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Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from Morgomir
Review:
Its very original. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [14 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from APS
Review:
My thought about the fic as a whole.

Great story,
keep up the good work.
Review By [APS] • Date [6 Jan 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
A bit light on personal veiwpoints. I didn't really get any
sort of feel for who Xander was now or what Jinx was
like.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [24 Oct 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from JediKnight
Review:
Great work on this story, I hope I can read the sequel soon. When you do make a sequel here is an idea, have Xander get his original form back but still keep the strength he has as Mammoth. Also, will there be any romantic pairings in the sequels
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [12 Sep 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from VeltaIO
Review:
A great fun start to what promisses to be a very entertaining series. Definitely looking forward to the next installment.
Review By [VeltaIO] • Date [31 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from Elleria
Review:
Looking forward to the sequel. :-)
Review By [Elleria] • Date [29 Aug 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from (Past Donor)AmarinRose
Review:
A very intriguing crossover, and I like how Xander had a latent metagene -- it so could explain how come he never ended up dead. And the ending was great -- it's not the end, it's only the beginning!

I do have one little quibble, though, and that's that you said Dawn was dead, but you mentioned her being in London later.
Comments from author:
Yes, the moment you guys mentioned it I remembered, I originally wrote it to be Faith who calls, but when you are rewriting something at 3 in the morning you tent to lose focus on the paper next to you. Error has been fixed and faith now makes the call, thanks for calling my attention to it.
Review By [(Past Donor)AmarinRose] • Date [28 Aug 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from WhiteWolf
Review:
One, isn't Dawn dead? Two, the slayers and scoobies must at least have been annoyed (at least in mock) that they hadn't left any of the demons for them.
Comments from author:
Yeah, several people noted my Dawn Error, that was supposed to be Faith, but at 3AM stories stop having as much of a focus, I still write okay, but things might have the occasional glitch.

As for the slayers, yeah they might copmlain, but I figure most were in the midst of Hero worship with some of those standing around them, like Green Lantern and Green Arrow.
Review By [WhiteWolf] • Date [28 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from lilsis
Review:
It was good. Only mistake I found was in Ch. 2 you said that Dawn sacrificed herself to save the rest and she was still gone, then in Ch. 4 you said that Dawn was on the vid from the London branch of the WC.
Comments from author:
Yeah, several people caught that, it wasn't actually supposed to be Dawn, and it has now been changed to Faith who was the originally intended person. Late Nights and Too much caffiene can really get to you. Hope you enjoyed the story even with this little glitch though.
Review By [lilsis] • Date [28 Aug 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from Sadfru
Review:
Great story :)
Review By [Sadfru] • Date [27 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from tsukiyomichan
Review:
neat story, kinda like it. only thing i have to say is at one point you say dawn sacrificed herself to the portal, but than you have her later on alive. might just want to iron out that little inconsistency. peace >^^
Comments from author:
Thanks, I have gone back and fixed it. I ment it to be faith but when you are writing at 3AM and you are copying from the peice of paper you originally wrote it on, errors sometimes happen. That and the idea to kill dawn wasn't in my original writing, that came to me when I was doing my rewrite before I posted that chapter, and that probably didn't help.

Glad you enjoyed it despite my screw up.
Review By [tsukiyomichan] • Date [27 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from DanaShort
Review:
Um, one slight continuity problem...

From Chapter 2 -
> The story told to them was far longer. They told them about Glory. How when she came. Graham and Riley
> had come back to help. They told them about Tara assault by Glory. They told them about Dawn. A girl they
> would never know. For she had sacrificed herself to close the portal.
>
> The next year had been the calmest of them. The only real problems came from three morons from school,
> and from Buffy’s depression at the loss of her Mother and Sister. How she had been near self destructive.
> When questioned they learned the fate of the nerds as well. One was dead. One was working for them.
> And Warren had been shot by Graham, while he was trying to shoot Buffy. Warren was currently locked
> in a maximum security prison.
>

Then from your latest chapter:
> “What about Xander?” Asked Dawn, whose somewhat sleepy face was on the screen for London.
>
> Several around the room stopped at that, no one had thought to contact the now Super Hero former
> member of their group.
>
> “Dawn, you have that communicator he sent, right?”
>
> “No, it burned out about a month ago, I don't know why? But I do have another way to call as long
> as they are in their town.”
>

Now, this may be a different Dawn, I don't know. But it confused me.

Otherwise it's a nice story.
Comments from author:
Thanks to all who noticed, cause I really didn't, I wrote this at around 3AM and with having been working on several other fics at once, I think I simply mixed myself up. Error has been fixed to original intended person. Glad you enjoyed it even with my screw up.
Review By [DanaShort] • Date [27 Aug 06] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from Thewander
Review:
Really like this, but didnt you kill off Dawn. then have her back in this part or was it another dawn?
Comments from author:
Yeah, I made a mistake, hazards of your primary writing time being at 3:00 AM, cause the rest of the time I am doing college class work.
Review By [Thewander] • Date [27 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Gathering of Forces" from Bobboky
Review:
cool
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [27 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Kirallie
Review:
Interesting. Poor Xander spending all that time under his control. So what exactly does he look like now?
Review By [Kirallie] • Date [21 Aug 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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