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Review of chapter "Chapter 05" from (Current Donor)BaronScrewtape
Review:
Enjoying the story.
Been going back and rewatching criminal minds. While it fits the feel of criminal minds, Gideon coming to a bad end and becoming something he would hate with every fiber in his being is kind of depressing.

Side note: The actor who played Graham Miller is also the guy who played the man who shot Garcia, if you did not already know.

Looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Baron,
Glad you like it so far. I have several more chapters written and hope to get the next one up soon. Don't know for sure when it will happen, cause I just started a new college class, which is a bit confusing right now. Gotta get a feel for it, I guess.
And if you think what I've done to Gideon so far is depressing, just wait. As much as I loved his character, I need him to be as evil as possible for my story. :):):):):):)
Side note: I didn't know that the actor who played Graham was also the guy who shot Garcia. Thanks for pointing that out. I won't be including that, since I didn't know. But it is good to know the facts.
Review By [(Current Donor)BaronScrewtape] • Date [26 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 05" from Misty
Review:
Oh shit! Thank you for another fab chapter x
Comments from author:
Misty,
Thank you so much. I am so thrilled that everybody likes what I've written. It's doing wonders for my confidence, and its really making look forward to working on this while I have my two weeks off from college. I can't wait to get to the beginning of this story's climax. I just hope it lives up to my and your expectations.
Review By [Misty] • Date [12 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 05" from dreameralways
Review:
Still so much fun. I hope Emily lives. You already killed Gideon, please let us keep Emily. I can't wait for more. LOVE this story.
Comments from author:
Glad you like things so far. And don't worry. There's still time for Buffy and the CM team to find Emily. And Em is tough. You know she'd never simply give in and let some demon kill her without a fight. Stay tuned for more.
Review By [dreameralways] • Date [12 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 04" from spk
Review:
WOW! Definitely an intense and suspenseful story so far.
Comments from author:
Spk,
Things are just gonna get more intense in the later chapters. So stay tuned.
Review By [spk] • Date [11 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 04" from dreameralways
Review:
NEED MORE! I love this story. It's great. How much longer must we wait for the next installment? Want. Please.
Comments from author:
Hopefully, after tomorrow, I can get the next part up. My final is due tomorrow, so once it's out of the way, I will have a couple of weeks before my next class starts. I plan on using that two weeks to relax and enjoy writing what I want. And that will include revising the next couple of chapters I have finished already, and getting started on the new ones. Thanks for reading.
Review By [dreameralways] • Date [7 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 04" from Cristina
Review:
Wow, well now Buffy and Dawn have something incommon, both have doublers (if you go by comic or Angel TV show Buffy had double in Italy a slayer posing as her) trough Dawn's situation is different.
Trough I think Buffy overreacted on that thing, I know protective big sister and all, but I still think she overreacted there a bit, especially for such petty small thing. But that's not important...
Anyway great update. I am giddy in anticipating what will happen in that interrogation room. I do kind of think that Buffy wants them to know, so I doubt she' wont give them something (that they keep interest on her). And dawn oh Dawn...poor Reid...and Rossi, hey now Dawn has better reach for that kick in the shins that she owns him.
:P
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it. I do need to alter the scene where Dawn meets Reid and the team just a bit. I just realized that I didn't have Reid have a real reaction to seeing what his unconscious mind will be telling him is Maeve's killer. But, Dawn will have a brief confrontation with the team, and Rossi in particular, in an upcoming chapter. And I am sure you can guess that she will be in no way happy about the BAU's accusations against her and Buffy. And also, Buffy isn't quite ready to give away everything, but she will start dropping hints about what's going on soon, so stay tuned.
Review By [Cristina] • Date [7 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 04" from purrfus
Review:
As much as I've enjoyed crossover stories that reveal quickly to get on with the 'real' action, it is really a great change of pace to see a story that is taking a bit more time. Classified / top secret really ought to mean something and slow is much more realistic - even for the BtVS crew. Thanks
Comments from author:
Purrfus,
I am glad you understand the slow pace. I wanted to do things this way because of how much distrust the Senate oversight committee at the beginning of season 7 and end of season 8 seemed to have for the BAU's Alpha team. The team did basically all go rogue to bring Ian Doyle to justice, which severely jeopardized their credibility in the eyes of their superiors. Because of this, I can see those same politicians fighting tooth, nail, and claw to keep them from learning the biggest and most heavily guarded secret in history. And that slow pace is going to start disappearing in the next chapter, as Gideon and Lilith begin their assault against the members of the Alpha team who were in the BAU during Gideon's final two years with the bureau. So it will be game on very soon in this story.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [29 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 04" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
Frankly I think that Buffy and the SPD are working _far_ too hard at keeping the BAU from knowing about vamps and other 'night bumpers'. Ignoring the current crisis, which could easily end with the whole BAU dead or turned, you would expect that the BAU would stumble over attacks by vamps or 'others' in the course of their duties, which they actually _did_ in the '96 LA High School case.

