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Noggin and the Vampire

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Review of chapter "Chapter Five: Conclusion" from cbq
Review:
Very funny, thank you !
I miss the children's tv of my youth, lol
Comments from author:
Thank you! Me too.
Review By [cbq] • Date [10 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five: Conclusion" from (Past Donor)Ponder
Review:
Thanks.

I like how you occasionally show that Spike had a good education, despite his attempts to hide it.

> “Yeah, sodding effulgent of you,” Spike muttered.

*snerk*


> from Los Angeles a blond vampire instead of a blonde vampire.”
*snerk* but... how did they hear... oh nevermind. :)

You might want to take a look at your semicolon usage. It's almost always never correct to mix them with conjunctions. If you've got a conjunction joining clauses, the usual punctuation that goes with it is a comma, or nothing. A semicolon is used to join together independent clauses without a conjunction, or is used to delimit a list that contains non-delimiting commas.

*** Ponder
Comments from author:
Thank you.

I've taken that look at the semicolon usage. I wrote this story a long time ago and my punctuation has improved since then. I noticed that in a couple of places I had used two semicolons within a single sentence and I wouldn't do that now (except to delimit a list that contains non-delimiting commas, not a situation that often occurs in a fic). I've gone through and deleted many of the superfluous semicolons or replaced them with commas.
Review By [(Past Donor)Ponder] • Date [21 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five: Conclusion" from Ezmerelda
Review:
Lovely story, here. I think I may have heard of the Noggins and the Clangers, but never have seen them. Your chapter intros were exactly what one would expect of a cartoon serial, and made a nice addition to the story.

Thanks for writing! ~"~
Comments from author:
Thank you for this lovely feedback! Glad you liked it.
Review By [Ezmerelda] • Date [15 Apr 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five: Conclusion" from Philbass
Review:
Lovely, lovely.

He, he. By the end I was making Ivor the Engine noises.

Very calming, well written and it put me in the mood for a cup of tea and a biscuit.

Thank you very much.

Philip Bass
Comments from author:
I was terrified that the Ivor the Engine bit would disappear into a black hole of reader incomprehension; I'm glad someone knows what I'm talking about! Thank you.
Review By [Philbass] • Date [3 Mar 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five: Conclusion" from Rod
Review:
That was marvellous. Thank you for giving me a bit of my childhood back in such an unexpected way!
Comments from author:
Thanks. I was worried that no-one would have heard of Noggin.
Review By [Rod] • Date [2 Mar 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five: Conclusion" from MarcusRowland
Review:
Lovely to see this here - hope you'll be posting more stories (and writing more crossovers).
Comments from author:
Thanks. Of course, first I'll have to find another fandom I know something about! I don't think Buffy on Ringworld would work, but perhaps I might try Spike or Angel meeting Modesty Blaise some time.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [2 Mar 05] • Not Rated
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