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Review of chapter "Illusions cleared" from divaslayer
Review:
Awesome story so far, I loved it. I can't wait to read more. Please, please, please, please, please update soon. Please?

Dani
Review By [divaslayer] • Date [4 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Illusions cleared" from Misha
Review:
I like it so far. One problem I found was Buffy said "And your not Spike." I get what you were trying to say, that Spike was whatever he was saying the Slayer was. It came out that Buffy was saying he was an imposter. You may want to fix that. I forgot what chapter it was though. Sorry.
Review By [Misha] • Date [1 Aug 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Illusions cleared" from Darklight
Review:
yes new parts, don't get Faith back on friendly terms with Buffy and the rest of the scoobs.

Now Faith really has it, wipe out half, yikes, come on Wilkins make have made preperations for this situation to keep his girl save.

Keep the chapters coming, get moe out soon.
Review By [Darklight] • Date [22 Jul 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Front seat driver" from Darklight
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Any new parts coming?
Review By [Darklight] • Date [9 Jun 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Front seat driver" from Darklight
Review:
Fast new chapters out.

Yeah Faith knows what's going on, but damn Faith is chummy/civil with Buffy, would have thought Faith would still be pissed at her for killing the Mayor.

Keep the chapters coming, routing for Wilkins to have given Faith enough to get out of it in one piece and having Dumbie and Voldie after her and neither of them has good intentions toward her.
Review By [Darklight] • Date [17 Apr 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Where do we go from here?" from Darklight
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So Faith got the lowdown on what's going on and why Voldi and Dumbie and the rest are after her.
Review By [Darklight] • Date [17 Apr 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chances and mistakes" from wrightie
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Great, but it jumps a bit, feels like it's missing chapters
Review By [wrightie] • Date [17 Apr 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chances and mistakes" from Darklight
Review:
Oh yeah new part and a cool trick Faiths blade can do, can't wait to see what the change of collors mean and what it else can do.

Catch me if you can, he he he, Faith is going to have some fun with Dumby, scoobs and Voldie when they try to get to her before the other and grab her.

Damn lindsey is death or I hope being tortuered, having Lindsey gunning for Voldie and his lackeys could be fun.

Looking and waiting to see what the big interest is in Faith by both sides, Dumby is in the proces to loose all his goodwill he had with Buffy by acting all secretly.

Keep the chapters coming.
Review By [Darklight] • Date [7 Apr 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "damage and disasters" from Darklight
Review:
Great going a new chapter.

That one I didn't see coming, Faith killed Madame Pomfrey, break bones yes, gravely injuries yes but killing her? Wow big twist.

Second chance, trusting Dumby who called Faith a lost cause, oh yeah Faith is that dumb to fall for that trick, Dumby has to have some knowledge about Faith why he wants to keep her out of Voldies grasps.

Why is Spike still around, didn't think he was chiped already or having fluffy feelings toward Buffy.

Faith hearing voices, talking Faiths, it's like the first evil is playing with Faith. And Faiths description of her appearance pale skeletal face, who does that remind you off, yeah Voldie. Uh hu, hope Faith isn't going to end up as Voldies daughter.

What did Voldie do at W&H? dealing with muggles, poor Voldie how low has he had to sink, using muggles.

Wilkins, real has to have to done something to help his Faith and his gift her knife to hold some wicked powers, and he better get the help quick to Faith, she's breaking down mentally (a lot faster than the last time, then again Faith didn't possess Buffy's bod) and Dumby and Voldie heading towards her wanting to get their respective hands on Faith. Faith getting caught between the two sides.

Keep the chapters coming
Review By [Darklight] • Date [22 Mar 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Misgivings" from Darklight
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Damn great ending and yeah Faith's blade is back in her hands, can't wait to see if or what kind it got magical properties/abilities.

Can't wait to see how the Mayor is going to keep hie promise ad how he did appear in front of Faith and left Faith the gift behind. But why did he disappear so fast again, couldn't he stayed longer and explain some more.

For now it looks like Voldie isn't the one the Mayor got to help Faith, neither Dumbie calling Faith a lost cause.

Did Dumbie sound a little upset/worried/emotional, when he saw the chaos in the hospital wing and Faith missing. Like what ever he got planned just went south and was up for grabs. Calling Faith a lost cause, can't wait to see Faith first run in with Dumbie and how he's going to talk himself out of it

Routing for the middle voice to win and Faith ignore number one and three, no to both Buffy/Dumbie and Voldie.

So Faith going to get Death Eaters and Ministry Goons after her? Hey i forgot the Order
Review By [Darklight] • Date [27 Feb 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Waking up" from Darklight
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Oh yeah Faith got away and isn't in a real friendly mood toward Buffy Scoobs and Dumby.

GEt Faith a better present from the Mayor, a key to a vault and some weapons.

keep teh chapters coming
Review By [Darklight] • Date [10 Feb 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Bear!!!!!!!" from Darklight
Review:
keep the chaters coming and Faith out of the hands of Dumby, Voldi and the scoobs and Council
Review By [Darklight] • Date [5 Dec 04] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hogwarts" from (Moderator)acs
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I haven't quite decided if you are writing a parody of all of those "Buffy and/or Willow teach at Hogwarts with absolutely no experience/knowledge or reason" fics or just a humorous take on the idea. There feel like there are parts missing... the story jumps forward quickly. I think you have a definite hook with Faith involved if you center the parody around her and have her be the voice of reason in all of the madness...

Or is this all a dream Faith is having while in her coma?
Review By [(Moderator)acs] • Date [4 Dec 04] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Rain check" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Again, making good with the characterization, and your Faith dream sequences have been quite good.
I'm a little unsure about Willow teaching a potions class at a Wizarding school, despite the lack of wand-waving involved,
I'm not sure she's had acess to many of the magical herbs and ingredients or books about them. I'm sure she'll enjoy the lesson plans and the library, though.
I'm also a little unsure if this is primarily meant to be a humor story or an action-adventure-drama-with-humor story, as by not dramatizing some of the reasons or reasoning going on (such as what could Sirius have said to win Willow over so quickly), there's less realism. Think about adding 5-senses details or time spent in a character's head observing or reasoning. Again following through on the be "be constructive" request.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [9 Nov 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Faint" from VillageOrchid
Review:
The plot structure and the characterization is there, but the transitions and descriptions of locations are a little bit rushed. I can see Buffy quickly changing her mind about the owl upon seeing the ribbon, but is it is a bit quick to go from her bedroom to running down the street. Also it is unclear again exactly who between Sirius and Lupin are planning on using the potion, and why they'd want to both look or one look like Moody. Perhaps you know, but the reader needs a bit more information. Hope you found this constructive, as you requested. 6.5 out of 10 for effectiveness and enjoyability.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [9 Nov 04] • Not Rated
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