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Review of chapter "Happily Ever After" from deathgeonous
Review:
Hmm, I think I remember reading this a long while ago, but I never finished this? Ah well, now I have. Nice fic, so, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [8 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Happily Ever After" from JJDudeman
Review:
Brilliant idea, decently executed. Wasn't crazy about the Sirius kiss thing, but that might just be me. Wouldn't have minded if this had been twice as long! On the other hand, that might have helped it avoid feeling bloated - didn't feel like it was going on needlessly.
Fascinating concept, again. Glad to have read it.
Review By [JJDudeman] • Date [5 Jul 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Happily Ever After" from deathgeonous
Review:
This was a very nice fic. Thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Comments from author:
Thanks x
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [30 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Happily Ever After" from maxthehobbit
Review:
Critique - You should read over your story before you post it, tons of typos, also you used defiantly instead of definitely all the time- very different definitions.

Those are just what I call mechanic errors, your use of English, not your writing ability

As for your writing ability - it shines - very easy reading that flows smoothly. You are also very creative, great story not a hack job, never read anything like it, very original. I've never read the HP books or seen the movies. I've just read tons of HP fan fiction and your characterizations are spot on. Your characterization of Dawn was wonderful, not a snotty brat, but a mature woman with hints of mischievousness. I also loved your little puns here and there to lighten the story.

Congratulations on a job well done and thanks for sharing.

Maybe you should change the WIP on the sequel to "dead" it has been four years since you've up dated it, that or finish it!
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [23 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "One Sister Coming Right Up!" from (Past Donor)BuffyFan
Review:
What happened to the picture at the start of this chapter.

All I see is now is the word "Illustration"
Comments from author:
Sorry - broken link fixed x
Review By [(Past Donor)BuffyFan] • Date [16 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Happily Ever After" from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
Intriguing idea here, to say the least.

The concept of the Order of Dagon using a corpse to provide a ‘template’ for the Key’s appearance might be a bit morbid, but it’s definitely effective- although I would have preferred it if you’d drawn out Dawn’s discovery of her true identity-, although your twist with the activity among the Death Eaters at this stage made an interesting additional complication, even if it might have been better to draw it out more (For future reference, the Shanshu Prophecy states that the vampire with a soul will ‘Shanshu’ as a reward, which makes Voldemort’s ‘Shanshu’ here rather impractical; what had he actually DONE to merit any kind of award from anyone?).

That said, the central CONCEPT is interesting; I just thought the plot as a whole was too rushed to really develop the ideas you were exploring.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review and comments - one day I'd like to go back and revisit this and when I do I will be sure to bear your thoughts in mind.

Regarding the Shanshu, maybe he was rewarded for doing great work for evil? According to Wikipedia - The Shanshu Prophecy reveals that a vampire with a soul will play a major role in the Apocalypse (for good or for evil) and receive a reward ("shanshu") for his efforts. Way back when I was researching, that's how I understood it anyway. If that's wrong, as it's been a long time since I saw the relevant episodes, oops, sorry, but I tried. We'll have to call it AU.
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [24 Apr 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Happily Ever After" from Ansku
Review:
Cute :)
Review By [Ansku] • Date [7 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Happily Ever After" from Gideon
Review:
Cool story. I like the idea of their being a vessel for the key and you wrote it well. I bet Buffy never thought she would be an Aunt of an 11 year old Boy so soon!
Comments from author:
Thank you - and no, I would say she wouldn't!
Review By [Gideon] • Date [1 Mar 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Happily Ever After" from Obsidian
Review:
great story. I never realized that the monks would have to use a body for dawn. Makes sense now that I think about it.
Thanks.
Review By [Obsidian] • Date [30 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Happily Ever After" from Ansku
Review:
Good fic :)
Comments from author:
Thanks :)
Review By [Ansku] • Date [19 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Happily Ever After" from SpacedCadet
Review:
A fun story that I thoroughly enjoyed...and best of all there's more!

Well done!
Comments from author:
Thanks! Kx
Review By [SpacedCadet] • Date [5 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Happily Ever After" from spring
Review:
I love this fic I think that it is wonderful and I am looking forward to reading the other parts of this wonderful series.
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [spring] • Date [5 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Happily Ever After" from anabellatrix
Review:
Thankyou for a great story I'm only critical about one thing-that it is finished! It was a good story full of action and lots of characters. I've always liked stories better when a few of the characters from the BTVS or AtS world were in it not just one fish out of water character, so this story was already on to a winner with me. As each chapter progressed Dawn became more mature and well-rounded - I mean lets face it do we really need any more "I'm a selfish teenager and I'll rant if I want to" Dawnfics? No siree! - and you wrote Harry very well too. Overall I enjoyed the story and am now off to start your sequel so thanks for writing.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading and for all the positive feedback. I'm glad you liked
Kiara xx
Review By [anabellatrix] • Date [19 Sep 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Vessel" from Naitch
Review:
Congratulations, you made me like Andrew. A LIGHTSABER?! I couldn't stop laughing for five minutes! And don't worry- your fight scene was excellent.

Can't wait for more.
Comments from author:
Yay! What else could Andrew have except for one of those ;) Thanks for the feedback- it means a lot to hear people's opions.
Kiara xx
Review By [Naitch] • Date [15 Aug 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Here We Go Again..." from EricThorsen
Review:
Interesting, though the cliffy is, as always, EVIL! But other than that, it will be interesting to see what happens when Voldy the Vampire meets the Slayer, the Key, and The-Boy-Who-Lived. Hurry up!
Comments from author:
Evil? Moi? Surely not!
Thanks for Reading and Reviewing!
Kiara xx
Review By [EricThorsen] • Date [21 Jul 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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