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Review of chapter "The Gauntlet" from Lolaisawesome
Review:
I think this story has a good premise and is well written. However there are things I don't like. Xander's parents were horrible this is an accepted fact, but teenagers whine and complain about their parents, its what they do. I admit if Xander was real he might have felt this way but just because he had bad parents and a not normal childhood doesn't mean he gets to criticize someone who didn't.
The way this is headed seems to have everybody horribly out of character and i don't think I can continue to read it.
Sorry.
Review By [Lolaisawesome] • Date [24 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Author's Notes" from (Current Donor)Listener
Review:
While I definitely enjoyed this story, I feel like you left a few things on the table that could've been better explored. For example, the battle between the Watchers/Slayers/Aurors and the Initiative -- I really felt like I missed something by you not showing it. Also, while the spanking scene was fun to read, it didn't read organically -- I don't know if I buy your mature (behavior-wise) Rita doing that, even to someone she slept with.

That aside, I really like your exploration of the Buffy/Ron relationship (even if the whole "how about a date" bit felt slightly forced) and I think you highlighted a lot of salient points in your Xander and Rita POV scenes. I also liked Rita as a professional -- seen through her eyes, we can almost forgive her behavior in GoF.

I'd like to read more in this world, if it exists.
Review By [(Current Donor)Listener] • Date [12 Sep 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Author's Notes" from Obsidian
Review:
Ok number of things.
The story was interesting to be sure. But didn't really lead anywhere or finish out any little sub-plot or a major plot. Sorta just rambled. Still Interesting tho.
And that ending? umm WTF , did NOT see that coming. I mean HUH? that would make a good story all in itself. And the Oz Being an alien angle.... umm yeah another good story.

But overall an interesting read.
Thanks.
Review By [Obsidian] • Date [15 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from (Current Donor)DeacBlue
Review:
Gotta say that at this point, the story sucks. The biggest single problem is that you have Giles talking all over the map. First, you have him treating her like he did in early Season 1, and it's somewhere between Season 4 and Season 5, depending upon what information you give. Another thing is that you give a lot of conflicting information on just when this is happening. It's ok to move things around, but give a reason for them. You have Buffy supposedly interested in Ron, but not only is the only source of this Giles, you don't give us the basis for why he feels that they are attracted. You have Buffy treating Ron like an authority figure, when he clearly isn't, at least to her. You have Giles treating Ron like an authority figure, when the Slayer is supposedly the senior service at the Hellmouth. You have Ron throw out a tidbit about being a double agent, and don't tell us who either of the parties were. I'll overlook the fact that you extrapolated from HP:PoA, basing the HP part on that and extrapolating forward. You put Ron into a situation where he does not have his wand(btw, which I believe is an incorrect assumption of how they would deal with flight in a HP universe, but it's your universe), he's among people that have never seen his kind of magic before, and none of the Scoobies call him on it at all. You have Buffy being far more "Mother, may I?" than she has ever been, especially since, unless you're basing this in S5, he isn't her Watcher, and she would put up a fight in any case against _anything_ handed down by the Council. You have Anya being far too devious for this time period. I'll give you the time mis-match between the HP and BTVS worlds, but why isn't Harry pissed off with Ron for being a double agent, as he almost certainly had to know of Ron's action when the war was run?

The actual mechanics of the story wan't too bad, but the numerous unexplained errors in 'verse fact and voice made this unreadable, and thus I stopped at chapter 3.
Review By [(Current Donor)DeacBlue] • Date [8 Oct 08] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Author's Notes" from Dragonelf
Review:
Great story. I really hope you get inspired to write a sequel to this story.

::Gives the plot bunny a carrot omelette::

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Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [3 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Author's Notes" from (Past Donor)James
Review:
Great story, but wayyyyy toooo short.

James
Review By [(Past Donor)James] • Date [8 Apr 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Author's Notes" from Dragonelf
Review:
This story was pretty good even though it was way too short.
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [16 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Author's Notes" from purrfus
Review:
Great job with Buffy / Ron and Riley / Rita. The story was a little choppy in parts but a lot of fun to read.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [30 Nov 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Author's Notes" from (Past Donor)AmarinRose
Review:
This was a superb story. You kept me guessing right until the very end about some of it -- I almost thought that the spell would bring Voldemort back! And the Hitchiker's Guide crossover was truly inspired, as was Xander becoming Santa Claus.
Review By [(Past Donor)AmarinRose] • Date [13 May 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Author's Notes" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Review:
*coughs* No author note chapters. Zip. Zilch. Nada.
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [29 Nov 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from cwolf
Review:
*blinks* good introduction to Christmas... and love the random crossover with the Hitchhiker's Guide. Funny thing is... it makes sense with Oz
Review By [cwolf] • Date [29 Nov 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from dulcinea
Review:
Wow, you've packed quite a lot into just seven chapters! I'm really amused by the Willow/Tara spell storyline, and I'm curious to see how Anya's going to come back into things. I have to admit, the Rita/Riley thing is just a wee bit on the squicky side for me, but I just have to remember that wizards age more slowly than muggles, so she doesn't look that old.
Review By [dulcinea] • Date [12 Nov 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from JasonBarnett
Review:
And also teacher/student, watcher/slayer. He just seems a bit bossier than he would be at this point in their relationship and she seems to be taking it better than she would. Canonwise, though it's apparent it's very different than canon, this would be after the point Buffy got him reinstated as her watcher and told him what she wanted(to learn more about what it meant to be a Slayer)
Review By [JasonBarnett] • Date [22 Oct 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from JasonBarnett
Review:
I didn't mean the slash as a pairing. I meant their relationship as the way they're interacting with each other.
Comments from author:
Oh, you mean their father-daughter relationship. Okay. Gotcha.

Well, I imagine it's sinking in as "real" for Giles that shortly he will be not only a husband, but a father. He doesn't exactly consider himself prime husband and father material -- given the whole chaos mage history, the Watcher deal -- so he's rather ... nervous about the whole thing. He's always felt fatherly toward Buffy, but soon it's going to be official. He's going to be officially responsible for her welfare, above and beyond the Slayer stuff.

Of course, same thing sorta, only reversed for Buffy. Giles is going to be her Dad? And it's more than just disturbing bad candy memories.

So there hasn't really been much father-daughter stuff. I admit that.

Of course, the wedding hasn't happened yet either. :)

(Oh God, no, is that a possible sequel bunny? Scat, you!)
Review By [JasonBarnett] • Date [18 Oct 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Review:
*winces* You do realize that Rita is pushing 50 by your timeline (or possibly over, have you given a concrete age for Ron?) and Riley is in his 20s?
Comments from author:
Yuppers, I am totally aware of that. What, Riley can't date an older woman but it's perfectly okay for Buffy to date an older man ... er, vamp? How completely sexist.



Besides, that's part of the fun. No, seriously. This story is a Challenge Response for a couple of very old TtH challenges that aren't listed on TtH any longer. The Rita/Riley pairing was required. I plan on putting the challenges at the end of the story in the Author's Notes so that readers can determine for themselves whether or not I've fully completed them.

I think so, personally. :)

No, I haven't given a concrete age for Ron but I'm placing him roughly at early 20s. 22, maybe. I haven't thought that far ahead yet.
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [17 Oct 04] • Not Rated
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