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Review of chapter "Burning Hot" from deamon
Review:
Love this story you should so write a sequel
Review By [deamon] • Date [19 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Burning Hot" from purrfus
Review:
Interesting crossover.

Unfortunately I am not really familiar with the Exiles and the background supplied was kinda spotty so I don't really feel as if I got to know or care about them: the fights scenes were fun though. The scene with Xander, Spike, and Angel was well put together.

While the spelling and grammar errors weren't overwhelming they added to the whole incomplete feel of this story for me.
Comments from author:
Sorry about that. It did go through a beta, though it's on the list to go over once again apparently.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [26 Dec 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "They are from out of town." from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Review:
Couple bad chapters, but great plot twists and ending :)

Er, ya really need to reword the bit where the First appears to Xander. It's a critcical moment and really the only point where the fic is hurt by bad formatting. Among other things is: 'Xanders child Jesse'. I'm guessing you meant 'Xander's childhood buddy, Jesse'. The wrongly worded phrase implies an AU VampXander, on the first read-thru.

Love your explanation of the amulet and a great reason the Exiles could pop in to a mutant-free dimension. Outside force actively suppressing activation, but still the same multiverse with definite ties (especially at the end) :)

Any chance of a spiritual sequel with one of the later rosters of Exiles? AoA Sabertooth meeting Buffy might be cool ;)

Oh yeah, awesome taste in crossovers!

Still, even the great ideas you have laid out for us at the end are too rushed in their execution. Oh well.

Oh and Faith and Morph patrolling together? You rock :)
Comments from author:
Man, this is definitely one of the more detailed reviews that I've gotten, so I'll try to return the favor and answer all your points as completely as I can.

First, thank you for pointing out just what made one of my chapters bad. I tend to ignore the vague stuff these days because I have less time and less creativity (oh the joys of going from college to the real world). You pointed out a specific problem though and I'll try to fix it the next time my muse doesn't want to come up with new stuff.

Glad to hear that you liked how I merged the two verses. Doing this in a way that readers enjoy is one of the harder parts about crossovers, and it's always appreciated to know that someone liked the way I did it.

As I stated above my time and creativity have been reduced so I'm sorry to say that puts the chances of a sequel to slim to none. Though I admit to being tempted at having the gang meet a later incarnation of the Exiles. The alfa female potential of Buffy meeting Power Princes alone is planting plot bunnies in my overcrowded mind.

I admit that I have a problem rushing my stories, that's why I've tried to make the parts longer and have more parts in my later stories. What can I say, I develop everything so well in my mind that at times I forget just what the readers do and don't know.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [5 Nov 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Burning Hot" from Elleria
Review:
Interesting end there... I like this.
Comments from author:
Thanks I liked the ending as well
Review By [Elleria] • Date [6 Sep 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Burning Hot" from Bobboky
Review:
odd and very cool
Comments from author:
Wow, a new review after all this time, thanks! I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed this story and hope that you also enjoy my other writings.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [30 Jul 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Burning Hot" from (Past Donor)Jewel
Review:
Very cool ending.
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [(Past Donor)Jewel] • Date [22 Mar 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Night Out" from (Past Donor)Jewel
Review:
Just a hint - "corps" means a cadre, usually used in the context of a bunch of soldiers. "Corpse" means dead body.

Other than the bad spelling, its a pretty good story (not that I've got to the end yet). That said, at least you're consistent with the words that you're messing up; its not random words all over the place.
Comments from author:
Well this did go through a beta. When I have time I go back over my stories myself and change any mistakes that have been pointed out to me.
Review By [(Past Donor)Jewel] • Date [22 Mar 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Burning Hot" from biggstu
Review:
A good story Thanks
Comments from author:
Glad to hear you enjoyed it.
Review By [biggstu] • Date [10 Feb 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Night Out" from Caliadragon
Review:
I really love this fic and I am so glad to see a new chapter. I love the way that you calmed Buffy down and had her still be supported by Xander. I look forward to seeing what happens next.



Thanks
Calia
Comments from author:
Glad you liked how I handled the Buffy/Xander interaction.

As for what is happening next. Lets just say that there are dark times ahead, and leave it at that.
Review By [Caliadragon] • Date [28 Jun 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A day on the Hellmouth" from Rivana
Review:
Man, Xanny boy just can't catch a break can he... Great story, original. Love to see more.
Comments from author:
On the bright side he has yet to be smited by a god like being. Oh well the story is still young, thanks for the review.
Review By [Rivana] • Date [3 May 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A true Scooby party" from Elleria
Review:
Right...this is extremely confusing....I do hope the next parts will clarify some stuff...like what the hell that blue elf thing is....
Comments from author:
Clarity will be given. And just to give you a hint this blue elf is related to the blue elf in X2.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [18 Mar 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A true Scooby party" from Argo
Review:
It was horrible. I hope Xander will kill them for daring to hurt his girls and especially for invade in him. Well, maybe, not kill, but make them hurt. A lot! Honestly, that happened with talking, people? If someone of them can take a human form, can't he simply came to Scoobies as human man and talk to Xander about their mission?
Comments from author:
The Exiles tried talking. Re read the begining and you will see that the human looking members politly knocked on the door and asked for Xander, they simply didn't plan on Buffy being able to spot Nocturne and then atack them.

As for the possesion, Xander defently won't be happy about that.
Review By [Argo] • Date [11 Mar 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "They are from out of town." from matthew
Review:
so far so good. Interesting premise, and it looks like it could be fun. On the down side, Xander seems far too observant and analytical about his position in the scoobies (the whole thing about keeping everyone grounded), and you'll have to be careful not to make aXander into a GaryStu, as often happens with powered xander stories.

good luck
Comments from author:
I'd have to reread this but I believe that I wrote from the Exiles POV for this part and left Xander alone. As for the Gary Stu powered Xander, I've had pratice writing powered Xanders in Xander as Marvel Style so I think I can keep Xander Xander.
Review By [matthew] • Date [11 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "They are from out of town." from Caliadragon
Review:
I love your work and I look forward to seeing where this story will take Xander.

Thanks
Calia
Comments from author:
Xander is going to have an interisting experiance this time around, you can count on that.
Review By [Caliadragon] • Date [11 Jan 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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