Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Ponder
Your story got served up to me when I clicked on the "random under-reviewed story" link.
This one has both of the same problems I mentioned in the last review I sent to you on one of your other stories. I don't know if you'll ever see this, but just in case, you should check out these links:http://mrbraiman.home.att.net/page25.htmlhttp://www.itsuckstobejoe.com/Jdn/writing/punctuation.htmlhttp://www.rachelsimon.com/wg_appendix.phphttp://www.tthfanfic.org/guide.phphttp://www.palidormedia.com/james/editor/lesson1.htmlhttp://www.writing-world.com/fiction/dialogue.shtml
I see many authors who make these and similar mistakes (and they are indeed mistakes, in all English-speaking countries), so I've collected that set of links that cover the issue, and explain it from different angles. They each have their strengths and weaknesses, so I keep them all handy.
Review By [Ponder
] • Date [19 Nov 09] • Not Rated