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Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from normanK
Review:
Great start, looking forward to reading more of this story. Glad to see you use all the brothers. Not just Fred, George and Ron. About time someone used Percy as a good guy. Only other story I can remember using Percy was The Muggle Way, by Imjustaguy.
Comments from author:
Yeah, Percy needed an opportunity to show that he really wasn't a complete waste of protoplasm.

It's just a shame that it required Ginny's death to show that. ;-(
Review By [normanK] • Date [29 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Cateagle
Review:
I have to wonder, on re-reading, if Dumbledore realizes just how much political and moral capital he's just blown through? And if he does, is he sane enough to care? It should be rather interesting to see how this effects later events if externals (particularly Tom's efforts) proceed similar to canon. *smile* It would be nice, and convenient, if Lucius was removed, along with wife, spawn, and accomplices, prior to Tom's return.
Comments from author:
Dumbledore always struck me as someone who considers himself far wiser and far more intelligent than anyone else around them. He believes that only *he* can see the 'big picture' and only *he* knows the best way to guide events to a 'proper' conclusion.

He just can't conceive of anyone being smarter or knowing how to better handle things than he can.

And that's going to come back and bite him in the ass, eventually.
Review By [Cateagle] • Date [28 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from meteoricshipyards
Review:
Interesting. I'm glad they are not just killing Draco (I assume Snape is also getting some "bad luck"). This is more fun, and more in the feeling of revenge.

I see either Draco learning to hold his tongue, or eventually losing it and then, well, no more Draco.

Thanks for the story. Looking forward to more.

Tom A.
Comments from author:
Draco, at this point in time, is an idiot.

He will be given an opportunity to reform himself, but given the canon behavior he always presented, he is most likely going to be an early demonstration of Darwin's Law.
Review By [meteoricshipyards] • Date [26 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from slmncpm
Review:
*grins* i have been a long time reader of your, and while i generally don't like ron, this fic is fantastic! bash dumbledork all you want! *hands you scones for the muses* i am waiting for more updates!
Comments from author:
Yes, Ron is perfectly salvageable, if caught early enough.
Review By [slmncpm] • Date [25 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from GundumM
Review:
great chapter
Comments from author:
Thanks. ;-)
Review By [GundumM] • Date [23 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Dhampyr
Review:
Another nice chapter. Although I have to wonder what, if anything, the expanded Weasley Clan might learn about Snape and his actual motivations as they begin to wage their war? Because Snape was not a nice, or even really a good, man but his motivations were very similar to their own if you replace Ginny with Lily. And it's pretty much canon that Dumbledore held that ruthlessly over Severus' head to keep him in line until the day Severus died, ironically a period over a year after Albus' own death in canon. If those involved, perhaps with the aid and expertise of Lupin and Sirius as they actually understood enough of the big picture to at least mention something in passing that could get the Golden Trio investigating Dumbledore's "pet deatheater" with more scrutiny than just a target they might get a better idea of how unpleasant Dumbledore can actually be.

And it would be funny as hell if Snape starts seeing his own motivations developing in Happy in the others and trying to do something to prevent it. Because self-loathing is a core concept of his character and the last thing he would want would be to see Lily's son and her son's friends becoming a generation of bitter husks like himself.

Perhaps they could encounter him arguing with Lupin and demanding he help them before they end up like him? That kind of concern would ring alarm bells for someone of Hermione's intelligence at the very least. And from there would begin the research, maybe even discovering his pensieve. Because I would argue that there was more than what Harry saw that day in canon in there. Perhaps in addition to the day by the Lake, there were memories of begging Voldemort and Dumbledore both for Lily's life, Snape's reaction to learning of her death, and who knows how many other unpleasant memories that Severus would use just to torture himself.

And no, I'm not suggesting they would or could redeem him. I'm not saying they would turn him into a kindly father figure or even a likeable person. That is not in the man's nature. At best you could push him into becoming a magical variation on a character like the Punisher and point him at Death Eaters. Like Frank Castle, Severus Snape gave up on living his own life the day the only person he cared about in the world died. The only difference is Snape had someone to pull his strings and make him toe a certain line in the form of Albus Dumbledore. I don't want the Weasely's to save Snape. I simply see how he could become a cautionary tale of where they could headed and perhaps a lesson in what can happen when you put too much faith in the wrong people. Although it would have a kind of sick and twisted irony if Harry was trying to save Snape for Lily's sake as Snape tried to do the same with Harry while neither one really managing to get through to or help the other in any way.

