Review:
Very well done. I was pleased to see this, and look forward to the next chapter. I can't wait for the the big reveal to BAU!

As for the supernatural being treated as a secret by the government, I think of the nightlife (vamps, sorcerers, demons, etc.) as being somewhat analogous to terrorists, arms dealers, and the like. Even if the general public occasionally hears rumors about specific groups or incidents -- which probably get warped into horror movies -- most of the conflict is waged in secret, probably by top-secret "operators" equivalent to Navy Seals or Mossad. (My own head-canon says the Vatican probably has its own team of operators as well.) The Slayer just happens to be the champion we know best, and the Council had its own reasons for working in secret.
Comments from author:
ScorpioP,
I have been working on the big reveal. I am having a bit of trouble getting the next chapter started, so I thought I'd motivate myself by working on the climax of my story in between writing for school. I do have two more chapters already written, but I won't be posting either until after I complete my final paper and turn it in next weekend. After that, I shouldn't have as much trouble getting what I have written up, though I probably will break it up some.
Anyway, I think you're right about how the government in the BtVS verse would look at demons and dark magic wielders. They probably would refer to such groups as terrorists or international criminals. And the Vatican probably would have their own teams as well. But my guess would be that Buffy and the New Council are probably the best of the best, and would likely be asked by national governments in much of Europe, South America, and probably Africa, to take down hostile threats to the world.
Review By [ScorpioP] • Date [27 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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