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Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Great story!
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [30 May 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from spring
Review:
Very interesting, I look forward to reading the sequel.
Review By [spring] • Date [13 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Bobboky
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Review By [Bobboky] • Date [21 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from purrfus
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Very Quick. I read some of the reviews and your responses, and I agree that the original Halloween episode went fast and most people can fill in the blanks. Your spending more time on the Young Jedi background did make sense as most people reading on this site are generally more likely to be familiar with BtVS then the Young Jedi. This was an interesting mix.

However, this did go too fast. I have never read the Young Jedi books, and the information you supplied was insufficient to give me a clear picture of the charcacters. A list of battles and other character names and a few bits about some family history aren't enough to make them comprehendable.

The story also makes heavy use of an original character without really making her real. Providing a list of background information doesn't really work well in a story format. A little bit of it for personality details or traits, but it generally works better to provide information during conversation between characters allowing the reader to overhear the mutual discovery.

According to the authors notes there is a sequel in which the original character meets Xander, and will need to explain all of this to him. Perhaps 1 longer story world have been more informative as well as more concise then 2 short.

Does the dog remember any of its time as a Voxyn, and does it retain the ability to sense the force or the desire to kill those who use it?
Review By [purrfus] • Date [30 Dec 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Bluesnowman
Review:
Good work.
Review By [Bluesnowman] • Date [28 Nov 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from elfinn
Review:
Please, please hurry up with the sequel!
Comments from author:
Chapter 1 of the sequel is already up at ff.net.
Review By [elfinn] • Date [17 Jul 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Alltorian
Review:
This is a good story. I can't wait for the sequel.
Review By [Alltorian] • Date [7 Mar 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from CPTSkip
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I really liked your story and can't wait to read the sequel. I thought you did a nice job on everyones' characters and will enjoy seeing how the rest of the Scoobies react to Xander the Jedi Knight. Please update ASAP. Lol!
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [6 Mar 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Past Donor)JoeHundredaire
Review:
Sparse, but I didn't expect anything else after reading the other chapters. Word of advice... never expect the readers to know anything other than what you tell them. When in doubt, tell them anyways.
Review By [(Past Donor)JoeHundredaire] • Date [6 Mar 05] • Rating [2 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Thewander
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I am very glad this is not the end of the story. Just the begining. ( Very bad I know but true)
Review By [Thewander] • Date [6 Mar 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from malaskor
Review:
Very good story and I'm looking forward to seeing the follow-up.
But those bold parts, sometimes only snippets of sentences, were a bit anoying and didn't really enhance the story as you probably planned.

Keep it up and thanks for sharing.
Review By [malaskor] • Date [6 Mar 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from med
Review:
love it
Review By [med] • Date [6 Mar 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Worse than a demon" from (Past Donor)JoeHundredaire
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The whole story seems to be very skimpy on details, like you're trying to rush through the actual Halloween side of the story so you can get to the aftermath. Take this chapter for instance. You've got only 6 times where you've used two sentences in a paragraph, the rest are one-liners. And no paragraphs composed of three or more sentences. There's scant detail for those of us who haven't read the massive (last time I checked it was approaching two dozen) New Jedi Order series.
Comments from author:
We've all read Xander Halloween fics before, I believe everybody can easily fill in the blanks.
As for details well, it's not that the stories is all oneliners its just easier for most readers (including me) to read stories that aren't all clumped together.
The New Jedi order finished at 19 books total.
I am not rushing this story, it can't be any slower! The whole origanal episode was just as fast and it wouldn't have worked if it was slower!
Events are happening quickly, that is the nature of CHOAS i.e. the point of Ethan's spell!
Review By [(Past Donor)JoeHundredaire] • Date [2 Mar 05] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Worse than a demon" from Lorency
Review:
Nice chapter. It will be interesting to see what happens next. They will remember right?

Peace out
Review By [Lorency] • Date [2 Mar 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Worse than a demon" from Alltorian
Review:
I love this story so far. I'm quite interested in finding out who the mysterious blonde that Tahiri inhabited. Please keep writing.
Review By [Alltorian] • Date [2 Mar 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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