EDIT:

Ah, irrational character hate regardless of canon facts. Got it. At no point once he understood the prophecy involved Lily did he say to Voldemort or anyone else, "Please kill James and give me Lily." He did not ask Voldemort if he could come along and collect Lily for himself as if she were a possession. He did go on bended knee to both Voldemort and Dumbledore begging for her life in whatever manner he thought each man would find appropriate with Dumbledore reprimanding him for not caring about James' or Harry's lives as well. Not caring about them is not actively wanting them dead. If he only wanted Lily as a possession he would have had no reason to risk his life and sanity going to Dumbledore to protect her. And when you consider the risks involved in going to both Voldemort AND Dumbledore with this should Voldemort ever discover his treachery I can't exactly call that self-centered. Snape did not understand love and kindness. Other than Lily he had never experienced it in any form for the whole of his life. His is a vile, disgusting, self-loathing creature driven by revenge and guilt over the fact that his actions got the one person who ever gave a damn about him, and SHE gave up on him at 15, killed.

Like I said earlier, in many ways Snape became a shell that believed the ends justified the means similar to someone like the Punisher. And as for having no redeeming qualities, his canon argument with Dumbledore that Hagrid overheard did demonstrate that he had come to care about human life in some regard and was more than a simple bigoted Death Eater. The fact that he wanted to die when he discovered Lily's fate until Dumbledore pretty much manipulated into serving him faithfully using Lily's memory as a proverbial bludgeon to the head does the same. You don't want to die because you failed to save a "thing" you wanted and it's now out of your reach.

But I digress. We can agree to disagree about the motivations of the character. I just thought it would be interesting for him to see Harry begin to be motivated by rage and revenge and want to stop Harry from becoming another Severus Snape. At the end of the day I don't think there is anyone Snape hates more, barring perhaps Sirius Black, than himself. And in all fairness he had ample reasons to hate Black to his dying day. Other than being kind to Harry, loyal to James, and having a few real friends of his own Black had no more redeeming qualities than Snape did. He was a sociopath that saw nothing wrong with leading a 15 year old boy into the lair of a werewolf simply because he didn't like him. And saying he just thought it was a harmless prank is ridiculous. He was not that stupid. You lead someone into a cage with the equivalent of an angry and rabid tiger and you do not expect them just be "scared." Black intended to kill Snape and the aftermath of the incident was Snape being threatened by Dumbledore should he reveal anything about it. Honestly that was honestly either one of Dumbledore's biggest mistakes in handling all of those involved or a demonstration that Dumbledore did not care any more for the lives of those that did not support him than Riddle did.
Comments from author:
I disagree completely with you about the possibility of Snape ever even considering trying to assist Harry and his friends in any way.

Snape is a vile, bigoted, self-centered unrepentant piece of excrement with absolutely no redeeming qualities that I can see.

At Hogwarts, he aids and abets the children of other bigoted, murdering sociopathic pieces of excrement in their campaign of tormenting those who don't agree with their bigoted beliefs, or who fit the parameters of their bigoted views of those who should 'rightly' be targeted for persecution, while also conducting his own campaign of persecution against Harry and anyone else he decides he doesn't like, for whatever childish and immature reason that might be.

Snape clung, for over a decade, to his hatred of James Potter, even after he'd arranged events so that James was killed. He didn't *love* Lily, he *coveted* her as a possession, and as a method of proving he'd finally bested James Potter by taking control over someone he loved. He clearly didn't care about what her feelings of surviving the murders of her husband and child might be; he simply wanted her for himself, as a souvenir or symbol of his victory.

Snape deserves to suffer before finally being put down like a rabid dog, in whatever way will maximize his humiliation and agony when he realizes who it is who has destroyed his life and his so-called accomplishments.
Review By [Dhampyr] • Date [22 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from ivanjedi
Review:
Nice touch in having the rest of the Slytherins distance themselves from Draco and his cronies. JKR didn't do the house justice; they were supposed to be ambitious and cunning, yet for the most part, what we see in the books from the 'signature' Slytherins is fanaticism and sycophancy.

