This is a very interesting story that I hope you complete.
My only complaint is the number of very short slayers. I understand that you are passing it off as genetics but as we saw with the ancient gene on both Stargate SG-1 and Atlantis, it didn't really affect physical traits. The six slayers we saw prior to the spell in "Chosen" were all different body types and so were the potentials.
Review By [arianwyn] • Date [24 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Excellent job on the supporting details like the origin details for the Slayer and The Key, the Nox problem, and the realization that they have a slayer suited to solving it.
I know that you have been working on this story for a long time, and its terrific! I hope that you will be updating more frequently as I love this story and want to see what happens next!!
Comments from author:
Do my best, glad you liked it.
Review By [celticjenn] • Date [27 Jun 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Great story! I like how you have tied the past activities of the scoobies into wider events of a galactic scale, like Dawn's origin and the calling of the Slayers. It really gives the story a nice epic scope. Interesting also to see the different groups in the town and how the members interact. The SGC and slayer personnel don't know each other well enough to trust each other yet. Some weaknesses are readily apparent though :) (Especially in Kennedy) I like how you had the Slayers get a little military training too. Nice touch. I hope we will see Jerol rescued soon, she is only trying to do the best for her family.
Comments from author:
Jerrol's situation is coming to head. Glad you like the story. Also glad you liked the back story. The story grew out of the back story, unlike my Rainbow series, I didn't have definate finish when I started fleshing it out, by putting the backstory together, I was able to see were the story went.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [24 Jun 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Sounds like Buffy and crew are gonna have a fun party in town.
Strange that the vamp is keeping low profile. I wonder if after getting on the planet he jumped to another planet to throw off the SGC?
Good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
The vamp's low profile has more to do with lack of instant communications than him keeping his head down. You'll get to see some of his handywork next chapter.
Review By [war] • Date [21 Jun 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Well, good update, and things are moving along finally. And Kinsey appears willing to grab for any benefits available after his sudden plunge into deep doodoo.
One little quibble - “Posse?” Rak’nor asked in a confused voice.
“Deputize a group of citizens to chase us.” Buffy explained.
You have a Jaffa that doesn't understand the Earth word "posse", it's almost certain he won't understand the Earth word "deputize" either.
Buffy would simplify it quickly (as she often does) by just replying "Quickly organize a group of men with weapons to chase us."
Many Free Jaffa might already be familiar with Star Wars (c/o Teal'c), but they more than likely haven't a clue about American Western movies or their law enforcement terms.
Comments from author:
Posse and Deputize were around for a lot longer than the Old West, (Though I will admit that Buffy got the terms from Western Movies.) Posse is short for posse comitatus, and has been around as a concept from the mid 1500s. Deputize has been around from a hundred or so years after that.
Stargate has a magic translator running, that is really the only explination for the fact that almost everyone speaks English. Since 'Posse' is slang my thought was that it would not translate properly, while deputize is an actual word so it would. I feel that Jaffe would have the concept, if not the actual word.
Thanks for the review. Hope you enjoy the rest of the story.
Review By [Kremer] • Date [21 Jun 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]