Review of chapter "But We Already Have a Geek..." from DaveTurner
OK never heard of 'She Spies' so the intro was helpful.
Unfortunately choosing this as a 'Twenty Minute Fic' or whatever was a bad choice. This sounds like the opening chapter of a much, much longer fic, and as such it might have worked...I would have probably read it. But as a short fic it doesn't work. Nothing happens! A short fic should be...well...short and snappy! As I say this sounds like an introduction to something bigger and likely better.
Oh-well, better luck next time eh?
Review By [DaveTurner
] • Date [5 Jun 08] • Not Rated