Which is more than slightly disturbing when you consider that one possible reason for Salazar Slytherin's hostility towards muggles and muggleborns could be the widespread religious fanaticism during his time - his background is never explored in the canon, and bad experience and/or a loss of a loved one to a nutcase seeking to purge 'evil' from the land could well be what pushed him over the edge. And one doesn't need to look further than Severus Snape, the textbook example for 'you are what you hate', to see what revenge does to a person.
Comments from author:
If Slytherin is the House of the cunning and ambitious, then I figure that they'll display such traits by distancing themselves from any group who has apparently been targeted by Fate or some fairly powerful and obviously clever magic-users who have managed to conceal their existence while doing everything they've been doing. Dying from collateral damage still means that you die.

Going by the depiction JKR gave us, Slytherin would better be described as the house of ass-sucks and brown-nosers.
Review By [ivanjedi] • Date [22 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Cateagle
Review:
*snicker* Just a "run of bad luck" and "happenstance". If I was Severus Snape, I'd definitely be going the 'Once is happenstance..." route, but, then, Severus Snape would not be familiar with classics of non-magical literature like "Goldfinger". I strongly suspect that this is just the start of his, and Draco's, travails, slowly escalating in intensity and spreading to affect their associates.
Comments from author:
*grin*

Your gift for prophecy is a LOT better than Sybil's is. ;-)
Review By [Cateagle] • Date [21 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Kirallie
Review:
Good chapter. Like how they're dealing with the group at school.
Comments from author:
Yep, isolating and/or alienating your targets from any possible sources of assistance before launching your attack maximizes your likelihood of success. ;-)
Review By [Kirallie] • Date [21 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from WolfWriter
Review:
At least the other kids in Slytherin know when to keep out of stuff. They're the ones that are truly cunning, and smart.

Pissing off Harry and the Weasleys is a stupid thing to do; especially when they have their resident genius Hermione Granger (a female Kerr Avon if there ever was one. If only she were a little more ambitious and snide, she'd be an ancestor of his.) on their side. If she's this sneaky, conniving and devious at the age of thirteen/fourteen, she will be a force to be reckoned with as an adult.

I'm glad to see that she's shedding some of her righteousness, and is willing to go looking for some payback from the Malfoys. It's about time she grew a backbone and started fighting back.

And I'm glad to see that Draco and his little coterie and godfather got what is bound to be only the beginning of a very painful revenge. Never piss of a brainbox, a family of redheads with a tigress mother and a maybe former assassin father, two inventive deviant devious genius identical twins, and a games master in the making. If Ron actually starts using the smarts that he has, especially when it comes to strategy, he'll be dangerous.

Have him read 'The Art of War' by Tzun Tzu. As well as books on chess strategy. He'll like those.

Especially don't piss off an orphan that was robbed of his parents, a potential little sister, and his childhood. He will not react well. At. All.
Comments from author:
You've summed up my cast so well. ;-)

As I've already said in other reviews, Armageddon is approaching the Wizarding World, and the Five Horsemen are on their way. ;-)
Review By [WolfWriter] • Date [21 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from banner
Review:
I like smart, ruthless heroes.


By the way, I would take it as a personal favor if you would consider having Dumbledore say something like "Ginerva was a lovely girl, and I'm sure that she wouldn't want her misfortune to lead her family down a dark path."
Comments from author:
Have you been reading my notes? ;-)

Dumbledore is so focused on 'redeeming' those who aren't interested in redemption, and who are even less deserving of it, that he shits all over the good people he insists he is representing.

He's also a politician, who says whatever he thinks he needs to say at any particular moment, and means none of it.
Review By [banner] • Date [21 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from twlight
Review:
Oh this is wonderful simply wonderful. I am looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Thanks. I'm currently busy trying to finish up the other stories for the month's challenge.
Review By [twlight] • Date [21 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from (Recent Donor)jcon
Review:
Finished reading the three chapters posted. Enjoying reading of a more seasoned & cunning Weasley family. Looking forward to coming chapters.
Comments from author:
I try to write the characters as though they actually were as smart and competent as JKR wanted the reader to believe they were.

Which can lead to *very* nasty bastards. ;-)
Review By [(Recent Donor)jcon] • Date [21 Aug 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Pranking with teeth! Yep, wondered why Hell's Carrots never went that far after Dumbledork kept failing so miserably as a headmaster. Would actually have been in character.
Comments from author:
Keep in mind that JKR was ostensibly writing for school-age children. I don't thing she wanted to incite or inspire any would-be copycats.
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [21 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
Isolate then destroy. Solid plan.

Don't forget that luck is actually manipulable by magic.
Comments from author:
Good point. I will definitely keep that in mind. Thanks. ;-)
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [21 Aug 14] • Not Rated
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