You don't mean to tell me that you are actually just writing this on the fly...if you are, I'm fairly impressed. You've done good so far, thanks for writing! ~"~
Comments from author:
with the exception of Chamomile, all of my fics are on the fly. Not a single thing in this story (with the exception of who the characters are) has been plotted. thanks for the review! ~J
Review By [Ezmerelda] • Date [10 Sep 04] • Rating [9 out of 10]
You mean to say that no-one's guessed who Jillian Post's mother is? I'll take a random stab in the dark at the idea of her being the spawn of Gwendolyn Post, evil-Watcher-extraordinaire. Am I right?
PS: Story is great, can't wait for the next update!
Comments from author:
Yup, you're the first to guess (or at least tell it to me, anyway.) I'm working on the next chapter right now. Til then!
Review By [Samie] • Date [18 Feb 04] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Yep, still completely confused here. I get some things, but then others go right over my head or something. =] Oh well. I'll just keep reading along 'till it all makes sense to me. I hope it will all make sense eventually. =D Aside from my not understanding much of anything, good chapter. Thanks for updating.
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [13 Feb 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Okay... a little confusing here. Not sure if that cigarette was squib rated and effected Jillian too hard or was a trap for Petunia set by Death-eaters. I understood why Harry would follow Conner outside. The confusion Conner feels is fairly well dramatized, but also a little confusing to the reader. But you put that nice author's note on the bottom, so I'm willing to wait for the next chapter and then will read both together, as well.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [12 Feb 04] • Not Rated
To answer your question: Like the characterization of all of the characters, and you left off on an intruiging cliff-hanger.
A minor point I'd like to "see" a little more of 5-senses details, in paricular ones that might hint a little more at the three dimesnional space in a particular room, and perhaps a scent here and there. You're almost there with the wet and towels bit for the sense of touch, and perhaps the idea of the hot chocolaste steaming or smelling in a particular way. Mainly though, a just little more visual detail on clothes, rooms, etc. would make the story even more vivid and enjoyable.
Plot good so far.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [11 Feb 04] • Rating [7 out of 10]
You done good. I think I like this one. But, just to be sure, post six or seven more chapters asap. I'll let you know when I've read them if I really do like it or not. =]
PS. What on earth does this Lisa girl see in Dudley anyway? Ewww!
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [11 Feb 04] • Not Rated
I don't get the title. Is there some significance that I'm just missing, or what? But, despite that, it is an interesting chapter with a lot of potential. I guess since you don't know where it is taking you, we can find out together? Looking forward to more. =]
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [10 Feb 04] • Not Rated