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Review of chapter "Chaos and Disorder" from (Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Review:
I really enjoyed that. Like you, I loved Lennie Briscoe, and I'm sorry that we lost Jerry Orbach. He was a mensch. Thank you for giving this the whole L&O treatment... I've never seen that done before.

Blue
Comments from author:
Once you assume that vampires exist in the NYC of L&O, and that the same actress who cannot act can play two cousins, everything falls into place. Of course McCoy would treat the situation as a legal problem.

If you're going to use a show, live in it.
Review By [(Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [12 Aug 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chaos and Disorder" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Review:
Awesome!

A Slayer killing a vampire falls under Common Law? Huh, is that what covers citizen arrests?

Man, I'm surprised I never saw this before. You can practically hear the L&O sound effects.

Excellent dry language/humor.

I'm happy that they made her plea bargain because the jury would accept Angel as a vampire at face value, but intangible demons and souls couldn't be presented in court ... Now, a good example of a vampire who's gone human-safe, based on her own will rather than a soul or a chip, is Angel Season 5's Harmony. A steady paycheck is a great motivator :)

Nice thought expanding the Bronze into a metal chain. Good illustration of the progress of the vampire killings. Great street addresses, adding up to a believable city.


Huh. Is there a reason you used evenly spaced line breaks? Might need to be reformatted. Only error I spotted was an odd space in 'pizz eria' :)
Comments from author:
1. If I had to guess, there might be Common Law about monster-slaying. I'd have to reread "Extraordinary Popular Delusions and the Madness of Crowds" for such stories. Some of the Norse sagas—Njal's Saga, for example—have strong legal components. The more important consideration for Arthur Branch and Jack McCoy would be that their prosecuting a Slayer for the killing of a vampire would be much harder to arrange than the prosecution they just went through. Just imagine what the New York Post would do with the story; Arthur would lose his next election. Now, the Judge might issue a contempt citation, but even judges aren't immune to public furor. Consider the fictional court case the arraignment judge mentioned, In Re Kringle. You must have seen "Miracle on 42nd Street." Oh, now I remember Arthur's line; it was just an acknowledgment that humans and vampires are always at war.

2. I really should have broken up the story into chapters, and included a link to the "doink-doink" sound effect at appropriate places. I think TtH formatting doesn't allow that sort of CSS aural styles. (http://blog.rickbreslin.com/extras/doink-doink.mp3)

3. I don't think I gave Lennie enough wisecracks. I just tried to obey the rules of L&O. Everybody can hold his own with an insult or a snarky comment. Somebody commented that the characters took their introduction to the supernatural suspiciously well, but then these are New Yorkers. There's only one sort of event that panics them. If I say any more, I might get death threats from some of the readers again.

4. Can you imagine this case going to a jury? I dare say that if Jack couldn't get Helene to take the plea, he might have had someone stake her despite his misgivings. Yes, they might have been able to use Harmony as an example, but Kate has no reason to know her. Yes, I did give the story a "Patty Duke" vibe—"Identical Cousins", but I tried to add as few coincidences as I could get away with.

5. The "Alloy chain" is a joke that appears in a few of my stories. Any family-friendly nightclub named after an alloy will end up vampire-infested.

6. Well, the only address that could actually exist is "666 1st Ave." Jones St. and Great Jones St. are each only one block long. Bleecker Street would have to extend into Brooklyn to have a five-digit number. I faked those address for the same reason that all TV phone numbers are in the 555 exchange. I used 666 twice for its sinister connotations. I grew up in New York, a mile from the Fountain Avenue landfill; in the summers, when the wind came from the wrong direction, Canarsie suffered from it. I think I know the city pretty well. Part of the reason L&O has lasted for 20 years is that New York is almost a character in the story. One thing I feel a little guilty about is that I named the school the Jane Jacobs Montessori School, and I only realized later that at the time I wrote the story Jane Jacobs was still alive. It's a good name for a school, but you shouldn't name schools or airports or other places after the living.

7. Yes, I screwed up the formatting. I took my original USENET post and copied it to TtH. I should have done a better job at posting. And my home site's HTML version uses CSS1 tricks for formatting; these wouldn't transfer. <hr class="scenechange" /> wouldn't work here. I could almost hope there would be a standard fanfic.css file available at this site. I think I'd better reformat these. I just do C-u 9999 C-x f in Emacs...
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [4 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chaos and Disorder" from Aiden
Review:
You.Are.A.Genius.
Review By [Aiden] • Date [3 Apr 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chaos and Disorder" from justaguy
Review:
Interesting. I like it. The L&O characters may have been a little too nonchalant about learning the supernatural is real. Then again nonchalant pretty much defines the L&O characters.
Comments from author:
New York is the greatest city in the world, but it is also hostile enough to its citizens that vampires would just be part of the background noise. For a further take on that, look up the story "Lack of Vision" on my home site or here. I would warn you that the reviewers on here, on ff.net, and from the "Badfic Terror Squad" savaged that story.

-- Eric
Review By [justaguy] • Date [26 Aug 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chaos and Disorder" from CPTSkip
Review:
Great crossover story. I thought you did a wonderful job with all the L&O characters. You also caught the pacing of the show perfectly. All in all, this would have been a very good L&O episode if they could have gotten Joss to OK letting a Slayer show up to save the day at the end. Lol!
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [26 Aug 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chaos and Disorder" from war
Review:
good story.
Review By [war] • Date [26 Aug 04] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chaos and Disorder" from renelf
Review:
What a great story! Your simply elegant writing style suits the Law & Order canon perfectly. Having Kate and Serena as cousins was masterful as was your dramatisation of the dilemmas faced by an ADA attempting to prosecute a vampire. Having the NY Slayer stake Helene at the end was a little twist that led to quite a neat ending.
Comments from author:
Thanks. I'm still in mourning this week. Farewell, Lennie.
Review By [renelf] • Date [26 Aug 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chaos and Disorder" from TroyGuffey
Review:
Pretty good, and passably close to L&O
Review By [TroyGuffey] • Date [25 Aug 04] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chaos and Disorder" from TimeTwist
Review:
Good, story. The defense of the vampire was hillarious. I still am waiting to see an SVU story just for Munch.
Review By [TimeTwist] • Date [25 Aug 04] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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