Excellent story. I was completely drawn into the host's point of view. Wasn't Daniel convinced for awhile that the host could communicate through the ribbon device? Maybe she could have tried that. I liked the host's hopes for the tau'ri and her hatred of Hathor. SG-1 inspired her to resist the same way they inspired Teal'c to turn on Apophis. Very cool story and sweet writing style. I look forward to reading more from you.
Good! definitely Good. A very well told story. I loved your characterisation of the host. And how you kept the plot very tight, used only the dialogue from the episode, yet still managed to tell a´very different story.