how disappointing, you started off so well, and now this? McGee gets the massive jealous boyfriend/ OOC treatment? Because you need to get him out of the way for xan/abby? right?
guess this must have been one of your earlier works, most of your stuff is up to a MUCH higher standard than this.
Review By [iamnuff] • Date [13 May 11] • Not Rated
kindred? YES! i love the WOD and i like to see it crossed over with BTVS
i always wanted to see a imbued xander, (from the oWOD)
seeing him getting messages, from the "Messengers" then mock them for their vaugeness and uselessness
"IT DOES NOT BREATHE" "i fucking know its not breathing, it's a goddamn vampire, say something useful next time "INHERIT THE EARTH" "what the hell is that even supposed to mean?!?!"
Review By [iamnuff] • Date [13 May 11] • Not Rated
I have to say I am no master of military law but I have to question how in the heck can Xander be put on suspension and possibly fired over defending himself when another man pulled a gun on him? He didn't even scratch Tim and yet threatend with being fired if it happend again? Just seems a bit stupid to me considering he was the victim in the fight and only reacted after the gun was already pulled.
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [27 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Normally not a big Xander fan, but I gave it a shot because I LOVE NCIS xovers...so glad that I did. Loved the way you wrote Xander's character. Nice twist bringing in the Kindred. Can't wait to read the sequel. :)
Review By [spk] • Date [20 Jun 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
I gave up halfway through this chapter (4) and I won't be reading the rest of the story.
You didn't need the Author's Note stating that you know nothing about cricket; every word you write on the subject reveals that you know even less about cricket than I know about the intestinal parasites of the extinct marine reptile Elasmosaurus (and that is absolutely nothing). So why bother having it in the story? Ducky's Scottish; he's not going to have any interest in cricket whatsoever. You just made yourself look like an idiot.
And you had Ducky refer to 'merry old England'. Epic Fail.
It was, however, the way you pointlessly dragged Vampire: the Masquerade into the story that killed off what little vestiges of interest I still had in the fic.
Your grammar, punctuation, and spelling is quite good and that's the only reason you're getting a '2' instead of a '1'. Utterly, utterly, dire.
I love this fic. I have to admit that I know nothing about the Kindered but from what I just read I like it this is an exteremly interesting and complex type of vampire.
Review By [spring] • Date [17 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Intriguing :) I hope you'll get back to that sequel some day since I try to avoid reading works in process... especially ones that haven't been updated in years :)
Review By [Ansku] • Date [22 Sep 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
ohhh... intersting and i so had to read the whole thin in one go..... very addictive. thanksfor posting it! i like the ending you put in, i wouldnt have gone for tim dieing or her saying no outright, it played best the way you wrote it! cant wait toread the sequal.
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