Review of chapter "Masks" from Kiara
Could do with some background info. Why are all these people at Hogwarts? Why is Draco good? Why is Harry so OOC? There are lots of unanswered questions.
Also it seems a little rushed- a lot of 'key' events happened in the first chapter and it might have been better to spread them out and give more information on the whats, whys and whens.
It looks like this is abandoned, but if you ever do revisit then you might want to look at the punctuation, spelling and formatting.
Review By [Kiara
] • Date [4 Jul 08] • Not Rated