I enjoyed the story I like the ship choice I really do wonder about the age of the girls Doesn't Mihoshi age slowly or something? Chapter 4, age 251; curious
Just a tad disapointed with the ending...all kinda abrupt...Wish there was more. Sequel please?
Comments from author:
Yeah, I know, but the bunny had keeled over before the entire chapter started, so I was flying blind on this one. Sorry. As for the sequel, none is planned at this point, but I put nothing past my muse that, should there ever be a dimensional-travelerXander story, that he'd show in this world.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [20 Aug 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Actually expected you to drag the ending out a bit more with dramatic thunder, a stare down and all the others in the background looking anxious :) but it's all good!
Just finished taking a look at the story. I wholeheartedly agree with the Xander pairing as it is turning out. Then again I've always been partial to stories where the hero eventually saves the day and sweeps the girl off of her feet at the end. Might also explain why I can't understand the appeal of slash fics. Update frequently.
Review By [OrneryFife] • Date [22 Mar 06] • Not Rated
My opinion of this story can be summed up in just a couple of words: too much.
I will not say it's impossible for Xander to do all the things he supposedly does in a week (in this story). There is a flipside that really isn't shone. From what we know of Xander in the TV show, here is how I would imagine him after about a couple of weeks of the regimen the author prescribes: with a beer belly and a drink in one hand, and absolutely nothing getting done for the 12 hours he isn't obligated to be at the work place.
Responsibility breeds stress, no way around it. The more work you have, the more it takes to unwind. That much work is emotionally draining. Xander's way of "unwinding" is through more work, and doing things that actually cause more stress. In other words, unless he daily takes more pills than I can count, the Xander portrayed in this story isn't human. It's impossible to identify with a character that has crazy-high limits like that. I know he's competing with a Slayer and Vampires, but even those critters are somewhat bound by human emotions.
Xander in this story reads more like a robot with a personality chip than a human being, and that certainly isn't a good thing.
Someone said to me this morning that Documentaries showing human weakness in soldiers makes the respective country's military look weak. My answer was the same thing I'll tell this author: emotions and the need to recover from stress ... all of us have limitations. Failing to acknowledge them is weak. Once you admit that there are things you cannot do, you will find yourself stronger for it.
This lesson can be seen when Xander finally comes into his own in the later seasons. He discovers his own limitations, and as much as it kills him to do it ... well, I'm sure you've seen the episodes.
In a nutshell, what this story lacks is a human Xander Harris.
Review By [KingHenrytheV] • Date [5 Mar 06] • Rating [3 out of 10]
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