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Review of chapter "Chapter 03" from dreameralways
Review:
Still awesome. Love it. Need more.
Comments from author:
Next week, dreameralways. I have to finish the draft of my research paper before I can get the next chapter up. But I will definitely get the next chapter up after the 28th, so stay tuned.
Review By [dreameralways] • Date [22 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 03" from Cristina
Review:
I like it. So I'm guessing that Buffy will get interviewed by Hoctch and Rossi soon. They can't arrest her per say, since there is no prof that she was anywhere near that house.
Now that will be interesting/entertaining. I wonder how Buffy will react, I suppose depends of her mood. She could play mouse/cat game with the BAU, with her being a fox (yep not a mouse or a cat). That could serve to keep BAU team safely tucked away. After all Buffy is not the only Slayer. Or to just buy some time for others to investigate when BAU team is looking the other way. Or they could put her on polygraph.

"Did you kill...?"
"No."
"She told the truth Hotch."
"Then her psychosis is great."

Its like those two are obsessed with the idea that Buffy is their killer full stop. That's kinda weird.

-err, isn't that contradiction, that Buffy was a suspect to those murders OK if deaths would be stabbing trough the hart I could see it, but they weren't. And wasn't her "psychos" That she saves ppl from vampires, so her MO would hardly be at the same manner that vampire kills.
-but that could be "compulsion spell" from WH at work...hmm? Heh, that means that Gideon wasn't so succumb to that spell. Nice!

So I am waiting at the end of my seat for the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Cristina,
You're following my idea really well. And you're very right about Buffy's mood in regards to an interrogation. I'm throwing a twist in with that in the next chapter.
You've also given me an idea for something in a later chapter. Thanks.
I cannot post the next chapter until next week at the earliest. The rdraft for my research paper is due this week, so I have to concentrate on it. So stay tuned for more then.
Review By [Cristina] • Date [21 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 03" from orgasmo
Review:
Rather enjoying this, but a few complaints/nit-picks.

First, and least important, Oz and Willow would definitely have had higher SAT scores than Buffy. 1430 is definitely good (like 90-95th percentile good), but it's not exactly a top-of-the-school sort of score, just a top 15-25 sort of score (depending on school size and average intelligence). Not even close to being a match for Willow, Oz, Jonathan, or other "smart" students, much less Reid (who is a genius beyond mortal ken, to be quite honest). It was just something in the show to validate Buffy as an actual intelligent person rather than the dumb blonde act she used so well as a method for being underestimated.

Secondly, I don't really understand why Buffy is so hung-ho about her being willing to reveal the Truth of the world. I mean, yes, in a case of immediate life or death, she'll undoubtedly reveal what she feels is necessary, but the conversations she keeps having about it make it seem like she's more doing it out of petty bucking of regulations rather than a legitimate reason. I mean, the whole "call the general, claim diplomatic immunity, get out of jail free" plan seems like it'll be ideal in 99.99% of situations (especially given Buffy and the Watchers and everyone ever involved in the supernatural's desire to keep the truth as hidden as possible), and yet she seems to keep dropping hints that she'll tell the truth at the drop of a hat. Undoubtedly, the BAU team's going to be brought in (if only for plot-forwarding purposes), but that doesn't necessitate consistent hinting that it'll happen.

Finally, i have a real issue with how thoroughly you're playing up the "no one but Gideon and other Slayers (with the possible biased exception of Dawn) ever truly understood me" angle. I know you want to make there have been a connection/understanding between Buffy and Gideon, but that doesn't require you to disavow the powerful friendships and bonds forged in the "Scooby" group. Not that there wasn't conflict or tension between them (understandable as they grew as people under incredible stress and strife), but they had a very solid bond and great understanding of how viscous and ruthless they sometimes needed to be in order to fight against the darkness (not to mention a direct view into the Slayer mindset via the Conjoining and Empowering spells).