So bring them in and have them sign a stack of NDAs and introduce them to Angel, Spike and assorted tame/harmless and imprisoned demons. Show them the Initiative videos and other hard evidence and generally scare the (literal) crap out them about dangerous the evil or amoral demons are along with all vamps _except_ those two.
Then let them get drunk and get over their nervous breakdowns and return to work at the BAU, sadder but _much_ wiser. If they can't handle the knowledge, there is plenty space in federal prisons and high security asylums to keep them quiet.

This might keep them alive and let them know how to call in the SPD and Slayers if they run across vamps, 'bumpers' or other supernatural threats in the course of their duties.
Otherwise, image of a future police and BAU team getting slaughtered when they assault on what they _think_ is a relatively harmless bunch of human killers, but which is actually a vamp or demon nest. Think about if Gideon and his team had found Lothos and his vamp gang back in 1996 and kicked in their door, before Buffy burned them.....
Comments from author:
fanreaderonetwo,
You make a lot of points, all of which I will try to address. I do plan on bringing the BAU into the loop. And Buffy and SPD are actually both on the fence about telling them in my story. Both Buffy and O'Neil know that telling them would greatly improve the chances of their survival. However, because this case involves government personnel, the decision to ultimately bring them in unless absolutely necessary falls on the president and the joint chiefs. Something Buffy has clearly expressed displeasure about in this story already. At this point in my story and because of what was implied in the season finale of Criminal Minds' 8th season, the Senate's oversight committee is still watching the Alpha team of the BAU because of the Ian Doyle case and don't believe they can be trusted with the knowledge at this point.
As to the point you make about the BAU and police unknowingly crashing in on some vamp's lair, I agree and will address that in a later chapter. I will explain things in a future chapter but the idea basically is that Special Projects has a program in place to identify cases around the country that fit into their area of expertise. It will be a program that Gideon actually helped create after Sunnydale sank, but before he left the bureau, which will explain how he and Lilith have been able to get to the other former agents without alerting Buffy and Special Projects. Gideon knows exactly how the program works, so he is able to get around it.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [29 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 04" from sean
Review:
Another great chapter, can't wait for the next one
Comments from author:
Thank you Sean. The next one will be a couple of weeks, since I am busy with the finals for my class. But I will update in August so keep checking back.
Review By [sean] • Date [29 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 04" from texaswookie
Review:
Huh so Dawn has or had an evil twin, after this is over I'm sure there will be some teasing for this. Along the lines of Buffy always thinking that Dawn would be the evil one.

