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The Light of the chosen

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Review of chapter "The Light of the chosen" from JennMarie
Review:
It's an interesting concept, but you might want to fix the punctuation problems. Fleshing out the various scenes more would probably help the flow of the story, too. Good luck!
Review By [JennMarie] • Date [25 Sep 06] • Not Rated
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