So, I have finally reached the end of this mega story… And I’m a bit at lost for words. I mean, how does one describe such a wonderfully intricate, well-planned, expertly written, beautiful, and touching story as this? Literally one of the best things I have ever read -- Partly because I love Marauder Era stories and yours really shines light on how things may have gone (well, okay, I guess if only Dawn magically had appeared, but you know what I mean). You have a wonderful vocabulary, use great descriptive language, kept things interesting, tied Dawn very well and believably into this world, and properly dealt with the other Sunnydale characters through the dreams and their final arrival.

Soooooo… Thank you : ) Thanks for sharing, this has been a delightful read!

I love this story.

That is all.

:)

Definitely enjoying this story so far :)

Did snape still call lilly a mudblood? I would assume so but with your ideas on storylining you never know. I just think it's kind of important because one of the major roadblocks in lilly and james' relationship was his and snapes treatment of eachother. after it ended fith year and james' parents died a little over half way through his sixth she started going out with him. there was probably alot more too it but those were the cannon mentioned cornerstones. anyways good chapters since my last posting. though i'm curious as to what catastrophie you're going to arrange to get dawn to your next string where she meets harry.

Can you even place a fidelious charm on a person? I would understand an object like a vault or the obvious choice of a house of a building but is it even possible to place such a charm on a mobile person? and even then, how would she be able to clue people into her presence? you have to know the secret to perceive what is hidden. Meh, i guess for the purposes of your story it will work. while i don't particularly like a number of the things that are happening in the story your writing is so far quite good. I still maintain that as a marauder she should learn to become some form of animagus. I'd vote for either a panther or a Sphinx. or if you're wanting to stay closer to the title of kitten there are the Japanese nekomata; Dangerous, Powerful and intelligent, but small and deceptively cute.

Dawn did write this vision down in her journal didn't she? also, I know it's your story and it's really far to late to think about changing anything, but why aren't the marauders teaching dawn about animagi transformations? you've written it yourself; dawn has enough power to frighten Dumbledore and enough skill to be his rival; fitting 4 and a half years of education into 2 months is not a simple thing. anyways, great story thus far. hope you don't mind the number of reviews. see you in a couple of chapters.

near the end of chapter five you made two serious errors. I'm not sure how far you've read but blast ended screwts are sterile magical constructs that were brought into being as orrigional creations durring harry's time at hogwarts by hagrid himself. the second error is why i asked you how far along in the orrigionals you were at the time you wrote this chapter. durring harry and sirius's time the potions teacher was a benign walrus of a slytherine named slughorn, though i'm sure you know that by now. otherwise you've put together quite a story so far; ignoring the above mentioned complaints you seem well worthy of the awards you have been given.

OK, no two ways about it; THAT was good.

I have to admit, when I first started reading this, I found the whole concept a bit questionable. I mean, I like Sirius and Remus as characters as much as anybody, but the idea of writing a complete story of this scale about them at this time in their lives is something I've never been entirely sure about; the general lack of most of the characters we know from the main series makes it a bit more challenging to write an effective story, in my opinion.

However, you put any concerns I might have had about the lack of most of the stars of the 'main' stories in this one to rest pretty rapidly. I've never thought much about what the characters would have been like at this time, but, if I had, they DEFINITELY would have been something like they were portrayed here; Peter more than a bit shy but nevertheless well-meaning, Sirius a bit of a player but a likeable guy for all that, James occasionally arrogant but always willing to go that extra mile for his friends and family, and Remus tortured by his secret and wanting, more than anything, to be accepted by his peers.

Then, of course, Dawn's status as the Fifth Marauder was an excellent little touch to the whole storyline. Best of all, it happened naturally; you didn't have anybody suddenly deciding she was the group's newest addition, she didn't force her way in, and she didn't go out of her way to get the 'position'.

She just... got it, and that was all there was to it.

Oh, and the Scoobies' encounters with the Hogwarts gang worked well as well; I particularly liked Spike commenting to Lucius that he wouldn't rape the bastard because he "[didn't] fancy having to remove the railroad spike already lodged up there anyway", and Willow's little lessons with Dumbledore about the nature of her magic added another interesting little touch in terms of plot depth.

However, the crowning glory of it all has to be Dawn's relationships with Sirius and James; she finds in Sirius someone who would do anything for her no matter what's happened to them (Him sneaking out as Padfoot to find her despite their argument is proof enough of that), and finds in James someone who accepts her as a sibling despite her 'odd' past (To say the least).

I think that was one reason I 'liked' (As a plot moment, of course; the actual ACT I hated) the part where Lucius tried to rape Dawn; the aftermath DEFINITELY showed how highly the Marauders value their friendship with her (Plus, of course, it provided a very interesting 'origin' for the Marauder's Map; congratulations on that front).

My only flaw is that Voldemort's attempts to claim the Key seemed to suddenly be cut short after Dawn was rescued from the Death Eaters; I wouldn't have thought he'd stop trying after just ONE failure.
Then again, maybe Dawn's Fidelus Charm made him forget all about the Key's entire existence in the first place, or maybe he decided he'd prefer to wait until he had a more clear idea what he'd use the Key's energies FOR when he had them.

In any case, looking forward to the sequel; should be interesting to see how things go when Dawn meets Harry.

(Any chance we can have the Scoobies making a return visit to this reality, or would that be too risky?)

I enjoyed this so much! I've been reading it on and off all week.

That was AWESOME I loved it. I especially liked it when Spike confronted Lucius, that was brilliant. I can't wait to read the sequel. Great job.

I loved this story, but I don't understand why Buffy can't visit!

Willow demonstrably has the power to bring people back and forth between the Buffyverse and the Potterverse, so even if she has to rest up before the return trip, they should be able to get together at least occasionally.

It just seems like they should be treating this as "Dawn lives in a foreign country far away", not as "we'll never see Dawn again".

Awesome, very well done.

beautiful, beautiful story. I loved it to pieces; it had everything! It had action, it had romance, it had tragedy. It made me laugh, it made me cry. This fic is definitely in my top five favourite fics of all time. Good job!

"“Ok,” Remus sighed. “Put your begging faces on, boys. We’re going to see McGonagall.”"

---I love Remus.

I'm really happy that Dawn stood up to the Marauders for Snape. Perhaps they shall refrain from their Angelus-like behaviour now.

I loved Sirius's hesitant confession at the end of the chapter and Dawn's subtle hints about her and Sirius's flirting game.


Great chapter.