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Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Review:
He won.

Cool story and excellent challenge response :)
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [23 Dec 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Christy
Review:
An absolutely fabulous story, on par with an Angel episode. Very well done, with good characterization and details.
Review By [Christy] • Date [3 Jun 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Gaeriel
Review:
This was interesting, though I wish you would have gone into detail as to why it was Hermione who was attacked rather than Fred, who was actually in contact with the sarcophogus. I would have also liked for this to have been more fleshed out and with more original dialogue. The majority of the dialogue was lifted from the show and I think that the story could have been made much better if there was some divergence from the events shown on television. That being said, it's an intriguing idea and I hope to see more from you in the future.
Review By [Gaeriel] • Date [2 Jul 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from sapphire
Review:
I thought this story was great but needs a sequel maybe set in the HP universe and they could have them cure Cordy
Review By [sapphire] • Date [2 Jul 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from EvilAuthor
Review:
From the last segment of Wesley's POV, I'm going to take a wild guess and say that Wesley turned back time and changed things so that Illyria infected Hermione instead of Fred. That was why he was knocked out when Fred first went to him.
Review By [EvilAuthor] • Date [2 Jul 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Past Donor)JoeHundredaire
Review:
This whole story rather came out of nowhere... and it's finished all in one day, meaning that any criticism, constructive as it may be, is ultimately useless. At any rate, I'd still like to see longer chapters in whatever work you come up with in the future. Most of the serious authors on here manage at least 1,000 words per chapter, many of them are in the 3,000-5,000 range. It may take longer, but you could have really fleshed the story out a lot better than you did, and the word count reflects that.
Comments from author:
Well, actually, the whole thing was just one big long chapter in my word file. It's fifty-three pages long, or something like that. I separated it up like that to make it easier to read.

As for constructive criticism of other sorts, well, this is not necessarily the last story I'll write, is it? What I could not learn for this, could be helpful for other endeavours.

Thank you for your comments, though. I will look into making the chapters of my next story longer.
Review By [(Past Donor)JoeHundredaire] • Date [2 Jul 05] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from notmydestiny
Review:
This was great. Thanks for answering my challenge, I didn't think anyone would. Please write more, I want to see where you can go with this. You made the ron/hermione work, I liked it.

-ash
Review By [notmydestiny] • Date [31 May 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from SamDragon
Review:
Ok,that was very good.More needed soon please.
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [19 May 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from Lorency
Review:
Oh no! So...is Wesley gonna show up at the castle though his body is in hospital? Did he knew that this was gonna happen?

peace out
Review By [Lorency] • Date [18 May 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from WhiteWolf
Review:
I like it, with the exception that Hermione is so young.
Review By [WhiteWolf] • Date [18 May 05] • Not Rated
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