I really enjoy this story I also love how not everyone is aware of what is going on and stumble into knowing. It puts great emphasis on the whole secret shadow war that most fics lack. Now if only I enjoyed criminal minds. Oh well, can't have everything.
Comments from author:
Not exactly an evil twin, Texaswookie. I hinted as to what it is when the team was talking about the killings on the plane. I will explain what's what in the next couple of chapters. However, I had to use Dawn in this. Michele Trachtenburg guest starred on Criminal Minds as a bad guy who killed one of the BAU team members' love interest, I decided I needed find a way to incorporate that into my story.
I am glad you like how I'm working into the BAU's discovery of Buffy's world, rather than having them already know. I really believe that the government would try to keep as many people as possible from learning about the supernatural world. I believe Buffy would too, but I also feel she would be more likely to admit the truth if she felt the only option for protecting someone was to tell them the truth.
Lastly, you know you don't have to enjoy Criminal Minds to drool over their super hot cast members like Shemar Moore and Thomas Gibson, and think that their characters would make some really sexy, sinister vampires. I know I wouldn't mind if Gibson's character, Aaron Hotchner was a vamp who wanted to suck me dry. And I bet you have some characters on shows you like whom you'd love to see as one of the undead in the BtVS Universe. :):):):):)
Review By [texaswookie] • Date [29 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 04" from (Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
The BAU agents are annoying me sufficiently at this point that I'm almost rooting for the vampires, at least as regards them getting eaten.
Comments from author:
Sorry they're annoying you Janessa. However, there is a reason that Hotch and Rossi are so convinced that Buffy is their killer. I hinted to it in this chapter, and will further explain it later. And I will say that there will be a confrontation between Gideon and Lilith and the BAU. However, I won't say if any of them become vamp chow.
Review By [(Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [29 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 04" from DragonBard
Review:
Ooh, this just got more interesting.

I'd forgotten she'd done an episode on Criminal Minds.
Comments from author:
Thanks Dragon. And of course I needed to throw Dawn into the mix. When Michele Trachtenberg guest starred on Criminal Minds last year, the first thing I thought was, "That's really Dawn and she's under a spell that's making her think she's someone else." And Gideon knew from his talk with Buffy in 2000 that Dawn meant a great deal to her. So, I would think it would be natural for him as a vampire to try and use Dawn as a tool to further separate Buffy from those she needs to protect. And that will continue in the next few chapters since, as we know, Dawn is very protective of her sister as well. Thanks for reading. Hope to have the next chapter up by the end of next week, but it may not happen with my final project for class due then. But I will update again in August, so stay tuned.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [29 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 04" from ChefJackButler
Review:
Just a niggling detail, but I think you meant "mail clerk" not "mail cleric".
Comments from author:
You're right. I did mean clerk, not cleric. You know, I have read and re-read this chapter a dozen times now, and this is the first time I noticed that. Thanks for pointing that out.
Review By [ChefJackButler] • Date [29 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 03" from dreameralways
Review:
Still awesome. Love it. Need more.
Comments from author:
Next week, dreameralways. I have to finish the draft of my research paper before I can get the next chapter up. But I will definitely get the next chapter up after the 28th, so stay tuned.
Review By [dreameralways] • Date [22 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 03" from Cristina
Review:
I like it. So I'm guessing that Buffy will get interviewed by Hoctch and Rossi soon. They can't arrest her per say, since there is no prof that she was anywhere near that house.
Now that will be interesting/entertaining. I wonder how Buffy will react, I suppose depends of her mood. She could play mouse/cat game with the BAU, with her being a fox (yep not a mouse or a cat). That could serve to keep BAU team safely tucked away. After all Buffy is not the only Slayer. Or to just buy some time for others to investigate when BAU team is looking the other way. Or they could put her on polygraph.

"Did you kill...?"
"No."
"She told the truth Hotch."
"Then her psychosis is great."

Its like those two are obsessed with the idea that Buffy is their killer full stop. That's kinda weird.

-err, isn't that contradiction, that Buffy was a suspect to those murders OK if deaths would be stabbing trough the hart I could see it, but they weren't. And wasn't her "psychos" That she saves ppl from vampires, so her MO would hardly be at the same manner that vampire kills.
-but that could be "compulsion spell" from WH at work...hmm? Heh, that means that Gideon wasn't so succumb to that spell. Nice!

So I am waiting at the end of my seat for the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Cristina,
You're following my idea really well. And you're very right about Buffy's mood in regards to an interrogation. I'm throwing a twist in with that in the next chapter.
You've also given me an idea for something in a later chapter. Thanks.
I cannot post the next chapter until next week at the earliest. The rdraft for my research paper is due this week, so I have to concentrate on it. So stay tuned for more then.
Review By [Cristina] • Date [21 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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