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Review of chapter "What's my Line?" from SamuraiSky
Review:
Loving the Dawn's pov sorry. Would love to read her pov of when Buffy left after sending Angel to hell.
Review By [SamuraiSky] • Date [23 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "What's my Line?" from Zira
Review:
Hey! I just re-found this story, and re-read it from the beginning! I'd forgotton how much I love it...please continue? Pretty please? With sugar and cherries on top?
Comments from author:
Glad you like it. There will be a new part at some point, i just can't promise when.
Thanks for Re-R&R
Kiara
Review By [Zira] • Date [24 Oct 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "What's my Line?" from YademosEbyam
Review:
This is excellent. More please. Just remember, Dawn's secret has always been at risk. If you backtrack to "Lie to Me", Ford with his brain tumor could notice something odd about Buffy's little sister. When Dru meets Dawn, she will spot and mention her keyness. Adam wasn't fooled by Jonathan in "Superstar", so he would probably spot Dawn as an anomaly as well. Of course since these are *false* memories, Dawn's *real* nature might not factor into the equation. (I've always gone with the temporal leverage option myself, where the Dawn timeline was created retroactively by the monk's spell activating an unrealized possibility; that's much less complicated than creating a whole network of memories and physical evidence to support her existence by brute magical force.)
Comments from author:
First off, thanks for the review. When Dru meets Dawn, she will know that she's 'not real', but I don't think Buffy and co. would pay much attention to a loony vampire. I've got to admit that Ford seeing her true nature never occured to me, and I haven't really planned that far ahead to Adam, but it's definately something to think about. I would tend to agree that the 'temporal leverage option' is more likely, in which case people would notice Dawn to be different as they did in S5.
Thanks again and Merry Christmas;
Kiara xx
Review By [YademosEbyam] • Date [26 Dec 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Halloween" from RellimNamdoog
Review:
I really enjoyed reading this work. You tie in many good scenes and make them the believable memories of the characters. It looks like you haven't done anything with this story in a long time and that seems a shame to me. It's been a while since I've seen the second season so I'm not sure when Dawn should show up in their memories. You might want to return to the style of the first chapter where you compile scenes that should be prominent memories. I sincerely hope you find time time and interest in finishing what you've started here.
Comments from author:
It will get finished, eventually. For the episodes that only have a little that I want to use I will put several mini memories in one chapter.
Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [RellimNamdoog] • Date [13 Oct 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Halloween" from WhiteWolf
Review:
cool, maybe that explains why Dawn could kick those demons in Grave (last episode of season 6).
Comments from author:
It could do yeah- it did seem a bit odd that she could take them out JUST by watching Buffy. Thanks for the feedback! xxx
Review By [WhiteWolf] • Date [5 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Angel" from WhiteWolf
Review:
I like it sofar.
Comments from author:
Yay!!! Thanks for reviewing
Review By [WhiteWolf] • Date [4 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "When She Was Bad" from Zira
Review:
Can't wait to read 'School Hard' if it's even half as good as this last superb chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing, my only reader! School Hard should be coming soon!
Review By [Zira] • Date [1 Nov 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prophecy Girl" from Zira
Review:
I've just realised that both my last reviews are practically saying the same thing. Sorry, but the story's too great not to review! Loadsa love, Zira
Comments from author:
Any review is appriechiated!!!
Review By [Zira] • Date [11 Oct 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prophecy Girl" from Zira
Review:
Love it. Episodes from season two I think you should include: Halloween (I'd love to see what Dawnie dresses up as!), Ted (namely 'cause it centres around the Summers family), Killed By Death (also 'cause it centres on the Summers family - we're told about Buffy and Dawn's little cousin, who died in a hospital) and the Becoming duo (just because it rounds off the series and Joyce finds out about Buffy being the Slayer - how would she react to learning about Dawn knowing Buffy's seret?). But, hey, those are just my suggestions. It's your series, and I'll keep reading no matter what episodes you choose to include. I think it's really great that someone's going back and including Dawn in Buffy's life, because we never really got a sense of that on the show. Anyway, loadsa love, Zira
Comments from author:
Thanks for the great review, it really brightened up my sucky day!!