Beyond these complaints though, this is a good story so far with fantastic potential for growth/action and I do hope you update soon.
Comments from author:
Wow. Those are some pretty serious nitpicks. Let me address a few of them.
1) I remember the episode when the Scoobies took their SAT's. In it, the episode starts out with each of the scoobies talking about how they did. Willow complains to Xander and I believe OZ and Cordy that she didn't due very well on her SAT's. I believe she offers the explanation that she must have been nervous, because there is no way she really did that poorly. Then, Buffy walks up, looking depressed. However, we learn it is just shock because she actually did quite well, stunning each of her friends with her high score. Just reminding you of the Ep. I am not mad about your comment.
2) The second nitpick. Buffy doesn't want to tell the world in my story. She doesn't even want to tell the BAU team. She just doesn't think that a group of Politicians should have a say in whether the BAU has the right to know is some psycho vampire has decided they would make a good late night snack. Again, not mad about your comment. You have the right to your opinion. However, the argument about bringing the BAU in is important to my story.
3) Lastly, I see Buffy as a predator, who might at times feel the need to savagely play with her prey when she's trying to get info from them. I don't believe Giles or the scoobies would approve of her predatory instincts, which are only natural for a slayer. Buffy likely behaves very differently when she's hunting alone, versus when she is hunting with Willow or Xander. I agree that the bonds each Scooby has with Buffy are strong. However, we must remember that Joss made it in season seven that Buffy's power comes from the same source as the vampires she hunts, and it would be likely that sometimes, she would feel compelled to act more violently that we ever saw on the show. And remember that despite the spells that let them experience what being a slayer is, none of the Scoobies are slayers, so none of them can completely understand the sacrifices or instincts Buffy would have from being one. Just my take.
Any way, I am glad you like my story, despite the complaints. I will try to update after I get the draft of my essay for class completed. But that will be at least another week and a half.
Review By [orgasmo] • Date [18 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 03" from link
Review:
I'm sad after learning the identity of the agent-turned-vampire. But it does make the story more exciting. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Don't be too sad. There are gonna be more twists and turns in the future episodes. I could never make Gideon a vamp without them. :):):):):):):):)
Review By [link] • Date [17 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 03" from Misty
Review:
OMG! That was beautifully written & horrific! Thank you x
Comments from author:
Wow. Thank you. I am so glad people like this. I was afraid my twists in the story would make the diehard BtVS fans would not like vamps that can walk around in daylight. So glad that isn't the case.
Review By [Misty] • Date [17 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 03" from Featherfoot
Review:
Another amazing chapter! Hopefully some security cameras caught something.
Review By [Featherfoot] • Date [17 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 03" from (Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
I've never seen an episode of Criminal Minds, but this is very good. Tracking this now.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Glad you like it enough to follow it. And CM is a great show. I especially like that most of the original cast is still there, and those they've added to replace departing characters really seem to fit in well. You should check it out. Reruns air on A&E weekdays from 9 to 11 and 1 to 3, and newer episodes are airing at 10 PM on Wednesday over the summer, just after "Extant" Don't know if that will be the time slot in the fall, as it usually airs at 9. Anyway, you should at least check it out. All the cast is wonderful, as well as perfect eye candy. Yum. :):):):)
Review By [(Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [17 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
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"If the vamps are _really_ smart and sneaky, they would find and turn Gideon.
Think about _him_ planning nasty mind games for Buffy and the BAU."

*****

I guess you had the same thought, but before I did.

Nasty thought, noting the mention that BAU personnel would _all_ be prime candidates for siring. Imagine if rather than Gideon's playing the mind games killing ex-BAU members he had arranged for a blitz campaign to snatch and turn _all_ (or nearly all) of the current and past BAUites (and others that Gideon might pick) before anyone realized the danger. Then the new recruits suggest other elite candidates for turning, turn and repeat.
Suddenly the average IQ among vamps jumps 20-50 points.....

