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Review of chapter "The Line Forms to the Left" from Lydia
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Interesting story, I was wondering if it was also a Stargate Crossover or if the NID was just pilfered from it to fill in for a secret government group aware of the supernatural other than the Initiative.
Review By [Lydia] • Date [19 Nov 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Line Forms to the Left" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
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Hah! He has a weakness for double X chromosomes! They will learn!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Line Forms to the Left" from Starfox
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Good chapter. I like the changes starting to add up. Xander should employ Willow, of couse, once Xandercon starts taking off.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Line Forms to the Left" from raxadian
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Well, if they try to scam Xander, they will find out that messing with people with access to magic is a bad idea.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [16 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Line Forms to the Left" from CageFire
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Great to see a new chapter. Keep up the good work. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [16 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Line Forms to the Left" from Valy
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Wow, given what Xander has done with just 20,000, I think he will be able to do amazing stuff with 500,000. Really like this chapter as it fills in a lot of back ground and will set him up to become a very successful inventor. I really do think that Cordy can be his Pepper.

Thank you for writing this story
Review By [Valy] • Date [16 Nov 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Line Forms to the Left" from Riniko
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Enjoyed the chapter, but I think you may have used the wrong gender pronoun once or twice in the NID scene for the female agent.
Review By [Riniko] • Date [16 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Line Forms to the Left" from hamishog
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Xander was never stupid. Most of his classes were the same AP courses Willow was taking but as has been pointed out Xander was basically skating by with fair to middling grades even though he seldom applied himself. He lacked focus and, of course, a belief in his own ability, something Willow never seemed to lack. On the other hand Willow and Xander found each other at an early age. They were both highly emotional. They both suffered from some form of emotional abuse. Which in turn makes their friendship completely understandable. The emotional investiture is obvious and when their relative social ostrasization is added the truly astounding fact is that they both weren't serial killers. Call them Jack and Jill. Their alternate selves as vampires became masters in three years. That was probably Willow though as she was always an overachiever. And I can see the attraction to Cordelia, because she is a lovely young woman. And she might make a great Girl Friday. If you mind your life being tyrannically controlled.
So far Willow-vision has been of the day-late variety as Buffy is off to be shot at. I don't know who's paying the assassins but it really doesn't pay to underestimate Dru. Sanity is so over-rated. And Xan is back negotiating with the NID and they actually managed to send a negotiator this time. And he didn't die. Which is always good. But it's early in their relationship and you should really try not to screw over somebody you're planning to utilize. Innovation seems to be the key here.
Review By [hamishog] • Date [16 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Line Forms to the Left" from lordamnesia
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Ah, trying to con Xander! While still a teenager, hormone riddled as that is, he has the memories of perhaps one of the best ladies men in comics ever, who never grew up in that direction and was constantly hormone riddled! Plus, Stark ran his own multi-billion dollar corporation! Keep up the great work, this story just keeps on being awesome!
Review By [lordamnesia] • Date [16 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Line Forms to the Left" from (Current Donor)ginvirus
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I love it I really do wish I had a recommendation open to give.

The character voices are top in my opinion.
The way your pacing the characters development is really good its not to fast or to slow. I know that's just my subjective judgment...

I can't wait to read the next chapter.

I wish you happy writing.
Review By [(Current Donor)ginvirus] • Date [16 Nov 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Line Forms to the Left" from grd
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The Snyder teasing was the best part. Wonder if Willow will recall Adam.
Review By [grd] • Date [16 Nov 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Begin Scenario" from MageMan
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Comments from author:
Stark wanted out of the weapons biz, after he saw up close what his products were doing, so that was clouding Xander's perception somewhat.

I am okay with stirring things up. I was kinda surprised at the results I got when searching for RL arms dealers in SoCal for Xander to pitch to. There's apparently a mass exodus currently, because of a new law involving microstamps on automatic weapons sold in California, and a lot of big suppliers are refusing to sell in California rather than complying. That kind of attitude would pervade Sunnydale, methinks, adding yet another reason why, canonically, they didn't use firearms to make vampire hunting easier. I had to include that, knowing the kind of reactions (on both sides) I might get. It's all good. =)

Up here in Canadia, we don't have cents anymore, so this will have to be a whole nickel's worth. =) It's good advise, and worth far more than I paid for it. =)
Review Date [31 Aug 14] • Rating [10/10]
Review by MadHobbit
this could get interesting(not that it is not now). one of the submitted forms could send off alarms at SGC,as its similar to a gu'ild device, Carter looks into Xander's background.
Thinks he might be a host and really causes problems.As the patent is WAY above both his age and grade level. I also like the pact that he has to work for his stuff ,not that it is granted almost too quickly.
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The SGC might not have an ear in the patent office but the pentagon probably has a whole floor dedicated to searching both foreign and domestic patent offices for gear and knowledge that is of "High Military Importance". Several agencies inside the government tell the patent office what is secret (and what level of secret) these include not only the military but also NSA, Department of Energy, NASA and Department of Justice. It's spelled out in the Invention Secrecy Act, http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Invention_Secrecy_Act if you want to get the story as close to real.
Comments from author:
In the amalgam universe I am working with, the NID is in charge of that sort of thing, probably farming some things out to the NSA and DoE as needed, but the NID has first crack, due to working with super secrets like aliens and the supernatural. Their mandate is to stop off-world tech from spreading on earth, and while they are at it, find things that can be used against off-world threats (and on-world supernatural threats, as and if they learn of them).
Review By [MageMan] • Date [10 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Whose Line Is It, Anyway?" from Starfox
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Good chapter, more build up, and some insight into Willow's memories.
Comments from author:
Even more of future-Willow's memories in this latest chapter. The problem is that she remembers different events than are happening now, thanks to Xander changing things...
Review By [Starfox] • Date [10 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Whose Line Is It, Anyway?" from TheMaskedLurker
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--'{@

The after-school job?
Been a while since last mentioned.
First time it was named.

-[ Since this is the first time it's mentioned that Xander worked at Home Depot, I wasn't sure if I had missed reading a chapter. I had forgotten he had an after-school job when the story started. I had to CTRL-F for instances of it to remind myself.
Anyways, I'm with the others. I can see the possibilities of Xander turning the remains of Moloch into the Ultron to his Stark. ]-
Comments from author:
I don't think the show ever had him working during high school, just afterwards when he went into construction. But I figure he must have had something to build his road trip fund, and it fits with him learning carpentry and home repair.

He would need a rogue A.I. for it to be Ultron all the way. On an unrelated note, they will be meeting Ted fairly soon...
Review By [TheMaskedLurker] • Date [9 Nov 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Whose Line Is It, Anyway?" from Bobboky
Review:
Nice work
Comments from author:
Arigato
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [9 Nov 14] • Not Rated
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