As for the episodes, i don't think there'll be any problems there! Haloween and Becoming are possibly two of the most rememberd Buffy eps ever so they really must be included. Killed by Death is the only epiosode of Buffy that I haven't seen. I know from the plot that it centers around the Summer's family so I might try to get hold of a copy.
Thanks for taking the time to review and share your thoughts;
Kiara xxx
Review By [Zira] • Date [11 Oct 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Nightmares" from Zira
Review:
Really good! I loved 'The Pack' bit that you put in - I like episodes that put Xander in the limelight! Thanks. And here's some suggestions for the second series. (BTW, I think that you asking for suggestions is a good thing, because there is no way you could possibly do all of them.) You HAVE to do 'School Hard' (because of it being the first Spike-episode, and therefore because Spike plays a major part in Dawn's later life, 'Halloween' (I'd love to see what Dawn dressed up as), and 'Ted', because that one really centres around the Summers family. I'd also like to see 'Bewitched, Bothered and Bewildered', as maybe that could be the beginning of Dawn's crush on Xander. I don't know - ultimately it's up to you! Loadsa love, Zira
Comments from author:
I'm glad you liked 'The Pack' bit. When Dawn's crush starts to develop, then Xander'll have a bigger part in the series. The episodes you mentioned have been added to my list and will definatle be included in some shape or form.
Thanks for reading and reviewing;
Kiara xxx
Review By [Zira] • Date [14 Sep 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Angel" from Zira
Review:
I'm glad Dawn knows, because now she'll always back Buffy up - well, until Joyce finds out anyway. I gather you're going to do Prophecy Girl, but could you possibly include The Pack? Thanks, loadsa love, Zira
Comments from author:
I've put 'The Pack' in as a flashback for this chapter. There wasn't much to work with in this episode, but I added a scene. If you have anyy ideas, I'd be happy to add to it.
Review By [Zira] • Date [13 Sep 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Memories That Never Were" from (Past Donor)DanKnight
Review:
Great story. It was fun to see how Buffy's earlier memories of Dawn were shaped. I wasn't thrilled having Hank hit Joyce, it kind of seemed out of character. Of course season 5-6 Hank was out of character with season 1-3 Hank. After all he went from a nice guy who keep in touch with Buffy to someone who didn't have anythign to do with them even after their mom died. I always told myself the monks re-made Hank as a deadbeat so as to keep Dawn from moving in with him and away from Buffy.

I do think you handled the scene well though.

I hope you do continue. I don't have a specific episode but I would love to see how season 1 was shaped with Dawn in it.
Comments from author:
Thanks for rewiewing. I agree with you about Hank, he did change for the worse, but it worked for the chapter to have him that way. It was a fairly hard scene to write, and I'm glad you liked it. I'm trying to update now, but it may take a while (damn computers).
I hope you like the rest of the story;
Kiara xxx
Review By [(Past Donor)DanKnight] • Date [1 Sep 04] • Not Rated
Review of story "The Memories That Never Were" from SecondSilk
Review:
Something very very strange happened to the punctuation in this chapter. I couldn't actually read it. Hopefully you'll be able to fix it soon. :-)
Comments from author:
I'm trying to fix it- I'll repost when I figure out what's gone wrong
Review By [SecondSilk] • Date [8 Aug 04] • Not Rated • Edit Comment
Review of story "The Memories That Never Were" from matthew
Review:
A good start. I'm liking the story, but something happened to the coding in chap 2. It's giving weird symbols. You might want to check that out., because it's making the story hard to read.
Comments from author:
Thanks for pointing that out- I have no idea what's happened. I'm trying to fix it and I've tried reposting, but I'll get it fixed asap.
Thanks for reviewing;
Kiara
Review By [matthew] • Date [8 Aug 04] • Not Rated • Edit Comment
Review of chapter "The Memories That Never Were" from SecondSilk
Review:
Fabulous. I've wanted to do this for so long. You've captured Dawn and Buffy's developing relationship very well. I especially like the time line, incorporating the flashbacks, that you have developed, with the time in the hosptial as well.
There are a few typos, but nothing dramatic (a few 's when it should just be s).
I look forward to their arrival in Sunnydale.
Comments from author:
I've been meaning to write it for quite a while too, but I wanted to get my last story out the way first. I'll look over the 's before I post the next chapter, and I have a beta reader that should help with that from now on. Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [SecondSilk] • Date [29 Jul 04] • Not Rated
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