All of those smart to brilliant, sneaky people with psych, LEO and (in others cases military) training operating together as proto master vamps.
Be afraid world, be _very_ afraid.
Comments from author:
While I like your idea, it doesn't fit with what I wanted to do with this. Gideon is both using the other former agents as chess pieces for his game, and because each of the agents left before he did. His demon is punishing them for something he hated in himself, the same way Angelus went after his father, wanting to hurt him for the way he was made to feel. I believe that although in the show, Gideon has never contacted his old friends, he's been following their activity to make sure they're okay. And I would guess he has more than once wondered if his decision to leave was the right one.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [16 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 03" from (Current Donor)wizathogwarts
Review:
Great update. Story pacing is perfect and I really liked how everything in this chapter lead to a climatic conclusion i.e. cliffhanger.
Normally I hate cliffhangers but this worked really well. I'm going to pretend this is a weekly show and I'll find out what happens in a week. :-)
Comments from author:
Thank you so much. That comment really made me feel better after I bombed on my test today. I plan to try and update again in about 1 1/2 to 2 weeks. And the cliffhangers will continue in that chapter as well.
Review By [(Current Donor)wizathogwarts] • Date [16 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 02" from dreameralways
Review:
I really hope that you are continuing this. It is great. I really hope that it's not Gideon but it seems so much like it is. I think I'll cry if it's Gideon, but the confrontations scenes will be epic.
Comments from author:
I do plan on continuing this story. I actually already have the first seven chapters already written. I am just taking my time reviewing and proofreading each chapter before I post them so that I can make each chapter make sense. So far I have tried to stick more to the Joss Whedon version of the Buffy universe, but in the next chapter, I am gonna add my own twist to the story, so I can reach the ending I want to reach. I am a little worried about how you guys will take the twists, but I am committed to keep writing, even if you don't like them. So stay tuned for more.
I agree that any confrontations scenes with a turned Gideon would be intense. I would guess that Gideon would probably use his intellect, more than physical attacks in any confrontation, just like he did on the show. He, like Rossi, had a bit of an ego, even though Gideon seemed more oblivious to it than Rossi does. I would think a turned Gideon would probably have a godlike complex, just as Angelus and the Master seemed to flaunt about.
Review By [dreameralways] • Date [9 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 02" from TheUndone
Review:
So, I'm going out on a limb here and saying that Elle was the impatient vampire that was going up the ladder. Then she brought in Gideon turned him and he's planning to take out the BAU. I'm really looking forward to the rest of this story to find out if I'm right!
Comments from author:
TheUndone,
I'm not telling, so you'll have to keep reading to find out for sure. I will say that Queen Lilith turned one of the former agents herself. But that's all I will say. Keep checking back for more updates.
Review By [TheUndone] • Date [7 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 02" from Featherfoot
Review:
I love this story and it's chapter length! Update soon :D
Comments from author:
I love hearing that people like my story. Everyone's wonderful comments is really helping to boost my confidence, and it's helping push me to do well in my writing classes. Thank you. I have the next chapter written already. However, it needs proofread again, so I can make a couple of corrections. I will try to finish the proofreading by the 19th. However, I am enrolled in summer college courses, and we're getting ready to begin writing an extensive research paper. That needs to be my focus. I'll still try to get it up by that weekend though. Thanks again.
Review By [Featherfoot] • Date [7 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 02" from ScorpioP
Review:
Having only recently discovered the awesomeness that is Criminal Minds, I have to say that I look forward to this story. I am crossing my fingers it isn't Gideon who's been turned, although signs point to "yes".

It occurs to me that some of the 'unsubs' that the BAU has dealt with would make horrifyingly effective vamps -- Frank, the Fisher King, the Reaper, to name just a few. If you choose to twist their tales so that they end up turned ... ::shudder::
Comments from author:
Glad you like things so far. I too, only discovered how great Criminal Minds is, in the last couple of years. My cousin introduced me to it a couple of summers ago.
As to your comment about who has been turned, you will find out next chapter. Also, I agree with you that some of the team's unsubs would definitely make some pretty nasty vamps. I too, shudder to think how things would have gone if the Reaper had been a vamp when he'd gone after Hotch's family. He probably would have turned Hailey, knowing how much pain that would have caused Hotch. However, just to tell you, I won't be using any of the team's unsubs in this. They don't fit with my ideas. Thanks for the idea though.
Review By [ScorpioP] • Date [6 Jul 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 02" from Misty
Review:
Just found it, think its fab, thank you (ps: please don't be Gideon!) x
Comments from author:
Thank you, Misty. You will find out in the next chapter. I will try to post again sometime in the next two weeks. However, as I have an outline for a research essay due during that time, I will have to keep my focus on school until I get it finished. Keep reading.
Review By [Misty] • Date [6 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 01" from saa
Review:
That was an excellent chapter. Can't wait to read more.
Comments from author:
Thank you. All these wonderful comments have really cheered me up after the rotten day I had Wednesday. I don't know if I will get the next chapter up by the first weekend in July. I just started my second summer college course, and the first part of our final project is due that week. I will try to get it up before then, but if I can't, I will post the following week. Again, thanks for the great feedback.
Review By [saa] • Date [25 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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