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Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from Vld
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Actually, that would make sense, somehow. I mean, I kept wondering who was the fourth mind, I mean there's Dawn, then Kirika, then Noir (well, a really cold Kirika allright) and I figured the last one was the Key, but it didn't make sense to me. I mean, the Key isn't evil. Even if it's not good? Now, since Dawn was made from Buffy, her being a Potential makes sense (and yes, I do believe Dawn is a Potential, I believed it since Buffy died the second time) and well... we all know HOW the Slayer was created!
Comments from author:
Yes, the idea of Dawn being a Slayer (or even a potential) makes sense, but that isn't what the fourth personality is. I think the Slayer essence wouldn't really become a separate identity anymore than the Key would, so if she'll ever become a Slayer it wouldn't be shown like that. The fourth personality is a rather nasty side-effect of having her mind messed with during Halloween. No matter how sweet, innocent, and nice Kirika looks in the series she has still been trained all her life to become an assassin. That kind of thing can't be healthy and when somebody like that (who herself is suffering from a second personality, or at least from a mental state where she leaves all those 'silly' moral concerns behind) is suddenly inserted into the body of a very young girl (Dawn hadn't been created until mere months before Halloween as shown in From a Different Point of View), and then discovers not only that she isn't real but that it's all because of magic.
Well, that kind of thing can pretty much mess somebody up.
Review By [Vld] • Date [28 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from Vld
Review:
Well, I just started reading this story, and i actually need to correct what I said for the previous one, since there apparently were no obliviate. Now, I think you asked what we would like to read... well, what if one of her dreams took her to... well, Noir? I mean, just after she killed Altena. I didn't like the end of the show because I believe both she and Mireille die there... at least that's what the gunshots tell me... so what if, thanks to Dawn's memories of the show, she managed to save both herself and Mireille?
Comments from author:
First, I disagree about Mireille and Kirika dying at the end of the series. There are two reasons for that. One, the guns that are fired are their own. At least, that's what I think and after I'd read somebody mention that I actually listened for it myself and I do think that they sounded like Mireille's and Kirika's weapons. Aside from that (admittedly flimsy) idea there is a more important reason: they were at the Manor. The only people around were members of Soldats and the one place in the whole world where Mireille and Kirika were safe from Soldats was at the Manor. I can't imagine that those old men would either command anybody to kill them or even try to kill them themselves.
Once they got out of the valley it might be different, but I think that to them Althena and her Grand Retour was the real danger. And with Althena dead they would (mistakenly?) believe that she failed in achieving that.

Now, as for going to the world of Noir. It's the one world that crops up most often in requests, and it's the one I've always rejected. On the one hand it is a very good idea, on the other hand I'm pretty sure I couldn't make it work believable. When Dawn goes to one of those other worlds she has a history similar to the way she got one in the show, but with as a mayor difference her Halloween costume. It's because of that costume that she can do what she can in the dreams (which usually take place several years later so that she already has better control over her abilites). Which means she couldn't become possessed by Kirika as there would be no Kirika costume (because of her being real). And Dawn always remains herself, thereby excluding the possibility of replacing Kirika.
So, while it remains an interesting idea it's not going to work. Thanks for the suggestion though.
Review By [Vld] • Date [28 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from kiwifruit
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I love you your fic. I was hooked at Black Sunrise. Dawnie's crush on Xander is just cute. Dave seems a little weird but she does need to show who is at the top of the food chain. Are you going to bring Milosh into any of your fic's? He does seem to be the prime example of Kirika's Black Hands.

Keep up the writing. Your good at it:)
Comments from author:
Thank you for your comments and compliments. Right now I'm not sure exactly what memories I'll have her think about, but as I keep coming up with ideas it's more than likely that someday Milosh will be mentioned. Who knows, maybe something like that might happen...
Review By [kiwifruit] • Date [27 Oct 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from CPTSkip
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Oh good lord! You almost gave me a heart attack when you wrote the story was over. You are still doing an excellent job with the Scoobies' personalities and I really like your original characters. It is so cool to read about Dawn's 'civilian' friends. This story had to have had one of the most heart stopping action sequences I have ever read. I could not stop reading until Dawn finally rescued Duffus Guy. I thought the first story in your series was good, but each book has just gotten better and better. Enough praise for now, get back to writing. Please? Lol!
Comments from author:
Thank you. I'm glad it came over well. But I suppose I'd better get back to writing. :-)
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [5 Oct 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from CPTSkip
Review:
Nicely done. I can't wait for the next update to see how Dawn survives. I bet John Woo would love this story. Lol!
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [2 Oct 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from malaskor
Review:
Great new story from you.
I like how you have Xander start with reclaiming his posession's memory by training (or at least planning to do so) what he knew that night.

Also very nice that scene at the end. I'm looking forward to seeing how this affects the future plot.

Keep up the great work and thanks for sharing
Comments from author:
Thank you, it's good to hear that it came over as it should.
Review By [malaskor] • Date [28 Sep 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from CPTSkip
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Oh happy day! Another update to your wonderful story. I am really liking Jane and Sara and the "normal" mom. And I like the way you show Xander adjusting to his soldier memories. It is totally different to know how to do something in your head and something else for your body to know how to actually do it. It was also nice to see at least one of Xander's relatives be something other than a total waste of space. All in all, I can't wait until Thursday and your next update.
Comments from author:
Thanks for once again reviewing, your comments always manage to boost my ego :-)
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [28 Sep 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from HolyKnight
Review:
another great fic......

this makes me happy.....
Comments from author:
Another review...

that makes me happy :-) Thanks.
Review By [HolyKnight] • Date [26 Sep 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from CPTSkip
Review:
Great update! I love the way you show us the fractured Dawnie. I laughed several times at the way her various personalities look at the same situation. I also laughed at the Dawn/Xander wedding. And she even experienced the wedding night. Oh, my! Lol! I can't wait for the next update. Thank you for telling us your story.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, I'm glad you still like it.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [26 Sep 04] • Not Rated
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