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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DarkFaerieYumi
Review:
This is very cool. I love it. Too bad no more updates.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [3 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DofEire
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Nine out of ten, only because your encoding in the second chapter is all mucked up. :) Otherwise, it's an entertaining and definitely different story. It's been four years since your last update; do you intend to finish at any point?
Review By [DofEire] • Date [9 Jan 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from cursedcassandra
Review:
I'm enjoying!

Still got funky symbols in Chapter 2, though Chapter 1 is okay. Not sure how you can fix it, beyond maybe using a different word processor, or even posting from a different computer.

Can't wait for an update :)
Review By [cursedcassandra] • Date [23 Mar 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blessed Be the Burdens We Bear" from Kneazles
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Good job so far
Review By [Kneazles] • Date [14 Dec 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Kneazles
Review:
This is a very good story, I can't wait to see it updated. It was slightly hard to read because of the puncuation errors but it was still good.
Review By [Kneazles] • Date [12 Dec 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from emmanuelle
Review:
Hi, I like what you're doing with this story, sounds original; makes for a lot of questions : what happenned between Harry and Hermione, Why Malfoy, what does Luna know and see, who's the new teacher, how did Xander and the Scoobies find Hermione, why was she not endangered by the Bringers, or was she ? etc, ....
Hope to read more soon,
Just a problem with some words : i, ยง and X appear out of nowhere and make reading this second chapter very difficult.
Comments from author:
You've brought up some good questions, most that will be answered, others that I had not even made real issues or have not even considered... As for problems with reading the chapter-I fixed what I could and I can read it no problem on my end so I have no clue why others are having such a hard time. But if anyone's interested I can e-mail the original word document to you. Just send me a line at glyns_soliloquy@yahoo.ca
Review By [emmanuelle] • Date [5 Dec 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from fastpilot
Review:
So far I'm impressed. But please fix the punctuation problem found in the upload of the 2nd chapter, it's hard to read. I don't know how these thngs happen with regularity, I think there must be a bug in the tth software.

Thank you for your writing, fastpilot
Comments from author:
Hmm, thought I fixed most of the more wonky problems. Oh well, as long as it's not too annoying I suppose. Thanks for writing.
Review By [fastpilot] • Date [5 Dec 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from shimaspawn
Review:
That was a very well done acid trip. While I've seen the premis before you seem to have the capability to pull it off without making it stale of mary-sueish. The only thing I would look at is the punctuation in chapter 1. It's littered with junk symbols. I look forward to the next installment.
Comments from author:
Funny thing you should mention acid...according to my friend, it's a real ride reading my stuff while high--shrugs-- I don't understand it.
Review By [shimaspawn] • Date [4 Dec 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from VillageOrchid
Review:
The drama is good and plot is interesting. Your punctuation marks did indeed come out a little funny. In some places where many people were talking with out any narration, I felt a little description of body language or expresion might have allowed you to show who said what and kept the pace up. Your O.C. is interesting, but a bit on the over-powerful side. I think you might be hiding too much from the reader, because your style with O.C. was nicely done. Perhaps an inbetween chapter of Hermione's slayer training and how Draco has become some kind of junior watcher. Or perhaps you can put that into memory or flash-back form in upcoming chapters?
Comments from author:
I fixed it! I fixed it! No more funky punctuation. I agree with that I should have put more description in, but I wanted to focus more on the dialogue, and the chapter would have dragged too much. You're right, I am hiding things. I just don't like to give away too much too soon. Don't worry, everyone will find out what happened this summer... eventually. Thanks, feed back much appreciated.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [4 Dec 04] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blessed Be the Burdens We Bear" from Thedruid
Review:
That was actually a well written dream dequence. The Dreamscape of the Buffy Universe is a hard one to duplicate, on TV or in writeing. I hope this was only the beginning though.
Comments from author:
Only the beginning is right...
Thanks
Review By [Thedruid] • Date [4 Dec 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blessed Be the Burdens We Bear" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Pretty good start. Seemed like a plausible near-death-slayer-dream for Hermione to have. Looking forward to seeing how you plan to have this unfold.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [26 Oct 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Blessed Be the Burdens We Bear" from dulcinea
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That was your first writing? Are you sure? I'm quite impressed. You did an excellent job of capturing the style of Buffy's slayer dreams while staying true to Hermione's character and reactions. The potions class scene was great. I look forward to seeing more of your work. :)
Review By [dulcinea] • Date [24 Oct 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Blessed Be the Burdens We Bear" from NaughtyInnuendo
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Wow! Just wow! Brilliant first chapter and I love the dream sequence. ~Though I was almost hoping to see the Cheese Man make a cameo~ :P But I will definitely be looking out for more chapters of this story. Keep writing!
Comments from author:
Oh, believe you me, the Cheese Man was about to make an appearance, but I beat him into submission. He'd try and steal the show...And thank you.
Review By [NaughtyInnuendo] • Date [24 Oct 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Blessed Be the Burdens We Bear" from EvilAuthor
Review:
Cool. This is one of the best "Slayer becomes a Slayer because of Chosen" dreams I've ever read.
Comments from author:
Yay! My first review. Thanks. Are there many "Slayer becomes a Slayer because of Chosen" dreams? (I only read btvs fanfics when they're hp crossover *shame*)
Review By [EvilAuthor] • Date [24 Oct 04] • Not Rated
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