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Review of chapter "Conclusions" from bradsan
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wow how fast can you tell a story did you need to catch a plane, train, bus or something. I never read a story going this fast as you made it go. The sad part is you could have a very interesting storyline if you go deeper in the details but you choose to rush the story which is sad.

How Hermione acted I would be pissed. It's none of her business and she has no right to act like you wrote her. Telling her professor that she lied how rude is that.

And Faith last name is Lehane. You can google it if you don't know it.

Normally I don't write this kind of reviews but this story could be so much more if you would take your time. You have the ability to write and tell a story. Take your time doing it and don't rush it.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [6 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Conclusions" from BrownFinderth
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The story seemed to go by very quickly. It did not hold my attention, for it seemed to be written by rote. I do hope the author's other stories are better at keeping the reader's attention. Good luck.
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [15 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "First Day of Class" from BrownFinderth
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What is this? Buffy can't handle a class by herself? And she especially can't stop the students from harming each other?! So far, the plot has been great, so I suspect this part of the story may be an aberration. I'm going to find out.
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [15 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Conclusions" from LalaithQuetzalli
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I think this fic was kinda rushed, but even then pretty good all in all. And you made it a BA, which by itself is already very good in my book. Maybe if you had detailed other things more, made this more extensive it would have turned better, or worse, it seems we'll never know. But I still liked this.
Review By [LalaithQuetzalli] • Date [29 Dec 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "First Class Together" from TheHunter
Review:
You are a novice and need to seriously hone your skills.
Review By [TheHunter] • Date [7 Dec 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Letter" from TheHunter
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check your spelling
Review By [TheHunter] • Date [7 Dec 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from TheHunter
Review:
Wow, " Reader's Digest" version very short. You need to put a little more detail into your writing.
Review By [TheHunter] • Date [7 Dec 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Conclusions" from spring
Review:
funny
Review By [spring] • Date [9 Aug 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Conclusions" from Revan
Review:
While the plot is interesting I think you are rushing through the story. Its ok to do things at a slower pace. :)
Give more details and more images to add to your story's depth.
Also pay a bit more attention to details of your characters. Buffys leaving the hellmouth is understandable but her leaving Dawn just like that is quite out of character. As is Angels leaving L.A. Not to mention that the whole Fang Gang just went along with it (do remember that Angel is the champion and they all fight the forces of darkness so just leaving is a bit strange).
A scene of Oz popping in, warning about vampires and then popping out is the best example of your mistakes:
1. Rushed way to much (no reason why he was there, how he knew Buffy was there, no nothing)
2. Out of character (the show Oz would at least offer to help or give a good reason why he cant. would also chat a bit)

All in all - good creativity but your writing needs polishing. Pay more attention to character development and their reactions and DONT BE IN SUCH A HURRY. :)
Review By [Revan] • Date [14 Jul 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Revelations and A New Co-Professor" from Souless
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Hey. not to be rude, but this is so.....unbelievable. Kinda lacking in the facts and details. makes it really dull and stupid. I've just grown used to detail. Dont mean to be rude.
Review By [Souless] • Date [29 May 04] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Revelations and A New Co-Professor" from Candy
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That was great so far. Please udpate really soon.
Review By [Candy] • Date [23 May 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from (Past Donor)lckybr
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everything went to fast. There was no real- i don't know but u rushed it all to fast.
Review By [(Past Donor)lckybr] • Date [23 Apr 04] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Feast and a Meeting" from throwingit
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Good start. waiting for the next chapter
Review By [throwingit] • Date [16 Apr 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Letter" from VillageOrchid
Review:
I think that it is good that you had Hermione just assume she was "student age" because she's petite and young-looking. I'm a little confused about the letter versus Buffy's actions, but only a little.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [15 Apr 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Nice characterization, good language use. Interesting concept, plausibly dramatized so far.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [15 Apr 04] • Not Rated
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